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chrisnb

Hi Onel5969. I reviewed this article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Disinfect_(band). The sources are now taken from external sources. The band should meet criteria 1 + 5 of the WP:MUSIC. As you can see in the reviews, there are published works and two records where released by two labels, one of them is a more important indie label.

16:50:18, 27 February 2015 review of submission by Leeharrispomeroy

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Leeharrispomeroy (talk) 16:50, 27 February 2015 (UTC) I am trying to resubmit an article on the architect, Lee Harris Pomeroy. the article is at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Lee_Harris_Pomeroy_(2). It has been rejected twice but I have revised it adding many links to Wikipedia sources and other articles. I am new to Wikipedia. Please help me to get this article accepted. thank you Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com

Hi Leeharrispomeroy - Please see WP:CIT on how to format references. Right now, your article technically has zero. What it does have are "raw links" in the body of the article, which is a no-no on Wikipedia. After you make the format corrections, let me know and I'll take a look at it. Right now, it's difficult to assess the article in its current shape. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:35, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Stephen Falk

Good morning! Thanks for helping me with the "Stephen Falk" page. How do I get it to link to the "You're the Worst" page and the "Orange is the New Black" page and the "Weeds" page? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:17, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Hi Janeesussman - I see it was done by Veryproicelandic. So now you can see how it's done. Onel5969 (talk) 12:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

User Rasane, Draft:T.B. Narasimhachar

Hello! I have rewritten my article on T.B. Narasimhachar to avoid copyright violations. Considering that most of his writings were done in pre-internet era, I'm wondering how you'd like me to establish "notability". I've provided as many online links as I could, in the reference section. There is quite a bit of buzz around his works, this being his birth centenary year. I hope you can approve it soon. Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rasane (talk • contribs) 19:18, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Hi Rasane - The copyright issue is much better. Citations to the subject's own writings don't show notability, as they are not independent. Sources need to be from secondary sources about the subject. They also don't have to be online, so if you find references to him in books by other authors, or in newspaper/magazine articles which are not online, you can certainly use them as sources. Right now, the article also has raw links in the body of the article, which are a no-no. You should turn them into references. Also, there is an NPOV issue as well. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:59, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

21:14:53, 27 February 2015 review of submission by Elemont.aide

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I am requesting a re-review because I have edited the same problem multiple times. I keep getting told that I need to cite using footnotes, but somehow every reviewer has decided that a"Footnotes" section, and use of footnotes, don't count as footnotes.

I work for the Senator who is the subject of the article I am trying to publish, I am not just publishing this for kicks and giggles. I have been assigned this article creation by him and several other staffers, so it needs to be published ASAP. I'm not satisfied with the "cite using footnotes" line as a reason for decline because they are VERY OBVIOUSLY used in the article and I've read the recommended pages for using footnotes at least ten times. Trying to keep making these changes is beginning to waste a lot of valuable time. Elemont.aide (talk) 21:16, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Elemont.aide (talk) 21:14, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Elemont.aide, you and the other staffers should check out Wikipedia's guidelines on Conflict of Interest (WP:COI). You cannot create or edit an article about your employer, so it's inappropriate for that to be a task that's assigned to you.

Good luck.

Tung (talk) 21:40, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Hi Elemont.aide - Tung is partially correct. Your close association with the subject needs to be disclosed. I've added the tag to the article's talk page Onel5969 (talk) 13:18, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jimmy Jenkins

user name: matthew.novitzky article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jimmy_Jenkins

You recently rejected my submission. I was hoping to get a break down from you as to why it was rejected. I would appreciate it in as much detail asrwa possible. I am not debating your rejection, I only want this for my notes. Thank you and look forward to hearing for you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Matthew.novitzky (talk • contribs) 06:03, 28 February 2015 (UTC)

Hi Matthew.novitzky - It just doesn't appear this person meets the notability requirements. They have founded two non-notable entities. That's their claim to fame. Without more in-depth coverage, I don't see an article here. Sorry. Onel5969 (talk) 13:33, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Olympic Animal Sanctuary Draft

Hi,

What do you need?

The OAS draft has 25 verifiable and RELIABLE sources that tell the OAS story.

"NOT" included in the draft is any personal attack of the director regarding him attacking a protestor or his criminal background.

There is no way to make this article into a story about a wonderful, warm and fuzzy animal sanctuary. That is NOT factual!!!

None of the draft is my opinion or expresses my opinion in any way.

The entire draft is 100% factual and only facts, with references to prove such without a shadow of a doubt!!

If you can be of any assistance, it will be greatly appreciated. :-)

Thank you very much for being part of Wiki, it is a very valuable asset!!!

Ron Smith

Rsmith127 (talk) 17:21, 28 February 2015 (UTC)

Hi Rsmith127 - If you made the story it would fail based on an NPOV issue. That's not the problem. The issue is the article reads very informally. For example, the "Snaps" story doesn't belong in an encyclopedic article. You actually do a very good job of NOT having an NPOV issue (one way or another) in the Neglect section, but the entire section is written as if you're telling your friends the story, not writing an article. For example, the first sentence, "In the fall of 2012, former volunteers who had worked at the sanctuary, alleged the dogs were suffering from neglect." is in a very informal tone. A better way (and this is just an example, one of many possible avenues) might be: "In ___________ 2012, allegations of neglect were made by former volunteers of the shelter." I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:27, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Can this page be published?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Don_Pendleton_(artist)

User name oogatha

Don Pendleton won a Grammy in 2015. Does he meet notability guidelines now? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oogatha (talk • contribs) 03:07, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Oogatha - If he won a Grammy, that is definitely one of the criteria as per WP:NMUSIC. Add a reference, and he should be approved, based on that alone. However, there are other issues with the article. For example, the quotes section should go away; the references need to be properly formatted (see WP:CIT); and there are other, little, formatting issues (italicizing titles of films, section heading capitalization). Once you correct those things, resubmit. Onel5969 (talk) 13:37, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Unsigned comment about unknown article

Just curious, which two sources are the non-notable entities and why? Have a great day! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2602:302:D90:CE39:CC1A:8B6F:9D28:8861 (talk) 16:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

RE: Olympic Animal Sanctuary

Your suggestions are very helpful. :-)

The Snaps article was included to show some of the success OAS had, my attempt at a NPOV. It will be removed.

I'll rewrite the article and formalize the tone.

IMO, the article reads similar to the "Bad Newz Kennels dog fighting investigation" article that is already published on Wiki...??

Unlike Bad Newz Kennels, there was never a real investigation of OAS and abuse charges were never filed. The owner simply succumbed to the protests and decided to close OAS on his own accord. No real story on that issue.

Thanks, Ron

Rsmith127 (talk) 17:19, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Tradesy

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you so much for reading the wikipedia article I submitted. I know the first one which was written by our former writer was not from a neutral point of view, but we did make considerable changes for the current one making sure it's from a neutral point of view and with sources cited. You can see where the citations came from. I understand why the first article was rejected, however, this one seems to meet the guidelines. Were your concerns about any particular paragraph?

I'm a long time supporter of wikipedia and I love what it stands for, however, I would really appreciate additional feedback about what needs to change to meet the guidelines. Everything in this article is cited and from a neutral tone of voice.

Thank you for your feedback and your assistance.

ElizaSh (re: Tradesy article) — Preceding unsigned comment added by ElizaSh (talk • contribs) 02:53, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi ElizaSh - phrases such as "platform enables users to to buy and sell", "Tradesy charges a 9% seller commission", "provides free shipping" are all advertising. In addition phrases like "DiNunzio envisioned an expansion of the peer-to-peer concept, from a weddings related marketplace to a broader, women’s clothing resale site." are definitely NPOV in nature. When the history section deals mostly with $$ raises, that doesn't help either. Right now, the subject only seems to be notable because they raised money.Onel5969 (talk) 03:41, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you. That's very helpful. I'll revise and try again. ElizaSh — Preceding unsigned comment added by ElizaSh (talk • contribs) 03:58, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

04:40:15, 2 March 2015 review of submission by 216.49.47.213

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  • Draft:Michael Stephans (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN:

When profiling me for its own website, PLAZA NOIR used my own personally written bio on its link. It is basically the same bio found on my OWN website <www.michaelstephans.com>, and in the Encyclopedia of Jazz (Lewis Porter, Ed.), and on the jazz website, <www.allaboutjazz.com> and on my author page at amazon.com.

This and other data was submitted on my behalf initially by Mr. Gene Perla MONTHS ago and has been refined several times according to guidelines established by Wikipedia. Please advise as to how this process might be expedited. It appears to be dragging on and on, e.g., One reviewer requests that a modification be made; the modification is completed -- only to have the draft rejected by another reviewer. THIS HAS BEEN A VERY DRAWN OUT, FRUSTRATING PROCESS!!! Please advise how AND WHAT EXACTLY to modify/update/correct/whatever, so we can get on with this, fix it, and get this entry up and running. We need YOUR HELP, PLEASE !!

Michael Stephans, Ph.D. stephans@michaelstephans.com bluejazz9@earthlink.net mstephan@bloomu.edu

216.49.47.213 (talk) 04:40, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Michael - Sorry you feel frustrated. I looked at the history of the draft, and I can only see where it's been declined once prior to my declining it a couple of weeks ago. Sometimes, as editors, if we get severely backlogged on reviewing drafts, we don't have time to list all the issues with an article. We should, that way a page author can deal with everything at once. So here are the issues with the article. First, there is a potential conflict of interest, this close relationship does not preclude your friend from writing the article, but does mean that editors will look closely at any potential neutral point of view issues. While your article does not necessarily have any NPOV issues, the overall informal tone of the article can make it appear so; this is the second issue with the article (and another that it would be declined for). Phrases like "and many others", "Stephans leads three distinct but interrelated lives", "played with personalities", give the article an informal, un-encyclopedic tone. The third issue is the same issue which was mentioned by the previous editor who gave a link to help with the formatting of citations, which still needs to be corrected. The fourth issue is formatting, please see WP:MOS for how to format album, book, song, and article names. The fifth issue is the copyvio one. If you want to donate the material, the process is detailed at WP:DCM. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:19, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Jef Boeke

Hi,

This in reference to this page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jef_Boeke.

I have changed the copyrighted paragraph. Please take a look at it again.

FYI, I found that on another page on wikipedia. You might want to take a look at that page as well: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yeast_artificial_chromosome#Full_chromosome — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 04:54, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Howareyou120 - The second paragraph is still almost cut and paste from THIS SITE. Also, please see WP:CIT on how to format citations. Once you make those corrections, let me know and I'll approve it to the mainspace. In anticipation of that, I put the wikilink on the other page you referenced above. Onel5969 (talk) 13:31, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi again, I've made changes again. Hope they article is ok now! If not, please point me to specific changes that are required.

Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 23:12, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi again Howareyou120 - now all that's needed is to fix the formatting of the citations. Onel5969 (talk) 03:15, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Hey again, I've edited the citations to fit Wikipedia's format. Take a look and let me know! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 02:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 09:06:49, 2 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Tcannonrb

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Hi

Thanks for your review. Could you advise on how best to make changes so I can publish?

Would emailing permissions-en@wikimedia.org and granting permission to copy material (specifically the press release work)? We own the copyright. If so what should the email cover and is there specific wording?

I read that I should then place OTRS pending on the talk page?

Thanks Again

Tcannonrb (talk) 09:06, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Tcannonrb - the process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. The references to the benefits of folks who use the survey should be deleted, as they are promotional in nature. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:55, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 thanks for that - Is it all the references or specific ones? Also is that the main issue or is it a copyright issue? If so which bits? Trying to figure out the best course of action. Tcannonrb (talk) 14:43, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Tcannonrb - The article also has a promotional tone to it. Articles should TELL us about the subject, not provide SALES information. The second and third paragraphs are clearly promotional in nature. Also an issue with the International Accommodation Quality Mark wording. Onel5969 (talk) 03:21, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 I have made a number of changes to sourcing and wording. If you could look to see if this is better that would be great then I will resubmit. So you know I have also only kept the references of those who benefit where they have demonstrated how they use the survey operationally. I think I have removed the ones where it was used for an award win etc. (Tcannonrb (talk) 11:23, 4 March 2015 (UTC))

Article Submission

Hey there, Onel5969, thanks for reviewing my article draft. I actually have a question regarding one of my submissions. I'm not quite sure about the notability of organizations (I did have some secondary sources?)? Do you mind taking the time to explain this to me as well as 'verifiability?' Site: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Emerging_Strategy Thanks a lot! Debtang1019 (talk) 09:51, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Debtang1019 - most of the sources you have are for verifying purposes - meaning that they verify the underlying facts of the article. Notability are overall articles from secondary, reliable sources (that are not niche sources), showing that subject is notable). Onel5969 (talk) 03:45, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Ruggero Vanni

Hello Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing the page I submitted: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Ruggero_Vanni

I have been leaving in the States for 25 years but I got my degree in contemporary art history in Italy and I know that my written English is not perfect. Before resorting to take your time, I did try to understand where the problem with my footnotes resides, but I don't quite see where I failed to meet the proper criteria. I would greatly appreciate if you could guide me on how to address this problem. I really want to learn how to properly write my submissions because I intend to write entries on several accomplished artists. But before waisting more time of Wikipedia's editors, I would like to make sure I am on the right track.

Thank you,

ValeJaba Valejaba (talk) 15:28, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Stephen Falk orphan

Stephen Falk's page says it's in an orphan. What should I do with this? Please advise!! Many thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:11, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Janeesussman - in the announcement box, there's a "find links tool". Click it, and it will bring up a list of potential articles which refer to Falk. Some will not refer to the Falk your article is on, but some will. Open the link to the new article, then edit that article, by putting double brackets around the first reference to Stephen Falk, like I've done here. After you do that for all the pertinent articles (you don't have to do it for all of them, but since this is the article you created, you may want to), you can remove the tag at the top of Falk's page. It's not that difficult. Onel5969 (talk) 17:36, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Nsolcis

hi, my name is nsolcis you denied my request to add my article about Leba on wikipedia, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:LeBA It seems your are requiring more links from notable print or websites? how many are needed?

thank you for your help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nsolcis (talk • contribs) 17:32, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Nsolcis - there's no set number. Right now you only have one good citation for notability purposes: the South Bend article, and since more than half of it is an interview, even that is not great (interviews are primary sources, and notability references need to be secondary sources). The LA Mag citation is okay, but very brief. YouTube is not a trustworthy source, and the RS citation doesn't even mention the article's subject, in fact, it appears to contradict some of the information in the article, since it says the mural was solely done by someone else. The other two citations are simple listings, which are good to verify facts in the article, but not for notability purposes. Just my opinion, but I would say you should find at least 3 more good references. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:58, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Rejection of correction to wiki Non Evans

Correction of https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Non_Evans by BancAtebion

Greetings. You recently rejected my submission to amend an incorrect Date Of Birth and its corroborating reference. What further evidence is required to allow reversion to the accurate data?

In anticipation of your feedback,

BancAtebion (newbie Contributor) BancAtebion (talk) 18:09, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi BancAtebion, and welcome to Wikipedia! Just add a source. Right now, there is a source listed in the lead of the article (the first paragraph), which is a "dead link". But the fact that there was a link, makes me want to have a new source in order to change the date of birth. Happy editing. Onel5969 (talk) 14:01, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969, I am now more confused by the rejection as my submission included an update to the dead link which corroborated the correction. BancAtebion (talk) 00:33, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

18:58:51, 2 March 2015 review of submission by JPanic15

• JPanic15 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Daniel Panetta (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hey there,

I just wanted to get a bit more info on what elements specifically you found lacking a formal tone in the Daniel Panetta article. I've made a couple adjustments to keep things concise, but I'd appreciate any additional feedback from yourself.

Regards,

-JPanic15

JPanic15 (talk) 18:58, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi JPanic15 - I think the corrections you made, although slight, have gotten rid of the informal tone of the prior version. Nice work. I think, however, that you might need another couple of good references to show his notability. At least one of the CTV links is dead (as happens frequently with links to videos, that's why they are not used often). Onel5969 (talk) 14:12, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

20:49:33, 2 March 2015 review of submission by Bobowikibobo

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Bobowikibobo (talk) 20:49, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your suggestions for improving this submission. The question that I have is how to show evidence of "notability." The subject of the article is an academic and author of books in his field. Should I add references and quotes from independent reviews of these works. About 20 published reviews of these works have appeared in scholarly publications, and a large number of citations of research reports have appeared. Should I add quotations from these sources in the different sections of the Wikipedia article?

Hi Bobowikibobo - regarding notability, take a look at WP:NACADEMICS on what would make an academic notability. The reviews are good things, and you can list them under references, like you currently have done for the 3 there. Quotes should only be used to make certain points. Also, please take a look at WP:MOS and MOS:LAYOUT for formatting tips (e.g., don't add bold or italics to section headings). Hope this helps Onel5969 (talk) 14:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969, I hope the quotes fit into the overall scheme of the article. I looked for passages that elaborated on ideas already mentioned. One of the references was critical of the research of the author, which I think makes the article more interesting for readers. Thanks for the format suggestion on bold and italics. ˜˜˜˜Bobowikibobo — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bobowikibobo (talk • contribs) 01:57, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

My article "Saul Bron”

USERNAME: Ethersearch RE: My article "Saul Bron” https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saul_Bron

Dear Editor - Just wanted to let you know that I have done some clean-up, added inline references, and created a few back links. Hope it helps. Looking forward to your review but no rush, obviously.

Thank you for your help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ethersearch (talk • contribs) 21:21, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Call Center Pros

Could you please have another look at this one - I've already added one {tl|backwardscopy]] on the talk page - I've now added another one. The original text comes from a deleted Wikipedia article (by the same author) at Call Center Pros - created 11:59, 2 January 2015 - well before any other web copies. Thanks. Ron. Ronhjones  ^(Talk) 22:52, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

P.S. I've now merged the histories of the two pages - hopefully that will help. Ronhjones  ^(Talk) 23:01, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ronhjones - I understand the one reverse cw, but the press release was done on the same day as the original article (per the page history), and personally I don't see how a PR could be taken from Wikipedia. I mean, what company does that? Even if the article's cw issue is resolved, the article still has additional problems: reading like an advertisement, notability, and lack of inline citations. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:10, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Re: Camellia Posoncuy's Article

Dear Sir,

I would just like to seek clarification as what you meant by citation by virtue of footnotes. I think I have already addressed this as all referenced statements are already using footnotes.

Please note that majority of the article is cited through an interview with Dr Posoncuy last year. Thank you!

LinK: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Camellia_Posoncuy

aljolar — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aljolar (talk • contribs) 06:07, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Aljolar - please click on the link in the box on the draft to learn about in-line citations, and where they are necessary. If the only source for the claims in the article is an interview, that could prove problematic, since interviews are primary sources, and Wikipedia prefers secondary sources. Onel5969 (talk) 13:09, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 11:30:04, 3 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Naamam118

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Hi, I am not sure which information you are referring to as copyright... Can you be more specific so I can rectify my listing?

Thanks Naama

Naamam118 (talk) 11:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi, thank you so much for your prompt review and feedback. Regarding your remarks on my listing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Dynamic_Mindset_Advertising_(DMA)

You mentioned that it resembles http://www.theesa.com/article/women-comprise-nearly-half-gamer-population/ - however, please note that this article is used merely as a reference to the market size, where I brought the research results showing the large % of women gamers - and I did indeed cite theesa as a reference (see citation 3).

Can you please be more specific as to what I need to correct in order to improve this listing?

Many thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Naamam118 (talk • contribs) 11:54, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Naamam118 - The paragraph beginning with "The Market", seems to be almost completely cut and paste from that underlying source. That's the c/w issue. In addition, their is not enough context in this article to explain what the article is about if a reader is unfamiliar with the concepts being discussed. Finally, please see WP:CIT on how to format the references. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:36, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you Onel5969 (talk) so much for your prompt reply. Corrected and re-submitted.

Naamam118 (talk) 17:15, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft article rejection

Hello - I've just seen that an article I submitted for review - Draft:Teenage_Time_Killers - has been rejected following your review, with the feedback that it is not written in the "encyclopedic" style that is expected. I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so. Many thanks Burlington Bert (talk) 12:01, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Burlington Bert - First, use of peacock terms like "supergroup", "famed"; and terms like: "The list of guest artists then grew from there", give the article an informal feel. Coupled with the fact that a large part of the article is taken up by a quote and a list of performers, and the article and the article reads informally. Also, please see WP:CIT on how to properly format your citations. Onel5969 (talk) 14:03, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft article rejection

Hello - Thank you for reviewing my article - Draft:VBox_Home_TV_Gateway - I saw that you rejected it as it is not written in the encyclopedic. I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so. Many thanks User:Rimavich (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 13:39, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Regarding Page Declined

Hi Onel5969,

I have seen that you guys again declined my page entry. May i know what things i should do in order to get this page published. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Goods_Order_Inventory_System_(2)

PS: I have already tried my best to remove whatsoever Advertising content from my perspective.

Please let me know what else i can do.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon.

Regards, Susheel — Preceding unsigned comment added by Susheelseth25 (talk • contribs) 14:22, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Susheelseth25 - The article needs to tell us about the company, not sell the company's products. Phrases like "which has grown to address inventory recording and management needs of business enterprises" are promotional in nature. When you take into account the brevity of the article, that one sentence gives it an overall advertising aspect. Onel5969 (talk) 14:17, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

The Morris Quinlan Experience

The Morris Quinlan Experience

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Morris_Quinlan_Experience — Preceding unsigned comment added by LeoTheDobermann (talk • contribs) 14:54, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello

You've just declined this article (3rd March 2015) on the grounds of not being sufficiently notable. However, I believe at least two of Wikipedia's notability guidelines are indeed met for this ensemble, as follows...

"1. Has been the subject of multiple, non-trivial, published works appearing in sources that are reliable, not self-published, and are independent from the musician or ensemble itself.[note 1] This criterion includes published works in all forms, such as newspaper articles, books, magazine articles, online versions of print media, and television documentaries[note 2] except for the following: Any reprints of press releases, other publications where the musician or ensemble talks about themselves, and all advertising that mentions the musician or ensemble, including manufacturers' advertising.[note 3]

Works consisting merely of trivial coverage, such as articles that simply report performance dates, release information or track listings, or the publications of contact and booking details in directories."

Album reviews in The Times and Melody Maker, as well as the feature article in the Newcastle Journal were all independently written, and despite being unavailable online, are all verifiable.

"12. Has been a featured subject of a substantial broadcast segment across a national radio or TV network."

Does not the group's live appearance as guests on Ned Sherrin's Loose Ends programme on BBC Radio 4 (Saturday 11th August 2001) count here? It was a segment of approaching 10 minutes duration, during which Sherrin gave a lengthy introduction to the band, and talked further about them after their live performance of one of their pieces, all in front of a live audience. Most notably, the segment was repeated on the Loose Ends Pick Of The Year show at the end of 2001.

The band can not yet claim 'rotation' play for any of their releases, but they are regulars on Bob Harris's BBC Radio 2 Sunday Show (considered to be a very influential rock music programme, if not the most influential currently on UK radio), and indeed a playlist search shows they have received more Bob Harris plays than even (for instance) Kate Bush!!!

That said their most recent singe release 'Scarborough Fair' received multiple plays on the Radio 2 network, not just from Bob Harris.

BBC Radio 4 and BBC Radio 2 are major national radio networks in the UK.

One of the band's members, Dave Maughan, is well known as a record producer, having recorded and produced Mercury Music Prize nominated Little Black Numbers album by Kathryn Williams, who herself has guested on an MQE released track. Would it be helpful to this article if Dave Maughan had a Wikipedia entry?

Hoping you can reconsider the article...

LeoTheDobermann (talk) 16:29, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Bbentllc

Hi there, I really need some help. I have looked at other articles and ours has been declined https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Elizabeth_%27Lizzie%27_Sophia_Sider This is what you wrote to me This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms, that are designed to promote or show-off the subject. It seems pretty formal to me. Can you please be more specific? This is kind of frustrating as I am not a great writer and this is one of our clients and I would love to get this resolved. Any specific help at all would be greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time. Bbentllc (talk) 18:16, 3 March 2015 (UTC)bbentllc

Bbentllc - First of all, you have the trivia of her singing national anthems in the lead. Second, you have this long, completely uncited, section on musical beginnings, which is mostly again trivia. That entire section could be cut down to 3-4 lines. Comments about donations also don't belong in the article. Also make sure that facts like chart #'s, and views need citations. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:48, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 18:55:50, 3 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by PsychiatricRN

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PsychiatricRN (talk) 18:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC) Thank you so much, Onel5969

I made some edits which I will resubmit. Can you give me a little more direction about the problem with my citations. Do I have too many or is it just the format?

Thank you so much. I really want to get this nurse on Wikipedia and am overwhelmed about the deficiencies but will try to fix ASAP. I also sent permission by the family to use her WWI photo to the wikipedia address for such matters. PsychiatricRN (talk) 18:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN

Hi PsychiatricRN - nice job. I moved it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 14:56, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

20:15:57, 3 March 2015 review of submission by Bcooper87

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Thank you again for all your help. I have rewritten the article and removed the sentences you recommended. I have resubmitted the article. If you get a chance, can you take a quick look and let me know if I am on the right track.

Bcooper87 (talk) 20:15, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Benefitalign

Hi, Please help me understand more about why the article was rejected. I have written information verified by third party publications like ABQ Business First news paper. Please let me know why the reference links articles were not considered to be verifiable sources. Also I would highly appreciate it if you could help me understand which part of the content - sentences or paragraphs - were considered to be promotional.

Thank You, Daks Dakshinat.maratt (talk) 21:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Dakshinat.maratt - avoid promotional spin. Stuff that includes lists of products, product specs, and benefits to customers/consumers should be removed. Just facts about the company. Onel5969 (talk) 14:59, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

01:39:31, 4 March 2015 review of submission by Bobowikibobo

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Bobowikibobo (talk) 01:39, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

I think I’ve found a good solution to fix the defect in the submission. Among the many reviews of the author’s books and the hundreds of citations in journals, I found a representative sample of scholars and research scientists in the field who have evaluated the work of this project in professional peer-reviewed publications. In the article I inserted quotations from these authors: Alexis Kirke and Eduardo Miranda (Plymouth University) Jane Hill (University of Arizona) Yi Xu (University of Pittsburg) Mihye Han (University of New Mexico) Vasiliki Chondrogianni (Bangor University). I was careful to select quotes that would actually be interesting to the reader and had content directly related to the themes in the article. As soon as I proofread the article, I’ll resubmit. Thanks again for your help. ˜˜˜˜Bobowikibobo

02:37:01, 4 March 2015 review of submission by PsychiatricRN

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PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:37, 4 March 2015 (UTC) Hi, I think I know what I need to do with the citations. I have to hyperlink the number to the reference, correct?

Thank you for your help. Is there anything else I need to change? I made some edits and I would like to add back the picture of Adele in WW I uniform. I sent an email giving permission to Wikipedia from the family of Adele.

PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:37, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN

My Adele Poston article

Hi, Thank you for reviewing my Adele Poston contribution back in January! I was happy to see you are a New Yorker! You probably moved to get away from the snow but it's really lovely snowing this evening!

Anyway, I made some of your suggested changes to the document, but was confused about the citations. I think I need to hyperlink every number to the citation, correct? Is the form okay just not the linking to the citations?

I would also like to add back the photo of Adele from WWI which someone removed. I sent an email from her living family who own the photo, with their permission, to Wikipedia email address. Is there anything else I need to do? Thanks so much.

This is my first attempt at putting something on Wikipedia and I'm a bit overwhelmed!

PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN

Hi Onel5969. I have taken care of formatting the citations, and the article is ready for review and (hopefully) publication. Draft:Adele Poston. Cheers, -- Diannaa (talk) 03:26, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Diannaa - the citations are fine. As I said above, I moved it to the mainspace. Regarding the photo, not until you have received permission and documented it, can you use it. Nice first effort. Onel5969 (talk) 15:13, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Acoustic liner

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Acoustic_liner

First and foremost thanks for reviewing my article.

I can understand your comment about terms like "basically" or "interesting evolution". On the other hand, I do not understand why while I cite a reference using something like "as shown by Jones et.el.[5]" is giving the feeling that this is an informal essay. This is the way I cite references on my scientific articles. Should I use a different way to cite an article on wikipedia?

Thanks for the clarification.

Best regards Dr.eng.dc (talk) 12:04, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Dr.eng.dc - on Wikipedia, you simply state the fact, then give the reference to back it up. You don't even need to use any part of that. For instance, the sentence could simply read: "The acoustic liners' performance can be verified by means of ground tests on real scale engines", with the two reference notes at the end. Onel5969 (talk) 03:37, 5 March 2015 (UTC)made

Ok, thank you. I have the modifications. Best regards Dr.eng.dc (talk) 07:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Wikipedia:Miscellany for deletion/Draft:Zulficar Moussa

You are invited to join the discussion at Wikipedia:Miscellany for deletion/Draft:Zulficar Moussa. You've reviewed this draft before. Thanks. APerson (talk!) 14:08, 4 March 2015 (UTC)Template:Z48

https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Interflora&oldid=prev&diff=649846513

Hi, is it wrong listing some of interflora competition? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Greenvalds (talk • contribs) 15:08, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

APerson - No, it was more of the fact that you used the phrase, "The online flower industry has vastly grown in the past decade.", then listed the competitors, all without citations. Onel5969 (talk) 03:39, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Adele Poston

Dear Onel5969, Thank you so much for your help! I am so excited and will look at how to make it a higher class article. Thank you for taking me under your wing. This has been an interesting learning process. I am very interested in WWI, too, and especially nursing in WWI. I am in process of clarifying copyright issues so her WWI photo can be uploaded.

Diannaa (editor) also helped me and I am grateful to both of you. I heard from the permission person and am investigating the photo copyright further. I hope to get her on a USPS postage stamp so these efforts are doubly important!!

Best wishes, Carolyn/ PsychiatricRN (talk) 15:24, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN

Good job, PsychiatricRN - keep on editing. Don't hesitate to aske questions. Onel5969 (talk) 03:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you, One15969! I will definitely contact you again if I have questions. The photo appeared this afternoon (good news) so I just emailed the permission person to see what made the difference with that. I am assuming it is because of the date of the photo. Thanks for being such a huge help to all of us novice contributors! PsychiatricRN (talk) 03:58, 5 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN

15:41:31, 4 March 2015 review of submission by Xpediabrown

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Thanks Onel5969 for reviewing my article. It's my first attempt, so I obviously still have a lot to learn. Would you be able to give me some suggestions? Is the entire article too informal or are the bits about education too strong? I'm about to start editing but am afraid to make it worse. The page is here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_School_FundXpediabrown (talk) 15:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Xpediabrown (talk) 15:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Xpediabrown - It's not far from being there, but as I said in my comment, your passion shows through. The big issue is the history section with all of its stories. That really needs to be cut significantly, and just state the facts. Onel5969 (talk) 03:45, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

finding an editor to write an article about Lee Harris Pomeroy.

It has been suggested by Justlettersandnumbers at Wikipedia that I may have a conflict of interest in writing this article. I am an employee of Lee Harris Pomeroy Architects. If that disqualifies me from submitting an unbiased article about a noteworthy architect, can you help me in finding an editor at Wikipedia who would be interested in taking on this subject? Thank you, Joan Ratner Director of Communications Lee Harris Pomeroy Architects jratner@lhparch.com 212 334 2600 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 17:54, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

I have revised the references as you recommended. Please check and let me know if I am on the right track. thank you, Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 20:34, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Leeharrispomeroy (Joan) - Your close connection does not preclude you from writing the article, but it does mean that other editors are going to look very closely at it. I don't mind lending a hand. No, the references aren't fixed. I might not be able to get to it for a day or two (I'm working on some things). If I don't get to it by Sunday, give me a shout here to remind me. Onel5969 (talk) 03:51, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for reviewing my article Roots Millennium Schools

Hello Onel5969!

I hope you're doing good. This is Zeeshan Shafquat from Pakistan. I just noticed that you reviewed my article for creation Roots Millennium Schools, and approved it. I would like to thank you for that. And I will keep continuing to improve this Wiki and writing more Wiki articles concerning my community.

Cheers & Best Regards, Bites85 (talk) 23:48, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 04:09:29, 5 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Reelnrod007

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My proposed article for Dennis M Gillespie was declined, I am not a writer, scholor or anything of the sort, but this is a story with many common formulas and the denominator is this Navy commander. I do not wish to slander him. I am the male sailor submitting the UCMJ Article 138 Complaint with the assistance of Congressman Tom Bevill. My issue is well after the tail hook scandle and and ordnance accident burning AO3 Brian Powers (my shipmate) and the infamous "Tea and Cookies" comment. I had a bad expierience well before all the female pilots and ordnance mishap aboard USS Saratoga. I have A copy of the investigation on pdf aproximately 200 pages; the response is libleous to me, but all things considered I demanded a court-martial but was refused. However I was allowed to complete my final fifty-four months with an Honorable discharge. I was at quarters when Commander Michael Longworth pinned the Silver Star on Gillespie in 1988. A lot of story about this infamous man, but one cannot source this type information I possess anywhere on the WWW furthermore the national archives refused to release it, but I finally got the CNO to release it to me simply because I made the complaint. I do not have much free time, but if someone would like my info to gain insight how the military cleverly covers-up wrong doing; it shall be an interesting read. My email is jleftwich8362@att.net thank you for the time and help submitting a 200 page pdf Reelnrod007 (talk) 04:09, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Reelnrod007 - The issue is that while sources don't necessarily have to be accessible over the internet, they do have to be accessible to the public. If they're not, that pretty much amounts to original research, which is a no-no on Wikipedia. Especially if the information is contentious, or might be deemed defamatory in any way. Thanks for sharing your story, though, and thank you for your service. Onel5969 (talk) 13:52, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Christopher Carter article

Hello, thank you for the pointers on my submission

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Christopher_Carter

I plan to seek our the secondary independent sources you cited were not adequate when you declined my submission. I hope on the next submission of my revised article on Christopher Carter it will meet Wiki standards and gain your approval.

Best,

Carroll F. Gray

Onel5969 (talk) 13:30, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Carroll F. Gray - First, please always sign your comments with the four ~ , that way other editors can understand which editor they are speaking with. Second, sorry about your attempts to message me. Another editor who had left a prior message had left some code in their message which hid anything written after it, so your attempts did not show. I've corrected that.

Now, on to about what you are truly interested in, your article. Aside from the citation issue, there are a few other changes you should make. First, lose the dialogue between the subject and an interviewer. Doesn't belong in an encyclopedia article. Instead, transform it into prose and in your own words describe the gist of that conversation, then use the current citation to back up that prose. Second, the long list of exhibitions, etc. should also be converted into prose, with the reference to the subject's CV used at the end. I've temporarily reformatted based on it as a list, but prose is always stronger. Hit the highlights, and add a summation. Third, after the Hollingsworth quote, the next paragraph deals with "him". Is this referring to Hollingsworth? Or the article's subject? It's unclear. Fourth, check your redlinks. Several actually do have wikipages, you simply haven't connected to them correctly, e.g. Grand Rapids Art Museum instead of Grand Rapids Arts Museum. Fifth, and finally, check out WP:CIT regarding how to format your references. Anyway, hope this helps, and keep on editing! Onel5969 (talk) 13:45, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Apotichnyj

Hi Onel5969,

My username is Apotichnyj.

You edited a wiki page I completed. Can you help me make the appropriate changes to the page so that it can pass your approval process.

I thought the references were good and the content was not marketing.

Please help me.

Thanks

Alex

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:BitGold — Preceding unsigned comment added by Apotichnyj (talk • contribs) 14:01, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Stephen Falk

My article on Stephen Falk is an orphan and I can't figure out how to remedy this!! Can you help me? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:59, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Janeesussman - On the page, in the orphan box is a "Find tool link". Click on that, and it will show you pages on which Falk is mentioned. I find it easier to bring the other pages up in a separate tab, and then find Falk's name. Once you do that, you can edit that section of the other article, and simply put a wikilink around Falk's name, like this: Stephen Falk. I did the page for You're the Worst, so you can review what I did on that page. Good luck. Onel5969 (talk) 18:06, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

But I don't see how it's done! And I still have to link it to: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weeds_(TV_series) and https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Orange_Is_the_New_Black — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 18:07, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Janeesussman - First, Weeds and Orange are already linked, so I'm not sure what you mean by that. Regarding the other links, click on the Find link tool. Have you done that? It will bring up a list of articles. The fourth one on the list is Next Caller. Click on the "view article" link. It will bring up the article in a new window. Now it takes a bit of time. You have to manually search the article for Falk's name. In this case it's not that difficult, since he created the show, he's in the infobox. Then simply click the edit button, and put wikilinks [[]] around his name, then save. Onel5969 (talk) 18:17, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 19:54:30, 5 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Xpediabrown

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Thanks for the advice. I trimmed back and tried to stick just to the facts that define the topic. I also tried to tone down the language throughout. I hope this next submission is more in line with the requirements. I really appreciate all of your help.Xpediabrown (talk) 19:54, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Xpediabrown (talk) 19:54, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Nicely done, Xpediabrown! I know how hard it is to be objective when you have strong feelings about a subject. Congrats! I moved the article to the mainspace. Just be aware of maintaining that neutrality if you make any further edits to it. Onel5969 (talk) 13:35, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 21:01:21, 5 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Lundianer

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Hello, how is it that the subject of the article was deemed notable for the German language Wikipedia, but not for the English version? The references indicate that the painter was featured in an international charity auction, and he has an upcoming exhibition, so if members of the public want to know more, is that not a criterion? ThanksLundianer (talk) 21:01, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Lundianer (talk) 21:01, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Lundianer - can't speak to how other wikis determine notability, only that this article did not meet English Wikipedia's notability criteria. Remember, that does not mean that the subject is not notable, only that the citations provided did not show that notability. Look at the guidelines to see what types of articles are good for notability. There are two types of references, those for verifiability (to prove specific claims or facts in the article), and those for notability (broad, in-depth pieces by reliable, secondary sources). If you look at the 5 sources in your article, #1 doesn't even mention Scholten; #2 is a bio from a gallery, so it is not independent; #3 - he's only part of a lengthy list; #4 - again, simply part of a list; #5 isn't about the article's subject at all.

In addition, the article has serious formatting issues. Please take a look at WP:MOS, MOS:LAYOUT, and Wikipedia:Your first article to learn how to format an article. Also, take a look at WP:CIT to learn how to fix the citations' formats. Onel5969 (talk) 13:58, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Could use some help with this article as all the info is scientific and technical in nature

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Polygon_Laser_scan_head — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bkuyp (talk • contribs) 21:34, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bkuyp - The issue right now is finding reliable, secondary sources which talk about this technology. I did a brief search and all I could find were press releases, which are not independent. Without these sources, the article might not get approved, since it isn't notable by Wikipedia's standards. Since it is so technical, I can't really help with finding sources, since I am unsure whether a source deals with this topic. For example, I found THIS, THIS, THIS, THIS, and THIS. Not sure any of these help, but you'll need to find articles which talk about the engineering, and then use them to back up specifics in the article, or simply as general references. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:15, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback. I will get right on that as I totally understand, this being a relatively new technology that is needed to make high speed Femto and Picosecond lasers work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bkuyp (talk • contribs) 20:11, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

21:45:33, 5 March 2015 review of submission by Bingo620

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Hi, I was wondering if you could give me some advice or highlight areas I need to work on to improve this page so it meets wikipedia's guidlines. Thanks. Bingo620 (talk) 21:45, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bingo620 - You need to tell us about the subject, not sell it to us. Additionally, remove all trademark and copyright symbols. Most of the article, unfortunately, reads like an advert. The History section is okay. But almost all the stuff in the research section needs to be deleted, and summarized in a neutral way, without specifics which are only of interest to potential customers. Obviously, same with the custom services. Onel5969 (talk) 14:27, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 05 March 2015 for assistance on Draft:Rogers Partners Architects+Urban Designers and Draft:Robert M. Rogers submissions by schung17

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing the drafts. Could you advise on specific changes I could make so the firm and architect profile can go up? I'm a fan of the firm's architecture and have been trying to get the entries to go live for months now after making dozens of revisions based on comments from editors in the real-time chat page and also from the initial reviewer who looked at the pages. I've added credible third party sources and have included instances of Rob Roger's notability in his profile. Should I add more of his projects? Also, could you please point out one or two examples where you see the firm profile reads like an ad? I tried to take out anything that might even remotely sound promotional and also made sure to cite every single fact from what projects the firm designs to the types of projects the firm designs.

Thanks so much for any specific help you can provide.

schung17 (talk) 6:57, 05 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi schung17 - I'll talk about the person's article first. None of the references cited are the type we need for notability: in-depth articles from independent, reliable sources. Most are bios on pages, which are usually given by the subject. Look for news about the individual in papers and magazines, not simply bios. The article itself is fine.

Regarding the firm - The copyvio issue comes with the lead paragraph, which is almost virtually cut and paste from the site I mentioned. Regarding the promotional stuff - the last line in the lead is promotional. Other examples would be: "The firm’s redevelopment efforts re­link Minneapolis’ downtown area with its waterfront featuring an educational pavilion, bike/pedestrian pathways, local vegetation, and heritage mill ruins"; "an elevated public path that allows views into the power plant"; "transformed it into"; and "recalls the order and spatial complexity of a college campus...", to name a few. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:42, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you for the comments. They're very helpful-- I'm carefully revising the text and references. I've been trying to read and follow all the guidelines from the start, but the next time I resubmit I'll be sure your comments are reflected in the changes.

schung17 (talk) 16:00, 09 March 2015 (UTC)

05:02:31, 6 March 2015 review of submission by Hewittel

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I am not sure what the problem is. I'd like to revise any references that are not acceptable or add information that is needed. I see a few places where it could be clarified. Not sure how to proceed.

Hewittel (talk) 05:02, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Hewittel - The issue is that the vast majority of the citations are by the subject of the article, therefore they are not independent. Others, like the Hutchinson article, are classified as press releases, and again, not independent. What we need are articles from reliable, secondary sources, which show that the subject is known outside their industry circles. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 17:03, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 14:12:09, 6 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Lundianer

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Hello and thanks for your feedback - ref 1 includes a link to the auction catalog including one of the subject's paintings, as to the references where the subject is included in "lengthy " lists, well that is the way with group exhibits, and this is how the art world is structured in Germany, reference 5 is about the subject insofar as in the program for 2015 it states that his exhibition opens on April19th - all of these infos a careful examination of the references would have told you. And no, nobody has written a book about him, in that case A Wiki entry would be pointless.Lundianer (talk) 14:12, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Lundianer (talk) 14:12, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

16:10:12, 6 March 2015 review of submission by 141.5.6.109

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Dear editor,

The proposal for a page was rejected on the ground of "neologism". However, the primary function of the page is not to introduce a new word, but to provide information about a novel biological theory. To make this clear, I moved down the text about the etymology of the word "practopoiesis". Now, the text begins properly by explaining what the theory is about.

Would that fix the concern that you had? And would the article be acceptable for publication?

Thank you very much.

Danko Nikolic

141.5.6.109 (talk) 16:10, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I actually hit the wrong key, it should have been declined for sounding too much like an essay. There is an informal tone to the article, and too many uncited assertions, like "An adaptive system must consist of components that are capable of detecting conditions for a necessity to act, and of acting." Onel5969 (talk) 12:16, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello. Thank you for the clarification. Is there anything I can possibly do to fix it? Can you give me suggestions what to do to make it satisfactory? If I fix certain things, is there a chance that you would then deem it acceptable? Thank you. (Danko (talk) 22:20, 13 March 2015 (UTC))

Re: Opting Delition of page Danny Fury

Hi there. I am new at making pages and you have put for my pages "Danny Fury" to be deleted under grounds of lack of notability. How can I change this please?

Also, how can I add to the descussion on the page itself to ask for it not to be deleted please?

Vensheira (talk) 18:00, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Vensheira - None of the references you use show Fury's notability. Take a look at WP:NMUSIC which shows the specific criteria for musicians. WP:GNG is the overall general notability requriements. Fury does not seem to meet any of them. Citations to show notability have to come from reliable secondary sources. In other words, they can't be from the subject itself, or anything connected with the subject (e.g. band webpages). FB and YouTube are not valid references ever. Blogs are usually no good as well.

Finally, WP:COI might come into play here, since you are connected with the subject of the article. I hope this explains things. Onel5969 (talk) 18:06, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969,

If you see the Wiki for Vain (which Danny Fury is mentioned) their links are interviews and discogs the same as the page I have created. Why are they able to be on but my page isnt? I can put more interviews or disogs on etc but thats all I can do for a band.

Also COI is in play? I am not talking about him as personally, I am adding it to link in with all of the other pages on wiki. Then others can come and add more. it is only the basics I am putting so surely that is not a problem? Vensheira (talk) 18:28, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Vensheira - the references on those pages don't consist solely of those types of citations, like yours does. And COI has nothing to do with "talking about him personally", merely that you have a close relationship with the subject of the article. And regarding your purpose so that others can add more... while that is a good purpose, the article, from its inception, has to show notability. Onel5969 (talk) 12:36, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

hey

Out of curiosity, what was your reasoning for deciding that notability for Loney Gordon had not been properly shown? DS (talk) 20:41, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi DragonflySixtyseven. All local references, not a single national reference. I actually think it is notable, but did not feel that the 4 local references showed that. The one pdf file, was difficult to ascertain, since it didn't have page numbers. To be honest, I felt this was borderline, and if it had had a single non-MI reference would have approved it. Nice work on AfC, btw. Onel5969 (talk) 20:51, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

21:03:18, 6 March 2015 review of submission by Chazhardy

• Chazhardy (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Walter Bowman Russell (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I cannot follow your instructions on how to format a reference list. What does ,ref.freetext,/ref. mean? What is freetext?

Chazhardy (talk) 21:03, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Chazhardy - it's a moot point, realized that your article already exists on Wikipedia: Walter Russell. You can go to that article to see how references are formatted. Onel5969 (talk) 13:01, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

05:55:38, 7 March 2015 review of submission by ArtCluster

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Thanks for the quick review. I have removed the section from Arbeiter Ring Publishing and also removed a few other sections. This is my first article so bear with me. Are there other sections that need reworking? ArtCluster (talk) 05:55, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi ArtCluster - right now it still has three issues. First, there are raw links in the article, e.g. digShift. They have to go away. Convert them into references. Second, your references need to be formatted correctly formatted, you can find examples at WP:CIT. I've edited the first reference, and changed one of the raw links in the lead paragraph to show you examples as well. (you should probably remove the brackets in the one reference for the University of Winnipeg News, since it's a redlink). Finally, I'm not sure this individual meets the notability requirements, based on these sources. The only two really good references are from the Manitoban. You'd probably need 1-3 more from other independent secondary sources (all the stuff from the University is good for verifying facts in the article, but not for notability purposes). If you can find a few more sources and integrate them into the article, that'd be swell. There's really a lot of info on her. I did a quick news search and came up with THIS, THIS, and THIS; there's also THIS, which is a brief, but good mention, of the professor (this last one is good for verification purposes, but is too brief for notability). There's a lot out there. After you make the corrections, just let me know and I'll take another look at it. Good first effort, btw. Onel5969 (talk) 13:21, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for these suggestions. Super helpful. Will keep working at it.ArtCluster (talk) 16:54, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Cool ArtCluster - let me know when it's ready... I see the raw links are still there. Onel5969 (talk) 21:55, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

OK Onel5969I think it might be finished. Penny finally dropped - now I know what a raw link is! lol! Let me know what you think.ArtCluster (talk) 23:26, 7 March 2015 (UTC) Hello Onel5969 Thanks for your help in writing my first wiki article. I hope to do more in the future! ArtCluster (talk) 13:33, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Mary Lerner article

Hi Onel5969,

I would like to ask about my rejected article on Mary Lerner at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shielapardee/sandbox

I understand that my long quote of O'Brien and my insistence that Lerner was a dedicated professional might seem opinionated, and I can rewrite that to eliminate the editorializing. Are there any other problems with the piece? There is almost nothing published about Lerner, which is precisely why she needs some kind of reference page available. My information about Lerner, other than her published work and the Williams textbook, is from census records and the Radcliffe College Archives. Those seem to me to be quality primary sources. Please let me know more specifically what you object to so that this article will be accepted. Thanks for your work, leopardee — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shielapardee (talk • contribs) 17:03, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Shielapardee - First, I formatted the first reference to show you the proper format. At least one of the proper ways, others can be found at WP:CIT. Regarding the tone, it's phrases like "12 Mt. Auburn Street, less than a dozen blocks from Harvard Square", "was actually a dedicated", "a committed professional", "seems to have caused her", "may have caused her", etc. make this sound more like a magazine story than an encyclopedia article. Other than that, I think you have done what you can with the references, and I wouldn't decline it based on notability. Just do another pass, and make it more formal, like you're reporting facts, not commenting on them, and let me know and I'll take another look at. btw - the quote doesn't bother me. Onel5969 (talk) 21:43, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Govindudu Andarivadele

Would you like to conduct a GA Review on this article? Let me know if you are interested. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 17:33, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Sure, Pavanjandhyala - It'll take me a few days. Onel5969 (talk) 22:03, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks a lot! Inform me just before beginning the same. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:07, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Pavanjandhyala - starting today. Onel5969 (talk) 13:07, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Okay, it looks like another editor already did the c/e. Onel5969 (talk) 13:10, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

You were busy, so i approached another editor for a c/e to avoid major complications, particularly in the prose. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:04, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

No worries - just didn't want you to think I had forgotten. Onel5969 (talk) 14:09, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Okay. So, when are you going to begin this article's GA review? Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:19, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

A reminder of the GA Review, in case you forgot. Are you interested in conducting the GAR of this article? Please let me know Pavanjandhyala (talk) 13:31, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Lamontcald

Based on the criteria of Notability (music) guidelines, we have won Grand Prize in the Onstage with Slash Contest that was sponsored by Guitar Center which is a nationally recognized competition. That meets #9 in the list of the criteria and I gave verifiable proof of this happening. Why is my page still being declined for submission? Lamontcald (talk) 17:41, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Lamontcald - Sorry, that's not one of the major awards. Wiki is talking about stuff like the Grammy's, Tony's, CMA's, Emmy's, Oscar's, etc. Onel5969 (talk) 13:13, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft of proposed addition of entry for Malkia Cyril by cubanabop

Hi One15969 from cubanabop Re: denial of https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Malkia_Cyril

I'm a longtime editor, but this was the first page I ever created, and I had intended it more as a stub to get started so others could add, so wasn't sure how many sources I needed. I edited it and think I addressed notability issues finding recent scholarly articles discussing her work (although since this is a grassroots campagin movement there's alway many people discussed in these articles, not just one so there's many short-form newspaper articles about her alone, but most books and journal articles are discussing the movement as a whole and her role is one of many in it). I understand the concept of notability and she def is notable given that she's one of the few leaders people go to to speak on behalf of the movement.

Should I also have coded it as a "stub" rather than an article?

I also didn't know how to document the training she has, so I had only put those links (< ref > Rockwood Alums in the News http://rockwoodleadership.org/article.php?id=334 </ ref > and < ref > Malkia Cyril http://www.prime-movers.net/our-fellows/malkia-cyril/ < / ref > in the infobox to demo her training. I took them out for now, lest you thought I was just adding pages for the sake of adding more refs, but is there a better way to do that?

Finally I didn't include the links to documentaries or tv news reports she's appeared in but should I also? Cubanabop (talk) 21:44, 7 March 2015 (UTC)Cubanabop — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cubanabop (talk • contribs) 19:06, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Cubanabop - There's a difference between citations which are for verifying facts, and those which are to prove notability. The latter have to be from reliable, independent, secondary sources, and there should be enough of them to show "significant" coverage. On your article, you have 7. 1-interview, primary source since it's an interview; 2-I'll assume it's in-depth; 3-I can't find any reference to Cyril; 4-same as 3, but I didn't read the whole article, is there a specific page she's referenced on? (perhaps 3&4 are to verify the second half of that sentence, and have nothing to do with Cyril?); 5-are articles by the subject, so are not independent; 6-also not independent, since it's a professional bio; 7&8 I'm assuming are merely to validate the claim of short story and poem publication.

So, your article is nicely sourced for verification, but only the one potential source goes to notability. Do you see what I mean? I would put in some of the short form news articles that are about her alone. You can also add a "general" subsection in the references which simply lists extra sources.

I actually don't see those links regarding her educational/professional training in the infobox, they only appear to be wikilinks to other pages. You can put those references there, or you could add prose about her time at school and in training, and include dates (if you know them), and then use those citations there.

The reviewer will determine the article's class, and this is definitely a stub, but that wouldn't have made a difference. Regarding the links to documentaries/news reports, you can create a new section titled, "External links", and put them there, but I'd only put the most pertinent ones. Anyway, hope all of this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 22:20, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 Thanks for your thoughtful review and comments.

In both sources #3& #4 not clear why you couldn't find her (I don't know how much you get to scrutinize the content of the sources, and I appreciate that you looked at each one, but if you're just doing keyword searches in a pdf it might not pop) so I'll add specific relevant pages within the articles. I included these because not only is she mentioned/quoted (I know enough about notability for musicians to know that simply naming someone in the academic article is not he same as a righteous reference), but those scholars go on in their articles to analyze and discuss the specific work done by her and the Center for Media Justice (which does have its own Wikipedia page, so the work done by her is already deemed to be notable enough for inclusion in Wikipedia) as it pertains to effective work in media justice. My question is: how much is enough to establish notability?

Ditto for her mentions in mainstream press (apart from the interview, which I did in fact include to establish biographic facts not notability). If someone is frequently a go-to public figure on questions of net neutrality from mainstream press, she's going to appear in lots of news stories, but perhaps only as a single quote or mention. Yet it is the preponderance of mainstream news outlets coming to her that denotes her importance. Further, Black Lesbian poets don't appear with the same frequency in traditional publications and canonical American poetry anthologies but that doesn't make her any less well-known or notable (and there's a threshold of number of publications that leaves Queer POC out of encyclopedias sometimes). So I'm up for the challenge of demoing her notability, but I remain unclear on how much is enough?

Seeing your read of the references, it also occurs to me that list of articles and poems by her I put as "references" (#5 through 8) were to substantiate the claims of publication and she is a prolific oped contributor (so you're spot on: they were for verification). I think, though, that I might make a subsection of ways to find her writings on line, rather than treat these like "references" (which I never saw them as, I just hadn't known the best way and I was in "footnotes" mode, but realize that for Wikipedia these aren't the same as references/source lists.) Perhaps a "Selected Works" subsection?

Finally NB: you didn't see the links on professional training in the info box for this version b/c I had removed them for the second edit.

Cubanabop (talk) 23:02, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Cubanabop - by all means make a short selected works section. But notability would only be attached if those works were noticed by reliable secondary sources (reviews of her works by notable publications are an excellent way to show notability). If you could find 2-3 in-depth articles ABOUT her (not by her, and not interviews), from non-fringe sources, that would put the article over the notability hump, imho.Onel5969 (talk) 13:18, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

small help

Thank you for your advice on the "mathew neal, articles for creation" I am a little unclear if the notoriety, the verifiability, or the depth of the article are in question. I have published media, publications, new releases and others that can assist, I simply do not know how much is reasonable to place in this space. Any advice is appreciated. Mathew Neal mathewneal@hotmail.com

www.MathewNeal.com — Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.130.77.229 (talk) 19:24, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I'm not sure what article you're referring to. Onel5969 (talk) 22:23, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 22:10:35, 7 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by ArtCluster

• ArtCluster (talk · contribs)
  • User:ArtCluster (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

it looks alot different now Onel5969. i learned so much!

ArtCluster (talk) 22:10, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the help, from Kristophkincaid

Thanks for the help! I have made the additional changes and hope that all is certifiable, now: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Confessions_of_Sylva_Slasher

-KK — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kristophkincaid (talk • contribs) 00:25, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Please help add page on Thiru Narayana Iyengar

User: Ramanhome Article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Thiru_Narayana_Iyengar

Hi Onel5969

You have rejected my draft on a page about a person: Thiru Narayana Iyengar (above link) for reasons that he is NOT notable.

The reason why i submitted this page and why he is notable are as below:

• Thiru Narayana Iyengar already has a wiki page in Tamil language: https://ta.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E0%AE%A8%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%B0%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%AF%E0%AE%A3_%E0%AE%90%E0%AE%AF%E0%AE%99%E0%AF%8D%E0%AE%95%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%B0%E0%AF%8D

• Thiru Narayana Iyengar was a notable Tamil and Sanskrit scholar during his time - 1861 to 1947. This english page is just to get the information about him to a world-wide english audience

• Winning awards and recognition from Prince of Wales during the commonwealth days for his competency in Tamil language is not considered notable?

• His contemporaries like (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Raghava_Iyengar), (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/S._Vaiyapuri_Pillai), (https://ta.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E0%AE%AA%E0%AE%9F%E0%AE%BF%E0%AE%AE%E0%AE%AE%E0%AF%8D:Somasundara_bharathiar.jpg) all already have a wiki page in english apart from pages in tamil language.

• If we dont have this wiki page in english, the english speaking world will not know about this tamil and sanskrit language scholar.

I have already added more references to the draft article above. please take a look and let me know what else needs to be done.

Regards Ramanhome (talk) 01:44, 8 March 2015 (UTC)Ramanhome — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ramanhome (talk • contribs) 01:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ramanhome - This is a very difficult article to ascertain notability. First, even though the underlying links might be in Tamil, the reference notes themselves need to be in English. To me, it looks like only 3 or 4 sources are referenced. Most of the Tamil language in the article also needs to go away. All the raw links in the article have to go away. And finally, the article has an WP:NPOV issue. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:38, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Deletion of a contrabution

Hi, you recently deleted a page i was creating entitled "Orly Sade". Orly is my mentor and professor, and asked me to create a wiki page for her using the content of her university page http://bschool.huji.ac.il/en/Faculty_%26amp%3B_Research/Orly_Sade I have asked the University to send you permission.

Would it be possible to restore the page afterwards?

Thank you, Talia Taliao01

Hi Taliao01 - first, please sign your messages with the four ~, that way we can find out what your talking about if we don't understand your message. Second, probably not. We can ask an administrator, and I'm pinging one (Fuhghettaboutit), so they are aware of it. But once you finish the OTRS process, let's deal with it. Onel5969 (talk) 13:25, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hercules Morse wiki draft - submission rejected query

Hi Onel5969!

Thank you for reviewing the created article for our band Hercules Morse.

I see that they submission was rejected because of insufficient citations that would verify certain parts of the content, however from the comments left it is not clear which parts need attention. It would be fantastic if you could steer me in the direction of the parts that need changing in order to improve the page enough for it to be accepted.

Looking forward to hearing your reply,

Thank you,

Hgardnerhercules (talk) 14:10, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Hgardnerhercules - it's not that there are pieces of the article which need citations for verification purposes, rather the entire article needs at least 2 or 3 more in-depth citations from reliable, independent third party sources which are not fringe or niche publications. Onel5969 (talk) 03:32, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Wikipedia email re Newspapers.com signup

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Request on 16:38:06, 8 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by CV9933

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Thank you for taking the time to review my submission. I suspect that inexperienced Wikipedians like myself are more vulnerable to drifting away from a neutral point of view without even realising it, so any help in this direction would be gratefully received. I have read the section about avoiding peacock and weasel terms but I think trying to proof read ones own article is problematic, so if you could give me some pointers I will attempt to improve the tone of the article.CV9933 (talk) 16:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

CV9933 (talk) 16:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi CV9933 - I re-wrote the first sentence of the Career section to give you an idea of how to word things neutrally. You just want the facts - no editorializing, no drawing conclusions - just tell the reader what happened and when it happened, sometimes why it happened is also appropriate (as in the case of why Vincent inherited the company). I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 03:50, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks; that was a great help and if you get the opportunity to take another look at it I would really appreciate it.CV9933 (talk) 16:49, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Retroscreen Virology (draft)

Hi there, thanks for taking the time to look through this page https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Retroscreen_Virology_Group_plc - I have reworked it for a fourth time and kept only information that can be independently verified from reliable independent secondary sources such as from Growth Company Investor about Retroscreen Virology's joining the London Stock Exchange (this is NOT a press release) and the Pharma Times - a leading independent pharma magazine.

I also notice that John Oxford, noted for his work with Retroscreen Virology, has his own Wikipedia page here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John_Oxford .....and under 'Research' it states: "Oxford is noted for his work with Retroscreen Virology, the leading virology research company of Europe which he established in 1989 with EU funding." - therefore I would assume that as this page has already been accepted by a Wikipedia reviewer it backs up Retroscreen Virology's case for being given its own Wikipedia page. Thanks again for your time. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TwickenhamMan (talk • contribs) 21:52, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Retroscreen Virology are also listed here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/London_Bioscience_Innovation_Centre — Preceding unsigned comment added by TwickenhamMan (talk • contribs) 21:57, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi TwickenhamMan - The company may be notable, but the current sources don't show that. Please see WP:GNG and WP:NCORP on what denotes notability and how to use references to show that notability. Onel5969 (talk) 13:47, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Danagog

Hello

The brand DANAGOG is well recognized in Nigeria and we would request you review and allow the page please. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Danagog

teamdanagog — Preceding unsigned comment added by Team Danagog (talk • contribs) 22:52, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

01:20:53, 9 March 2015 review of submission by Mariselan

• Mariselan (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Pablo Medina (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi, I have a question on the best way to proceed for editing and re-submitting my article on the author Pablo Medina. It was rejected because the information is on the website lavenderink.org. The information that is on that website is a Bio that Pablo Medina submitted to them for his recent book publication. It is the same Bio that Pablo sent me directly as well via email to include in the wikipedia page. I'm not sure how to avoid including this biographical information that the author himself is using as his Bio for his publications and is requesting for me to use for this wikipedia page that I'm writing about him. Can you please advise on what I should do? Thank you.

Mariselan (talk) 01:20, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Mariselan - this is one of the reasons that Wikipedia has a conflict of interest policy. There is a process by which you can use copyrighted material (basically, by having the author of that material give up their copyright), and that process can be viewed HERE. But you can use the material by simply writing it in your own words, and of course, avoiding simply paraphrasing it. Then you can use that site as a citation. Your article, however, also has a notability issue. Please see the guidelines under WP:GNG and WP:NAUTHOR to see what qualifies an author's notability. Then you need citations from independent, secondary sources (not fringe sites either) which support those notability claims. Or, you need in-depth articles from those independent sources on the subject of your article. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:55, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

02:12:46, 9 March 2015 review of submission by JosephChiaccio

• JosephChiaccio (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Simeone Foundation Automotive Museum (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Greetings,

Thank you for taking the time to review the article for the Simeone Foundation Automotive Museum. I received a notice that the article was declined. This is the first article I have submitted to Wikipedia.

Can you please indicate which text caused the article to be declined? Since the article is somewhat long, I am unsure which section(s) need to be changed. As you can see, I cited 18 different news articles, including the New York Times and Philadelphia Inquirer, both of which are the major newspapers of their city and are prominent sources of material in the article.

Thanks for your time and consideration.

Best, Joseph Chiaccio

JosephChiaccio (talk) 02:12, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi JosephChiaccio - It's not that the article isn't well-cited, but the reason it was declined was stated in the decline box: this is more of an advertisement for the museum, than an encyclopedia article about the museum. Tell us about the museum, don't sell us the museum. The lengthy lists are unnecessary. A prose paragraph, highlighting the collection is what's needed. Lines that tell us about what can be rented, or what's available for groups are promotion, and need to be deleted. Don't need the address of the place, nor should you use honorifics or titles of people. Hope this clears it up for you. Onel5969 (talk) 14:03, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Think I've got it. Thanks Onel5969

I appreciate the help for: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Confessions_of_Sylva_Slasher

With your help and another editor and several hours of editing, I think I have the hang of it now. Thank you so very much. Cheers! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kristophkincaid (talk • contribs) 05:40, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jayantilal Gada

user name: Yatin Rewale article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jayantilal_Gada

Hello - I've just seen that My article I submitted for review Draft:Jayantilal Gada has been rejected following your review, with the feedback that read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia and need to be written from a neutral point of view I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance and look like Advertisement. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so.Please help me to get this article accepted. thank you Yatin Rewale (talk) 12:11, 9 March 2015 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yatin Rewale (talk • contribs)

Hi Yatin Rewale - There are several issues with the article still, although it's much better after your edits. First, avoid unsupported claimes like "Despite his big success in all facets of the film business" and "Jayantilal Gada then used his knowledge of which videos were getting higher rentals ...". Second, don't use ALL CAPS, except for acronyms. Third, this subject doesn't meet the notability criteria on Wikipedia. You should take a look at WP:GNG and WP:BIO. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:15, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Lionel Tarassenko

You recently removed material from the page Lionel Tarassenko that was fully referenced with appropriate citations being given in the text. Yet you gave no reason for this and did not engage on the Talk page. I have checked and the facts behind the material remain as they were, i.e. they are accurate. I therefore propose that the material be replaced on the page. As Editors we must aim for a NPOV. I would like to hear your reasons behind the removal however. HonestBert (talk) 10:33, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi HonestBert - you made a negative assertion on a blp, and your source did not support your claim. Pretty simple really. Onel5969 (talk) 14:17, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for responding. I completely agree that I made a negative assertion on a blp. However I believe that the source did support the claim. The top cited article on the Google Scholar page indicated is from a completely different author. Do you mean therefore that I should include further information to indicate that the top article was actually written by someone else, e.g. point to publisher details? HonestBert (talk) 16:35, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Question about reliability

Hi there, thank you for reviewing my article about F.O.D. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:F.O.D._%28band%29). My name is Arjan van Geel (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Arjanvangeel), I'm from the Netherlands and this is my first article. I've been working on it for a little over six months now (this is 6th draft, and I've done hundreds of little and big edits to improve it).

Could you give me some more concrete advice on how to improve my article, by improving the reliability WITHOUT deminishing the notability? The band I'm writing about (a Belgian band) has become very popular here in Europe, over the last couple of years, has put out two full albums, is playing the biggest punk rock festival in the world (Groezrock) soon. It's a punk rock band, which by nature makes it a little harder referencing it, because major media outlets don't cover it. Still, it's a noteworthy band, important to the subgenre (skate punk) and more prominent than a lot of other bands who are on Wikipedia. And a lot of the sources I've used are some important web magazines in our scene. Also, I've used minor sources as well to prove notability, because the band is written about in Dutch, French, Spanish and English.

I'm looking forward to your reply! It would be great to get some examples from you on how to improve. Thanks!

Hi Arjanvangeel - Sources for reliability purposes have to be from independent, reliable, secondary sources. Independent means they can't have any connection to the subject of the article (e.g. the band's web page, press releases); reliable means they can't be from fringe sources (e.g. niche publications) or sources which have no editorial oversight (e.g. blogs); secondary means they can't be things like interviews. Reviews are good, and you have several, but all from fringe sites or blog sites. If they had a couple of reviews in publications like Rolling Stone (or the European equivalent of it), that would help. But having said all that, this was a tough one for me. I think it's borderline notable, in my opinion. If you could find one or two more solid references, resubmit. A lot of editors have already looked at this, so it's pretty consistent that it needs better references. I did a quick news web search and didn't really find much on them. Onel5969 (talk) 14:29, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

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Hello again, thanks so much for your reply! Really appreciate you taking your time to write an answer. It's very helpful to get feedback like this. Also, I hope I'm using the right way to respond to you (if not, please excuse me). Communicating with a Reviewer in Wikipedia is a bit user unfriendly and confusing. It was a good thing you had a specific link at the top of your page to do so :). Much appreciated.

I'll do my best to find more links (this band is getting more and more attention every day). Meanwhile, do you think I should delete particular links/references that are not good enough? If so, which ones would be the first to go? I want to make this article as lean and mean, and objective as possible :).

Finally, there are some people trying to contact me about the declined article (WikiSolutions). They say they can help and ask money for it. It sounds dodgy, particularly because I've read in the Wikipedia rules that paid editing is strictly forbidden. Is this common practice, people like this trying to get money out of this?

Well that's it for now. Thanks again for your time. And cheers from the Netherlands! Arjanvangeel (talk) 16:59, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

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Hi Onel5969, your input inspired me to find even better, more reliable resources :). And I've found two of them, like you asked me! The band was featured (and mentioned on the cover) of a European magazine, which has several editors, a chief editor and several photographers working for it. It's a big alternative magazine, with lots of high profile sponsors. For this special festival edition, there were 2.000 copies of the magazine printed and sold at Groezrock, a two day Belgian festival with 35.000 visitors. The 2nd reliable resource that I've added is a Belgian newspaper called Het Nieuwsblad, which writes about their debut album. Also, I've deleted a few non reliable references. But kept some secondary sources to prove that the band is written about (reviews) in four different languages.

Let me know what you think of these additions! Thanks in advance!!

12:13:55, 9 March 2015 review of submission by 2605:E000:99D0:A400:A4FA:E00A:4C4D:7AD8

• 2605:E000:99D0:A400:A4FA:E00A:4C4D:7AD8 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Chris Pang (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi Onel5969

Thanks for reviewing the submission. Can you please give me some more specific pointers as to what needs to be edited before resubmission? Chris Pang is a famous actor and he has won awards. There are also a lot of wikipedia articles that will link to his currently nonexistent page. Please let me know what needs to he edited.

Thanks!

2605:E000:99D0:A400:A4FA:E00A:4C4D:7AD8 (talk) 12:13, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Sorry, but I don't see how he meets notability requirements at this time. Other than a supporting role in a flop in 2010, all his other roles are not significant. I don't see him overcoming the notability threshold for actors. Onel5969 (talk) 14:36, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

12:42:38, 9 March 2015 review of submission by AOOHull

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  • Draft:The Talks (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi there. Thanks for reviewing my article. Could you go in to a little more detail as to why it was declined? Many thanks.

AOOHull (talk) 12:42, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi AOOHull - Sure! Per WP:GNG and WP:NMUSIC, there are certain criteria which must be met. This group does not meet any of those criteria. You also only have 4 sources, of which only the BBC is any good (for notability purposes), the other 3 are from the band's website, a blog, and a fringe source. But take a look at the notability criteria. If the group meets any of those criteria, and you can support it from a reliable secondary source, make the edits and resubmit. Onel5969 (talk) 14:41, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

thank you!

When my article was rejected some weeks ago you very kindly contacted me and suggested getting in touch with the Tearoom. I did join this group and got great advice from one of the editors. Your talk page didn't seem to work so I could only get in touch now to say thank you. Angela RiedleAngelariedle (talk) 13:24, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Angelariedle - No problem. That's what the Tea Room is for! Glad it helped. Happy editing! Onel5969 (talk) 14:44, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

13:46:55, 9 March 2015 review of submission by SimonHilling

• SimonHilling (talk · contribs)
  • User:SimonHilling/sandbox (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I am struggling to get my page published on Wikipedia. Requiring some advice and maybe some specific areas of the page that I need to alter or address?

SimonHilling (talk) 13:46, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi SimonHilling - first, simply tell us about the park, don't sell it to us. Get rid of terms like "Adrenaline and relaxing activities available", "to entertain the many visitors", etc. The chronology section could be deleted as well. The article also suffers from a notability issue, you should find another 2-3 good sources from independent, reliable sources. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:13, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Heatherton World of Activities Wikipedia Page

Hello, Thank you for taking the time to review the Wiki page. I am after some help if possible, as I am struggling to get my article published. Is there a specific section of the article that needs altering or addressing?

Kind regards Simon — Preceding unsigned comment added by SimonHilling (talk • contribs) 13:48, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

14:06:22, 9 March 2015 review of submission by Tbarnold

• Tbarnold (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:The Princeton - Blairstown Center (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

We feel our organization - started in 1908 by Princeton University students and still operating today - is significant enough for inclusion. I am a troglodyte when it comes to technology, but unfortunately I have been assigned to get this project done. Apparently I need help. Once I understand how the citation protocols work, I feel I can provide enough independent sourcing to legitimize this submission. I'm not sure what NPOV or even how to sign this with four tildes. Tbarnold (talk) 14:06, 9 March 2015 (UTC) Tom Arnold Tbarnold (talk) 14:06, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Princeton-Blairstown Center

I thought I just did leave you a message. This process is somewhat frustrating I have to say. I would like to have our organization listed in Wikipedia and have been rejected twice. My citations may be a problem, but I'm not sure if its their quality or a technical matter in how they are shown on the page. I'm wondering if - in plain English - you could guide me. I have to warn you that I'm 63 years old and technology resistant. I grew up with the "Elements of Style" (E.B.White) and a book called "On Writing Well" by William Zinsser. Both stressed simplicity. Thanks for your help.Tbarnold (talk) 14:15, 9 March 2015 (UTC) Tom Arnold

Hi Tbarnold - I'm right there with you in age, so I understand. Both of those books are good sources, and Wikipedia likes simplicity as well. Just the facts. You need to supply references from independent, reliable sources (so anything from Princeton, or the org's website wouldn't count). I did a quick websearch, and there isn't a plethora of sources out there not related to Princeton. There's a nice article atnj.com, and another nice article in the New Jersey Herald (although it's subscriber based). But stuff from the Bergen Record, NYT, Star-Ledger, Philadelphia Enquirer, etc. would also be good. I formatted the first reference so you can see how it's done. Also be aware of not sounding promotional (the opening paragraph is very non-neutral). I hope this helps. After you make the corrections, let me know and I'll take another look at it. Onel5969 (talk) 15:37, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 15:27:33, 9 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Tjfr

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  • User:Tjfr (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Thank you for taking the time to review my submission, a bio of Israeli businessman Ran Poliakine. I would greatly appreciate it if you could provide me some specifics about where the submission still fails to be written from a neutral point of view or refer to independent, reliable, published sources. Those are the exact same issues that arose the first time I submitted the article in January. The second time, which you edited, I tried to eliminate any non-neutral wording. Clearly, Poliakine has been cited repeatedly by independent, reliable published sources, which I also cite.

This is a case where I fear that I am not up to the task, rather than that Poliakine is not eligible for a Wikipedia listing. He is without question the "father" of the wireless charging industry, which will reach $15 billion in global revenues soon. He is also the founder of the Power Management Alliance, which is a global group comprised of some very important multinational companies. He founded and is still a director of Powermat Technologies, which is not bringing wireless charging to Starbucks, McDonalds, and many other global locations.

If you can give me an example of how to take a sentence that I wrote incorrectly and how it SHOULD be written from a neutral point of view, that would help. I have other worthy bios that I would like to write for Wikipedia, but I want to be certain I understand how to submit these correctly.

I very much appreciate your feedback. Thanks. Tjfr (talk) 15:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)TJFR

Tjfr (talk) 15:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

hi Tjfr - stuff that is meant to sell or promote the business (info only of interest to potential customers), rather than simply telling readers about the company. For example, the lead sentence doesn't need to talk about consumers, manufacturers, etc. We don't need to hear about who invested in the company. The reference to Starbucks is also purely promotional. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 03:56, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

16:20:40, 9 March 2015 review of submission by Yerpo

• Yerpo (talk · contribs)
  • User:Marjetka.spacapan/sandbox (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi, I would like to request your reconsideration of the AfC in question. The boilerplate response you gave clearly misses the point, as the article does cite multiple independent and reliable sources (albeit in Slovene language, but that is not against WP:V). To explain, the article was originally written by me at :slwiki (here) after a discussion with the company representatives. They were not involved in the writing process in any way, they just provided some of the independent references cited and made this translation that they now want to publish. Please let me know what you think needs to be done. — Yerpo ^Eh? 16:20, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Yerpo - although it is you who completely misses the point. The article was not declined for notability, but because the article reads like an advertisement for the company. I admit, I've seen much more blatant advertising, but the overall tone of the article is one of promotion, rather than educating the reader. It's not too far from publication, though. Onel5969 (talk) 04:02, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Well, nuances are not one of the benefits of boilerplate responses. What I meant is that the appearance of a promo piece usually stems from the combination of tone and sourcing. If the references used to support this particular text were written by the company itself, then yes, it would come across as quite blatant advertising. As it is, however, it is supported by high-quality independent sourcing (national TV and newspapers plus a scholarly source for history) - this is possible because Zlatarna Celje is indeed one of the more notable companies in the country. That said, I polished two parts that the translator took a bit of artistic liberty with, is it better now? If no, please suggest further improvements. — Yerpo ^Eh? 06:36, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Your answer would really be appreciated, here. — Yerpo ^Eh? 12:01, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Updates to Simeone Foundation Automotive Museum

Greetings,

Thank you for the timely reply. I carefully read your note which stated you declined it because you felt it was an advertisement. However, until your most recent reply, you did not specifically state which text that you considered to be promotional in nature. That was the reason for my inquiry.

I will make changes as requested below. However, after reviewing the Wikipedia pages for other museums, I do have some disagreement to some of your reasons, and I would like further clarifications as to why certain content cannot be in the Simeone article.

Here are the pages of other museums, which I will now be using as examples to formatting for the Simeone museum, especially since they are approved:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/America%27s_Car_Museum https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Petersen_Automotive_Museum https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blackhawk_Museum https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Barber_Motorsports_Park#Barber_Vintage_Motorsport_Museum https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Louvre

You also mentioned that this should be an encyclopedia article about the museum. This is the specific reason why I included the list of exhibits and cars, especially since it is very small in comparison to some of the museums listed above.

I have conducted a review of the Louvre Museum's page, located here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Louvre

It has 8 different sub-sections under "Collections". I will structure the Simeone collection in a similar manner. It also has a "Location, access and facilities" section, which shows a map and discusses proximity to other landmarks. I will structure the Simeone in a similar manner, however I will remove the exact address of the museum as you requested.

JosephChiaccio (talk) 17:02, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 17:17:42, 9 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Warrenjstuart

• Warrenjstuart (talk · contribs)
  • User:Warrenjstuart (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Onel, I see the page was declined due to insufficient notoriety, or proof of notoriety. She Makes Comics, one of the documentaries that Sequart produced, has been deemed fit as a public page, and yet the organization, the only organization that promotes comics studies on an academic level, was declined due to insufficient notoriety from independent sources, some of which include the Village Voice, and also the Latino Review. Could you please justify to me then how your decision to deny the legitimacy of a credible organization was made? This decision doesn't seem just or fair.

Warrenjstuart (talk) 17:17, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft Donald Doe Part Two

Hello, LINK: Draft:Donald_Gerrard_Doe

I had spoken to you earlier on the wiki page that I am drafting up for artist Donald Doe. I have done a lot more inline citation. Now instead of three or four sources, I have thirteen, with possibly more. I am still trying to figure out how to legally get access to photos for the site. I have some just want to make sure I have permission that is acceptable to Wiki rather than an email that has allowed me to put them up from the artist.

If you have time I would like you to look it over, I have not changed much of the actual writing except for a little bit of reformatting. Most of what was done was placing the inline citation that was required. Please let me know if I need more citation or not.

Thank you very much, I appreciate this greatly, Thanks again. -SageheartBK — Preceding unsigned comment added by SageheartBK (talk • contribs) 20:01, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi SageheartBK - article looks good. I formatted the first reference, to give you an example of how they should look. Just fix the other references, resubmit, and let me know, I'll approve it. Nice job. Onel5969 (talk) 04:14, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Lamontcald, revisited

I understand the major award part like the Grammys, AMA and such but # 9 refers to major competitions and the OnStage with Slash sponsored by Guitar Center is a major competition. Nation wide, major corporation sponsored and backed with a major Rock Icon SLASH. What more is required when the guidelines states we need to fulfill one of the stated criteria? Lamontcald (talk) 21:03, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Again, Lamontcald - it refers to the major awards as I explained before. What is required is that you fulfill those criteria, which some secondary award does not. There might be a case for certain awards gaining the same status as the majors (e.g. People's Choice Awards), but the award you cite is clearly not a major award. Onel5969 (talk) 04:16, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Gowe

Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing my submission about rapper Gowe. I did as you suggested and resubmitted the article. I haven't heard back from anyone in a week, so would you be able to take a second look at the submission, as you offered to? For your convenience, here's the link to the article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Gowe_(Musician)

As you can probably imagine, it's difficult for me to find motivation to continue contributing if my first submission is rejected. Hopefully we can reach a solid conclusion about the "national tour." Let me know what you think about Gowe's notability. Thank you so much!

Edward.sun94 (talk) 21:06, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Edward.sun94 - we're a bit backlogged on submissions, so it never hurts to ask someone to review it. I did and moved it to the mainspace. Nice job. In the future, beware of sites like YouTube, they do nothing for the notability of a person, but can be used to verify certain facts in an article. Congrats! Onel5969 (talk) 04:21, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: PayasUgym (March 4)

Hello, can you give me some more information about how I can improve this article so that it is published? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:PayasUgym — Preceding unsigned comment added by Abearheart (talk • contribs) 21:58, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Abearheart - the article reads like an advertisement, not an educational piece. Terms like "hottest", talks about pricing on the website, funding data, etc. are all stuff that only potential customers are interested in. Onel5969 (talk) 04:24, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

02:34:05, 10 March 2015 review of submission by Klempayj

• Klempayj (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Jerry the Marble Faun (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I don't understand why this page was declined. There are 15 sources as varied and as reputable as The New Yorker, The New York Times, The Wall Street Journal, Vogue Magazine, etc. Nothing has been copied from Jerry's website http://themarblefaun.com/ as stated as the reason for denial. I think that if the person denying this page read through all of the sources they would see that nothing has been copied - the sources have been summarized. Also, Jerry is mentioned several times on Wikipedia already - on the Grey Gardens page (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Grey_Gardens), and The Marble Faun page (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Marble_Faun). Jerry deserves his own page and I request that the denial is reconsidered. Klempayj (talk) 02:34, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Klempayj - went back and checked, and yup, the article is a close paraphrase of a certain part of the other site, with at least one sentence directly cut and paste. Normally, if it was a longer article, I would simply have deleted the offending sentence, but not in an article of this length. Onel5969 (talk) 04:28, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Printvenue

Hi My article was rejected on the grounds of "This submission appears to read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia. Encyclopedia articles need to be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources, not just to materials produced by the creator of the subject being discussed. This is important so that the article can meet Wikipedia's verifiability policy and the notability of the subject can be established. If you still feel that this subject is worthy of inclusion in Wikipedia, please rewrite your submission to comply with these policies." As it was my first article it would be a great help if you can tell me where and how the submission appears to read more like an advertisement? I just wrote an article about the information about certain organization. I'll work on the links part. Your help would be great and will be appreciated. Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vaibhav1446 (talk • contribs) 05:58, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Vaibhav1446 - articles are meant to inform, not sell a product. When you start mentioning the types of stuff a company sells, and build up the investors in the company and use peacock words in the awards section, it sounds promotional. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:40, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Rejection of "Oldschool (Nena album)"

Thanks for your help with the page on Nena's latest album which you quite rightly rejected last month on the grounds of notability, since it had only just been released. As I have just referenced on the page itself, it has today entered the German charts at #4. Since your rejection and following your advice, I've also added a section on the album's reception and more information on its track listing. I have just resubmitted it for approval. Given that all of Nena's previous 16 albums have their own pages, I think it's now ready to be accepted. Regards, Duncan R2 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Duncan R2 (talk • contribs) 09:19, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Duncan R2 - definitely notable now. One issue with it is the lead paragraph. While leads don't need citations, if the material in them isn't mentioned in the body of the article and cited there, they do. The commentary (for without citations, that's what it is), about the negative publicity and celebrating her past either needs to be cited, re-written so as to not sound like original research, or deleted. Fix that one issue and let me know and I'll move it to the mainspace. Nice job! Onel5969 (talk) 12:48, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Great news that we're nearly there so I've inserted a couple of references into the offending first sentence but if it's still not right, let me know and I'll delete because it's not essential to the page although, if possible, I'd prefer to keep it, since I think it adds a good bridge in the Nena narrative from the previous album's page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Duncan R2 (talk • contribs) 13:32, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Well done Duncan R2! Moved to mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 13:39, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Rejection of article

My Wikipedia article was declined as it said it sounds like an advertisement and I would like to follow up to find out what specifically sounds like an advertisement and what I can change. Saigon Asset Management is an investment fund that has received coverage from numerous third party sources. Links were included to archived third party news source articles from the Saigon Asset Management website because some of these links are no longer active on the third party site. I will remove those but is it possible to upload a pdf of the article as it is no longer available online? https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Draft:Saigon_Asset_Management&action=edit — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leighann.chow (talk • contribs) 10:02, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Leighann.chow - articles need to tell us about the subject, not attempt to sell it to us. Individual fund information, talking about what the company is seeking to do, and using terms like "expertise", make the article seem promotional. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:05, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Jr. NTR Filmography

Hello, Onel5969. User Ssven2 told me that you copy edit lead sections of filmographies. Can you help me do that for Jr. NTR's filmography.

Thank you, Maheshreddy2 (talk) 11:18, 10 March 2015 (UTC)Maheshreddy2Maheshreddy2 (talk) 11:18, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Maheshreddy2 - Sure. I'm doing a c/e for Pavanjandhyala over the next couple of days, then I'll take a look at your filmography. Onel5969 (talk) 13:08, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

15:37:25, 10 March 2015 review of submission by Avicennia marina

• Avicennia marina (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Evidence-based conservation (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I am not sure what the editor means by opinion here or original research. Substantial references have been provided. It would be great to learn as to how I can improve the article.

Avicennia marina (talk) 15:37, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Avicennia marina - Even though there are references there are also conclusions drawn, which is original research (e.g. "Simply put, seeing what works and what doesn't work should be the basis of environmental conservation efforts.") That statement also is worded in an informal tone. Onel5969 (talk) 01:22, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 - That sentence was added by a wikipedia editor (Bfpage). I have removed it in the current version. Could you please suggest any other edits that I could make to improve the article? This is my first wiki article so any suggestions would be useful.

Edited article, based on your input

Hello again, Onel5969, I sincerely do not know whether you did get alerted by my other responses (I find it extremely difficult to grasp the way communicating in Wikipedia works), so apologies in advance if I am contacting you in the wrong way.

Just wanted to let you know that I've added two high profile, reliable sources to my article. The European version of Rolling Stone; a high-profile, sponsored magazine with several editors, called RMP Magazine. And one of the biggest Belgian newspapers who wrote about the band: Het Nieuwsblad. I also cleaned up (deleted) some of the less reliable sources. And shortened the article a bit, to make it even more lean and mean.

Here's the link to the updated article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:F.O.D._%28band%29 And here's the link to me: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Arjanvangeel

I would appreciate it if you could let me know if this makes the article ready for resubmitting it, or if it could be reviewed by you again. Thank you!

Kind regards from the Netherlands. - Arjan — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 17:00, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Arjanvangeel - the one article from Nieuwsblad was good, but for the life of me, I can't find the other two you talk about above. What reference numbers are they? Onel5969 (talk) 01:26, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Alex GIlbert Article

Hi User:Onel5969.

You recently declined the article Draft:Alex Gilbert. I do not understand why you think these references do not show the articles notability? They are clearly reliable sources. Can you please look at these again? Please let me know what to improve on. Also if it got accepted will this not fix the G4 issue?

Thanks! --DmitryPopovRU (talk) 18:19, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments on Your Helpful Feedback

Because I'm new to Wikipedia, I don't know how to correctly reply to your earlier feedback, which I very much appreciate. If I should somehow be continuing the previous "thread" rather than posting anew, please let me know how to do that so I'll comply in the future.

My previous post carried the headline "Request on 15:27:33, 9 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Tjfr"

Your reply was: hi Tjfr - stuff that is meant to sell or promote the business (info only of interest to potential customers), rather than simply telling readers about the company. For example, the lead sentence doesn't need to talk about consumers, manufacturers, etc. We don't need to hear about who invested in the company. The reference to Starbucks is also purely promotional. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 03:56, 10 March 2015 (UTC).

In writing to you a second time, I wish to both better understand your comments and to make the necessary corrections. Please accept these questions/comments in that spirit.

In my lead sentence I mention that Powermat Technologies, which Mr. Poliakine founded, serves consumers, OEM and public places. That is not intended as a "promotion" for him or the company. It is intended to let Wikipedia users know which "markets" Powermat Technology serves. If I were writing about General Motors, I would state that it sells both to individuals and to fleet owners, and it also makes specialized industrial vehicles. Apple makes computers, phones, and portable music players, etc.

• But the article isn't about Powermat, but Poliakine. So when you expand information in that matter, it looks like your "fluffing" the article.

Because Powermat is a relatively new company, I think the fact that it has well-known investors - details that have been reported by major news organizations - is crucial to understanding that this is not a fly-by-night operation.

• Again, the article isn't about the company. Wikipedia has a policy that notability isn't inferred by association, so in this article, that information isn't appropriate.

Most significantly, the Starbucks reference - which has been reported by CNN, CNBC, The Wall Street Journal and many others - demonstrates that wireless charging is quickly being accepted globally.

• Again, same as above two reasons.

1. Do you recommend that I begin this article writing strictly: "Ran Poliakine is an Israeli business executive who founded Powermat Technologies, a developer of wireless solutions." Should I ever mention that is technology is used by different types of users, such as consumers v. furniture makers?

• Yes, just go with the simple sentence. You might not be able to get this article over the notability criteria. When you just talk about him, his only accomplishments are founding the company, and the Powermat alliance.

2. Is it NEVER relevant which major investors have taken a stake in a startup company? If Apple, Intel or Warren Buffett makes an investment that has been written about by major financial news organizations, I shouldn't mention it anywhere in the entry?

• It would be appropriate in an article about the company.

3. How might I introduce the fact that Starbucks and others are now using the technology that Mr. Poliakine created globally? Again, this has been covered widely by the mainstream news media and seems to be an area that Wikipedia users would find relevant. After all, when they visit a Starbucks and charge their phone there wirelessly, they might find it interesting to know that Mr. Poliakine is the person who made that possible. I need a hint how to write that and still avoid being promotional.

• Again, appropriate in an article about the company. But even then, you should drop the PR statement, which being PR, is clearly promotional.

I know how busy you are and how many people are seeking your help. So I'll be patient. If you can find the time to help walk me through this process, I will be most grateful. It will also allow me to be a better, regular contributor to Wikipedia. Many, many thanks.

• Never hesitate asking questions, most people are helpful. Especially when someone, like you, is trying to learn and trying to become better at doing this Wikipedia thing.

Tjfr (talk) 18:47, 10 March 2015 (UTC)TJFR

Hi Tjfr - First, most editors appreciate if you continue threads already started, as that keeps all the information together. Now regarding your article, I'll answer your questions as they occur up above. Overall, you might want to change the focus of your article to the company, which is most likely notable. Not sure Poliakine himself will meet the criteria. Hope all of this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 02:25, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

18:49:19, 10 March 2015 review of submission by Albanianhistory

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  • Draft:Selman Kadria (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hello! You declined my draft "Selman Kadria" and since i am new to this, i'd like to get some help improve my submission and see it posted.

See link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Selman_Kadria

I do not understand the part "Add citations for sources that are secondary and independent"

Allow me to describe this draf:

This is an article about Selman Kadria, a Kosovar Albanian who lived in Kosovo during the 1912-13s, when Serbia annexed the area. During this period, many were killed by Chetnik leaders, one of those being Milic Krstic. Selman Kadria, being a patriot, killed Milic Krstic and was remembered as a hero. This article would surely be added to the category of Albanian heroes awards available here on Wiki.

Sources for this persons story are only available in Albanian and most are articles written by journalists in Kosovo. There is also a movie available on Youtube. ¨

Perhaps these sources are just enough for this draft to be reviewed and processed? What do you think i should add more? I have not found any more sources than those that are available. Thanks for any advice you may give.

Albanianhistory (talk) 18:49, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Albanianhistory - It doesn't matter if the sources aren't in English. The references should be written in English, and then if there is a weblink available, include that, even if it's not in English. But if there is no weblink, just carefully cite the source. See WP:CIT on how to format citations, and what to include in those citations.

Also, be aware that you are not writing a story, which is how the current submission reads. You are writing an encyclopedia article, so it should only contain facts, not conjecture, and you should lose the dialogue. But this person may not meet Wikipedia notability requirements. Take a look at WP:ONEEVENT.

You're pulling the information from somewhere, so you should cite where you're pulling it from. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 02:41, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Playtime Is Over (mixtape) Submission Decline

I saw you were the reviewer who declined my submission for an article at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Playtime_Is_Over_(mixtape).

(Thanks for reviewing the article, by the way.)

The sources I used were based on the sources at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sucka_Free_(mixtape), the artist's first mixtape. Along with this the artist has three other mixtapes that each have their own page.

What is the difference between the article that I submitted and the one at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sucka_Free_(mixtape) that warranted a decline? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Soyrice (talk • contribs) 21:42, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Soyrice - you're right, they are not that different. So I've nominated the other mixtape for deletion, since it clearly does not meet the notability requirements of either WP:NALBUM, WP:NSONG, or WP:NMUSIC. Beam me up, Scotty, is different, since it hit a national chart. Onel5969 (talk) 02:58, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hey again Onel5969 - Okay, I'm understanding the issue better now. However I did more research and I believe that the mixtape may in fact be noteworthy. I know that the article would need to be changed but I wanted to ask an experienced user before I do, so I don't waste my time.

Specifically Wikipedia's notability guidelines state that a recording is notable if it has been referenced in multiple, independent, important, reliable works. Billboard, MTV, and Music Times -- along with other sources -- all have articles that say that Playtime Is Over was integral to Nicki Minaj's success because of the context in which it was produced. This points to the mixtape being noteworthy, since it has been referenced by multiple, good sources as an important work.

Hi Soyrice - Actually, what the criteria is "Has been the subject of multiple, non-trivial, published works appearing in sources that are reliable, not self-published, and are independent from the musician or ensemble itself" (my emphasis). However, it would depend on the depth of coverage of those articles. It might make the mixtape notable. If you want to just put the links here on my talkpage, I'll take a look before you put a lot of effort into the article. Onel5969 (talk) 02:34, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hey Onel5969 - Ah, I see. I still think that the sources support the mixtape's notability, but that changes my argument a little. Each source (I'll listen them at the end) states that the ways in which Nicki Minaj began producing and releasing music were integral to her success as an artist, and that Playtime Is Over is the first example of this. I think that classifies Playtime Is Over as notable under the criteria. But because the subject of the articles is more her early recordings, would that be a better article? I still think Playtime Is Over should get it's own article; but if I'm wrong, would an article that combines information about Playtime Is Over and Sucka Free be appropriate, since they, together, are discussed in depth as the early recordings that launched her career? Or an article about her music releases (her recordings and marketing tactics) before Beam Me Up, Scotty?

Here are the articles: http://rapfix.mtv.com/2012/04/04/nicki-minaj-playtime-is-over-mixtape-shoot-footage/; http://www.musictimes.com/articles/9655/20140904/nicki-minaj-reflects-on-her-career-calls-lil-wayne-the-king-in-cover-story-for-the-fader.htm; http://www.thefader.com/2014/08/05/cover-story-nicki-minaj; http://www.billboard.com/articles/news/959722/nicki-minaj-artists-to-watch-2010; http://hiphopwired.com/2009/08/31/nicki-minaj-officially-becomes-a-young-money-millionaire/; http://thesource.com/2014/07/05/7-years-after-playtime-is-over-a-2007-interview-with-nicki-minaj/

Someone who wants to argue

Again number 9 states winning a music competition NOT AN AWARD.

Here is the criteria number 8 and number 9. 8. Has won or been nominated for a major music award, such as a Grammy, Juno, Mercury, Choice or Grammis award. 9. Has won or placed in a major music competition.

I don't understand why this info is getting confused for my entry to be accepted. The OnStage with Slash is a major music competition. Lamontcald (talk) 22:24, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

No, it's not. And all your insisting that it is, will not make it so. This isn't a debate, and at this point I'm pretty much done talking to you, since you simply fail to understand. Onel5969 (talk) 02:49, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Sucka Free(mixtape)

Just wanted to let you know I fixed a couple wikilinks that you did in the AfD. Normally, I wouldn't fix other's typos, but I saw you're an experienced editor and just overlooked it and figured you wouldn't mind. Cheers. -War wizard90 (talk) 06:10, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

The page that was declined by you - Judy van Niekerk

Hi, I would you be able to give me one example on why you declined this page so that I can ensure that I can correctly amend this one and other pages I would edit? Many thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Empowering you (talk • contribs) 12:55, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Empowering you - Here's one: "Throughout her writings, seminars and talks, van Niekerk, teaches "Forgiveness" (in the non biblical sense - releasing self from the emotions attached to the event) ...", also the use of first names throughout the article is another. And there are a few others. Onel5969 (talk) 22:59, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Joan Ratner

Thank you for your encouraging comments last week. I hope you can help with the references for my article. Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 13:42, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Leeharrispomeroy - I started on the article today, will take me a few days. There are some copyvio issues with the architectural firm's website. You can take a look and see where I'm heading. Will let you know when I'm finished. Onel5969 (talk) 00:14, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

15:08:53, 11 March 2015 review of submission by MrArmstrong2

• MrArmstrong2 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Herbert Durham (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I have sent you a separate email asking why my original submission on both this page (Herbert Durham) and also Walter Myers were declined, since I believed I met Wikipedia’s criteria of notability.

Since then I have updated this page with further references, and also expanded the bibliography.

Please let me know if this now suffices.

MrArmstrong2 (talk) 15:08, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Abbas Amanat

Hi,

I saw your remarks on my proposed new entry on Abbas Amanat (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Abbas_Amanat). I understand your remark and am at fault for having started with his current position as professor at Yale. I have made a modification at the start and added references. The reason I think this entry might be pertinent if this: he is one of the most important specialists on 19the century social and religious movement in Iran, with many publications and articles on the subject. The subject is obviously important. Please let me know if you see the need for further changes.

thanks,

bahman — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bahman (talk • contribs) 15:18, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bahman - I think that you have shown his notability with the references provided, but the article needs inline references to back up the facts asserted therein. However, the article has a much larger issue: it is a copyright issue with THIS SITE. That needs to be corrected before you resubmit. If it's not, there is a good chance the page will be deleted, and blanked. Once you deal with that, you also need to format the citations, see WP:CIT on how to correctly do that. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:29, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Got it. I'll make the changes and resubmit the draft. Thanks for your help. Bahman — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bahman (talk • contribs) 10:52, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

16:45:45, 11 March 2015 review of submission by Shs123

• Shs123 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Brightview Senior Living (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Thank you for your time in reviewing the Brightview Senior Living article. It was certainly not intended to be an 'advertisement.' Just facts are stated and independent and verifiable resources were used. In the writing of the article, I followed a few submissions already in Wikipedia as a guide - including Sunrise Senior Living, Brookdale Senior Living, Johnson and Johnson and Procter and Gamble - and don't see how the Brightview Senior Living article is any different. The references used in those articles were mostly the companies own website?! I will revise and resubmit but would appreciate an explanation as to why those articles aren't considered 'advertisements.' Thank you in advance for your time.

Shs123 (talk) 16:45, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Shs123 - Just because an article exists on Wikipedia does not mean it is necessarily a good model to base a new article on. It is often better to compare with existing recognized Wikipedia Good Articles. You can find a list of Good Articles about companies at Wikipedia:Good articles/Social sciences and society#Businesses & organizations.

Having said that, I have nominated one of those other articles for deletion, for it also reads like an advertisement, while another definitely needs better sourcing, which I've tagged it, although your comments don't really apply to J&J and P&G. Onel5969 (talk) 02:03, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Daniel Panetta - Updated

Hello Onel5969,

Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate your time looking into the article. Just wanted to let you know, I've cited a few additional references and expanded on his work with Canadian Idol judge Farley Flex. I've re-submitted the article for review and will continue to add more information as I track it down! Draft:Daniel_Panetta

Regards, — Preceding unsigned comment added by JPanic15 (talk • contribs) 18:40, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Buck Sexton

I'm happy to make any additions I have to for the Buck Sexton page. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Buck_Sexton

So, here's a question. Sexton is a CNN contributor. Unfortunately CNN doesn't have a page that lists contributors and his becoming one didn't generate any press. He did, however mention it on his show. In addition, there are videos on Youtube of him being chyroned on CNN as "CNN Political Contributor" (here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o_54R_1blgM ). How would I cite something like that? — Preceding unsigned comment added by TheForgottenMan (talk • contribs) 19:25, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi TheForgottenMan - YouTube isn't a great source, but you could use it to validate certain assertions as a last resort. But there are other sources you could use in this instance. I simply googled him and CNN and came up with a link to a CNN transcript, which clearly defines Sexton's role: here's the link. That's just one example. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 02:11, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

20:10:45, 11 March 2015 review of submission by Bertmbc

• Bertmbc (talk · contribs)
  • User:Bertmbc/The Watauga Treaties: The Great Grant (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Remarks on the rejection of the article “The Watauga Treaties: The Great Grant”

In March 1775 at Fort Watauga in East Tennessee about 1,200 Cherokee and 600 or so white settlers gathered to make what turned out to be four real estate transactions. The Cherokee were the sellers and various Americans were the buyers. There were four large tracts sold resulting in four deeds. These are known as The Path Grant (subject of my piece the Path Grant Deed), The Great Grant (subject of the piece in question), The Jacob Brown Grants, and the Charles Robertson Grant. The articles on the latter are in development but not yet written. That is, my plan was to write four separate Wiki articles each describing the properties conveyed. As a result of research on the four grants, a sizeable body of information has been gathered on the large group of people involved. The four pieces will refer to each other and thus not be orphans. They can also be linked to other Wiki articles with similar subject matter.

The main thrust of the articles is meant to be the properties. That is, the deeds will be analyzed in the light of current maps and presented to define the boundaries and to provide maps clearly indicating what was bought and sold.

A second reason for the article is to place the events related to the particular grant deed in a much larger historical context. That context includes pure real estate speculation, the gathering storm of revolution by the colonies against the Crown, and how specific individuals acted and reacted.

A third reason was to solidly cite the works of the main historians and primary documents used in the article. Wiki is the compilation of knowledge that includes not only facts but sources. My grandson or the two girls next door might develop some interest in our local history and the first guide will almost certainly be Wikipedia. The articles in question are not only factual, but an easy and direct path to far stronger and more detailed accounts and original documents.

While the article in question does factually overlap other Wiki articles, the other wiki articles do not convey much if any detailed information of the boundaries and locations of the properties. It is this lack of information that led me to begin the study and to engage in the task. This overlap is provided as background

At the outset gathering information on the Path Grant, it finally became obvious that maps on the internet, especially those on Wikipedia were not accurate. The map of the Great Grant that appears on several wiki articles does not accurately depict the Great Grant Boundaries. It apparently was drawn using the very general description of the lands between the Cumberland, Kentucky and Ohio Rivers. The authors of the map apparently did not have the actual courses that include a large area to the south of the rivers and the Cumberland Mountain including the Powell River Valley and the ridgeline of Powell Mountain. Most importantly, the Wiki map noted does not include the Cumberland Gap, the key, the very essence, of the Wilderness Trail and the whole effort to open the west.

The article I wrote accurately defines the boundaries and includes a map that precisely indicates those noted in the Parcels Clause of both the Great Grant deed and The Path Grant deed. It also includes a map indicating the topography of mountains and gaps and valleys that provides insight into the understanding of the land by both the Cherokee and the American pioneers. The Great Grant article in question includes two other maps that are not included in any Wiki article. After the Great Grant was declared null and void by the Virginia Convention and the North Carolina Assembly both bodies determined that some recompense was in order. Two grants of 200,000 acres each were made to Henderson & Co. The locations of each of these is indicated in yellow on the Great Grant map and the surveyor’s map of each is included in the article. Absent the story and maps of these two grants, the story is incomplete.

Generally the many, many, Non Wiki historians that have written on the subject of Watauga Treaties and the Transylvania Colony completely omit or pass lightly over the land. They write of people and events but always fail to describe the land in question in adequate detail for the reader to develop an understanding. Reading and then understanding the various deed parcels clauses, even with the very good maps of today, is difficult. I set my task to interpret the deeds draw a map derived from extremely accurate mapping sources and then write the courses as they are shown on the new maps.

In addition to the articles on the four properties, I have obtained original documents that are intended to be put up on Wiki Source. The Path Grant deed from the Hawkins County Registrar of deeds has already been put up on Wiki source. I intend to post the original journal of Richard Henderson for 1775, the 1774 partnership articles for the Louisa Co, and the partnership articles for the subsequent Richard Henderson & Co of January 1775. For someone having an interest, these original documents provide great insight. An ongoing search is underway for the complete Great Grant deed. Presently the parcels clause is known and is included in the Great Grant piece in question. Should the complete deed be located, it will also be put up on Wiki Source.

Regarding the people. The existing Wiki articles do not convey the magnitude of the effort and turmoil that resulted from the gathering at Sycamore Shoals to transact the real estate deals. These people include at least 6 Cherokee Chiefs, nine members of the Henderson & Co syndicate, several witnesses to the documents, several witnesses deposed by the Virginia Convention, several ordinary Cherokee and Americans that facilitated the successful gathering, at least three governors of Virginia, two governors of North Carolina, three future Presidents of the United States, members of the brand new Continental Congress, and the future Lord Chancellor of England. A truly amazing number of people both high bred and common were involved in transacting the four grants and the resulting turmoil.

I am open to your assistance to insure the article is published. I suggest revising the titles. That is, the title would become The Great Grant Deed, The Jacob Brown Grant Deed, and the Charles Robertson Grant Deed. They would thus be in the title format of the previously accepted Path Grant Deed.

Additionally, I made a decision to address each of the four grants separately rather than make one very long article. When writing the path Grand Deed piece I found it difficult to stay focused and not go off on many, many possible side roads. You guidance will be welcomed on that decision.

Lastly, for a reviewer far off in cyberland, the articles proposed might be history in the abstract. For me, the events are essentially local. The point on the Holston River six miles upstream from the Long Island that is the focal point of all the four deeds, lies within a half mile of where I sit.

20:10, 11 March 2015 (UTC)Bertmbc (talk)

Hi Bertmbc - I think that I understand what you're proposing: writing four separate articles, one for each grant, which supplement the original article which currently exists on Wikipedia, and can link to these underlying, more specific articles? I would support that wholeheartedly. Or, did I misunderstand, and you would only be writing an additional 3 articles? Either way, I get it now. But be careful of sounding like an essay, which is when you make assumptive or declarative statements, like "The record is of Indians, not necessarily Cherokee, but whomever they were, they did not acknowledge ...", "the entire Richard Henderson & co purchases proved to be something of a fiasco", "obtained legal advice from Lord Mansfield, the great English jurist and future Lord Chancellor". Just give the facts, no embellishment, no commentary. I like your idea of the retitling, and have moved your draft accordingly. Let me know when you think it's ready to be resubmitted, and I'll take a look at it. Very interesting subject. Onel5969 (talk) 02:23, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

User:MLODROB/sandbox draft issue

Hello, I was using the sandbox to draft a page edit with another user for the page "Biratnagar jute mill strike." There was some confusion, and he mistakenly sent the page in as a "new article request." It was meant to be a merger with the aforementioned article. After we completed the merger, I wanted to blank the sandbox page but noticed a "do not remove line" comment. Is it alright if I do blank the page? Thank you, MLODROB (talk) 20:17, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi MLODROB - Yes, you can blank that line. Thanks for being cautious. Happy editing. Onel5969 (talk) 02:26, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft Neeraj Mehta https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Neeraj_Mehta.

HI,

I have updated my article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Neeraj_Mehta.

Can you please have a look. The references which I mention, all are the (Neeraj Mehta). I am not sure what else should I put in.

Please help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Neeraj Mehta123 (talk • contribs) 04:37, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Neeraj Mehta123 - it's not that you don't have good references, it's that a blp (biography of a living person) requires inline citations, meaning that when an assertion is made in the article, it needs to be referenced at that point. For example, in the career section, the first sentence makes 3 assertions: about when he was 9, 12 and 14. Those three facts need a reference which should come at the end of that sentence (after the period). It can be a single reference, which backs up all three assertions, or several, but the facts all need a reference. You can learn about references at referencing for beginners, or at this link, to learn about what to cite and where to put the citations and at this page, which gives you examples about how to properly format your citations. Right now, your citations are all "raw links", which isn't acceptable. Hope this helps. After you make another edit, feel free to let me know and I'll take another look. Onel5969 (talk) 13:30, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 (Sigh!),
I have had a go at wikifying this page. But it is obviously an autobiography and also appears to be a copvio of http://www.desimd.com/doctors/dr-neeraj-mehta, particularly the "Experience" and "Awards & Honors" sections. It makes a number of rather grandiose claims that require independent verification, not "published articles by the concerned person"!

• And the 'plot' thickens!, see Neerajmehta-expertfitness (talk · contribs). - - 220 of ^Borg 06:14, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi 220 of Borg - wow. That's all I can say. Obviously, he's just on here to self-promote - have tagged both the article and his user page for csd. Nice catch.

Regarding your work on the article, nice job, at least it now looks like an article. Keep up the good work. Onel5969 (talk) 12:09, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

You're welcome. "100,000 hours of practical experience in coaching"? that's like 60 hours per week for 50 weeks a year for 33+ years (they claim 35 years in fitness industry). AND "5 times National Gold Medalist in various Martial Arts like Judo, Karate, Taekwondo and Athletics" AND "3 times National Arm Wrestling Champion" AND "a successful model". Sounds unlikely!
And both pages are gone! Yay! Funnily enough, I have seen such self aggrandisement on WP user pages! Usually by teenagers who are poets, singers, actors, directors, producers, social workers and politicians at age 17! I kid you not!

• I added a few indents to your reply to help it 'flow' better. Interestingly, you stared this account only 3 days before I started editing WP, but I was editing as a static IP for over 2 years. 220 of ^Borg 12:43, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Article Rejection

Hi Onel5969 I recently had an article declined and was wondering if you could help me understand why. I thought that I had found enough articles that would validate the notability of the company I am talking about. The link to the article is here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Swinburne_Online I would be very interested to hear your thoughts on how I can improve it? Kind regards — Preceding unsigned comment added by Swinon (talk • contribs) 04:41, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Swinon - It has to do with your references. Wikipedia notability guidelines (in general, see WP:GNG; for corps/orgs also see WP:NCORP) require substantial coverage from independent sources. You have 5 sources. The Swinburne source is very good. The CareerFaqs is a good mention, but very brief. The AFR is another nice one, but is very brief. The final two are good for verification purposes of a fact in the article, but not so much for notability. If you can come up with another 1 or 2 (2 would be better, of course) articles of the caliber of the Swinburne source, that would definitely show the group's notability. You do a nice job of telling about the program, without crossing the line (imho) of promotion. Let me know if you find those sources and I'll take another look at it. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:47, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 Just wondered if I could ask one more question. If there are various articles that talk about the same topic, should I include them or just the best one? I guess my question is can you have more than one reference for a particular point in case? Thank you for your help, I feel I'm getting closer :)

Hi Swinon - Yes. But you should rarely have 3, and almost never more than 3. Pick the best citation or two (most well-known, reliable), and use those. Onel5969 (talk) 11:53, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 - Thanks for your help. I found another source that was completely about Swinburne Online plus one more less direct citation however it is still getting rejected. I was wondering if you could have a quick look and offer any pointers about where I am going wrong? Kind regards :)

Hi Swinon - The two new cites (since I last reviewed it), are both good, but the one is quite brief. The last one is particularly good. If you can find 1-2 more like that, I think you'll have it. If you do, let me know and I'll take another look. Onel5969 (talk) 02:58, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Article Rejection: Chuma Anagbado

I will get more relevant references and edit. Thank you.NejeebBello (talk) 07:10, 12 March 2015 (UTC) NejeebBello

Request on 08:46:12, 12 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Myfriendkrisna

• Myfriendkrisna (talk · contribs)
  • User:Myfriendkrisna (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Dear Reviewer,
I tried to create a page "Great Eastern Energy Corporation Ltd. (GEECL). I tried to include at most references and covered almost what I could found on internet. I included references of news papers, their company website pages, London Stock exchange as reference etc. etc.

Would you please mind to guide me clearly what should I do to get this page created.

Thank You.

Myfriendkrisna (talk) 08:46, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Myfriendkrisna - for notability purposes, Wikipedia requires substantial coverage from independent sources. The last time your article was declined, most of the sources were simply mentions, or listings. Others were not independent, being either from the company's site or press releases. The only good article was the Business Standard piece, and that was pretty brief. I see you've added some additional citations, which, imho, push the company over the notability threshold. One last thing needs to be done, and that's the references need to be formatted correctly. I'll format one for you, so you can see one of a couple of proper ways to format them, you can see others at WP:CIT. Once you make the references correct, let me know and I'll move it to the mainspace. One other thing, your citations should be inline, if appropriate (for example, the citation I fixed should be up in the Business operations section). Onel5969 (talk) 13:59, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969- I have made all the changes and updations as per your guidance. Please have a look at my sandbox and if it is perfect please move it to main place.

Thank You, Myfriendkrisna (talk) 06:52, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Myfriendkrisna - Nice job! Approved it a moment ago. Onel5969 (talk) 12:04, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

10:24:12, 12 March 2015 review of submission by AggieRogers17

• AggieRogers17 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Epping Upper Clapton RFC (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi there, I have updated the page draft to include better references with links to a published book and online newspapers. I hope these are sufficient to show notability.

Thanks

AggieRogers17 (talk) 10:24, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi AggieRogers17 - references for notability purposes should show significant coverage, which part of means that the references should go beyond mere local and regional sources. Onel5969 (talk) 14:27, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

"Software Collections" article submission

Software Collections — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robert.kratky (talk • contribs) 12:19, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi,

I see you rejected my article submission on "Software Collections" (unfortunately, I didn't get a notification by email, so I'm only replying now). I was aware of the fact that some might consider it an advertisement, which is why I tried to be as neutral as possible and included references to upstream sources (fedoraproject.org, softwarecollections.org).

Software Collections is an independent open-source project. It is true that some of its developers are sponsored by Red Hat, Inc., but so are developers who work on the Linux kernel or other open-source projects. Also, Red Hat offers a commercial product based on Software Collections, but the same is true for a lot of other open-source software (basically the entire GNU system etc. -- all these projects have Wikipedia articles).

Would you consider it an improvement if I removed the last section, i.e. "Recognition"? I thought it was relevant since it showed that the project has actually led to the development of a tool that people in the IT community can appreciate, but I'd be happy to remove if you think it's inappropriate.

Regards, Robert — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robert.kratky (talk • contribs) 12:17, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Robert.kratky - Actually, recognition is not considered advertising, since it is from third party sources, so that section is fine. The difficulty arises when you have sections like "SoftwareCollections.org", and a list of features, both of which are simply promotional material. The first paragraph of the lead is fine, while the second is basically promotional. The History section is fine. The usage section is borderline promotion, but if that's the only thing I think it would be okay. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:04, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

13:05:26, 12 March 2015 review of submission by Myfriendkrisna

• Myfriendkrisna (talk · contribs)
  • User:Myfriendkrisna/sandbox (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I have added many more references which show the subject's notability. I have added News papers pages as reference.

Myfriendkrisna (talk) 13:05, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

15:16:20, 12 March 2015 review of submission by JalKiRani

• JalKiRani (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:The Music Room (album) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I have provided all valid references on this article and yet I don't understand why my article is getting rejected. Can you please tell me exactly what change I will have to make so that you accept my article?

JalKiRani (talk) 15:16, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi JalKiRani - that's simple, it doesn't meet any of the requirements for notability. There was a link provided which you should check out as to what determines notability. Onel5969 (talk) 15:26, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions to improve the article

Hi Onel5969,

I have edited the document again https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Evidence-based_conservation. Could you please take another look and let me know your suggestions? Many thanks!

Avicennia marina (talk) 17:25, 12 March 2015 (UTC)User:Avicennia marina

Hi Avicennia marina - MUCH better! There are still conclusions which are drawn in the article. For example, the last line in the History section. Also, the Critique section is almost all discussion/conclusion. Simply state what the dissenting opinions are, and leave the conclusions to the reader. Let me know when you make the changes, and I'll take another look. Onel5969 (talk) 22:00, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Ran Hwang- edited article, wanted to ask for another pair of eyes

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Prtonthat15/Ran_hwang

Hi, I recently submitted this article. I updated it with less self-referencing sources, and more outside sources, and attempted to correct any errors. I wanted to ask if you could take a look at it. I want to make this as complete as possible. Any help would be more welcome.

thanks!

Prtonthat15 (talk) 17:09, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Looks much better - descriptive without being promotional. The sources are much better. However, you still need to format your citations correctly (see WP:CIT). I moved it to the mainspace - Congrats! I also tweaked the references slightly, for esthetic reasons. Onel5969 (talk) 12:15, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

AfC you accepted.

please see Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Robert E. Love DGG ( talk ) 20:01, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up DGG. I saw that you had tagged it for AfD. I try to err on the side of accepting articles, so as not to discourage new editors. I also don't usually participate in AfD discussions on articles I've accepted. I guess I feel that the fact I accepted it should make it clear where I stand. I also don't want folks to feel that I feel I need to defend my actions. In this particular case, I completely agree with your individual assessments for each of the areas of this subject's life. But I felt that taken together, in total, it might simply pass GNG.

Anyway, let me know if you think I should comment on AfD's. Thanks for backstopping me. Onel5969 (talk) 21:50, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Still arguing

Please review this again.

Number 8 in the criteria referes to a major award as (Grammy, AMA, etc) but number 9 pertains to a major competition and the OnStage with Slash sponsored by Guitar Center is a major competition. By that we qualify using number 9 as a criteria and NOT number 8.

Lamontcald (talk) 21:10, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

BLOM Bank

User:Ghinael ; article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:BLOM_Bank_Lebanon Hello, thank you for reviewing my article. I’m trying to rewrite my article based on the notes you’ve listed. However, I would appreciate it if you could provide me with a break down or like specific examples of phrases in my article that don’t sound from a neutral point of view. Knowing that I tried to edit few terms in order to formalize the tone and improve my article.

Also, most of the references I found are from online sources, would that be the reason why that they do not show the company’s notability? Because from the research I’ve done on how to add references to my Wikipedia article, it’s stated that online sources are not enough, could you please advise on this point too.

Would it be suitable to mention anything related to the bank’s innovation and how well it is recognized in the banking industry, or you believe that it’s better to avoid such topics?

Thank you for your assistance ! Ghinael (talk) 22:25, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ghinael - The entire article format is like a promotional brochure, with simple listings and highlights. Articles are written in prose (for the most part), with lists in particular places when appropriate (unless the entire article is a list, such as List of Oscar Winners). Also, phrases like "BLOM Bank offers a broad range of products and services through its business entities", "developed to meet market trends", "The Banker Middle East nominated BLOM Bank as the Best Retail Bank in in the Middle East for 2010 in addition to getting granted 13 different titles during the same year", "2001 was a prosperous year for BLOM Bank". Get rid of the corporate governance section. Get rid of the mentions of most of the non-notable people - for example no one cares that Ezzat Traboulsi was general manager (except perhaps for Traboulsi and his family).

Also, get rid of the bold and CAPS throughout the article. Get rid of honorifics, no Dr., Mr., etc. The list of subsidiaries is okay, but again, the CAP issue needs to be addressed, and it shouldn't be in the lead. Move it to where you have Corporate Governance now, and combine it with Business Divisions. Even though the company stylizes their name in all caps, if you look at articles you cite, they are referred to as Blom. That's how it should be in this article.

Sources - there are two types, those which verify facts, and those which show notability. All sources should be from reliable sources, but those for notability purposes should be from independent sources (not connected to the company, not press releases, interviews etc), and should be in-depth coverage, not simple listings. All of your citations are either not independent, or are simple listings.

Regarding notability... by all means add it if they have been noted for it. BUT - back it up with independent references. If you don't have the references, it's simply promotional. Hope all of this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:32, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

07:20:18, 13 March 2015 review of submission by Myfriendkrisna

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Dear Reviewer,
I have made all the updations and changes as per your guidance. Please have a look and if it is perfect now, then please move my article to the main place.

Thank You, Myfriendkrisna (talk) 07:20, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

10:53:44, 13 March 2015 review of submission by Derrick Essirifi

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I didn't copy and paste from www.ghfreestyle.com. I own the legal rights to everything i submitted Derrick Essirifi (talk) 10:53, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft Walter Kofler

Hey, I try to add what you suggested, specially concerning notability. My problem was /is that could only make a small selection of his very big "overture" https://www.i-med.ac.at/sozialmedizin/en/staff/litkofler2014.pd (48 pages... ) - it`s not easy to check all the 100 of details, if the are relevant or not....

Kofler fits to the criteria 3 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Notability_(academics)#Criteria because of Membership in the Russian Academy of Science, I think also to criteria 7, and to 6 and also 1 because of 3. Pleas can you make a small check - what can I do more ? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2.173.237.119 (talk) 10:59, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi - you're right. Resubmit and let me know. Onel5969 (talk) 12:37, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you--2.173.237.119 (talk) 20:43, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jayantilal_Gada

user name: Yatin Rewale article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jayantilal_Gada Hello - I've just seen that My article I submitted for review Draft:Jayantilal Gada has been rejected after review, with the feedback that This submission's references do not adequately show the subject's notability. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so.Please tell me what changes i have to do to get this article accepted.If any reference in article are reliable or not pls tell me .thank you (Yatin Rewale (talk) 05:12, 13 March 2015 (UTC)) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 118.102.171.138 (talk)

Hi - Wikipedia requires significant coverage from independent, reliable sources to show a subject's notability. Bollywood Hungama and imdb are not reliable sources. The one article which might be all right (not sure about it's reliability, is the showbiz article), and that's only a brief mention. Onel5969 (talk) 12:41, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

12:52:31, 13 March 2015 review of submission by Shyamw1

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Shyamw1 (talk) 12:52, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi,

My article on this page "https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shyamw1/sandbox" was declined. The reason quoted was that it did not follow the footnotes protocol. I thought I did. I have read the instructions on the page for beginners but am not sure what is wrong with my citation. Can you please tell me what exactly I should do - the general comment about not keeping to Wikipedia footnotes guidelines doesn't help me. I would like a specific example from my article with instructions on how I should go about correcting it so I understand what needs to be done. Although I have been told that I can ask reviewers and get on to chat where friendly editors are waiting to help, I find that help has been minimal. I would appreciate any proper assistance you can give me - I would really like to see this article published as I have spent so much time researching. Thanks so much.

12:52, 13 March 2015 (UTC)Winnie

Hi Shyamw1 - the decline box gives links to some good places to start. Referencing for beginners is a very brief overview; cite explains more in-depth about when cites have to be used, should be used, and where they should be placed. You have simply spewed your references, without order or formatting, at the end of the article. Also take a look at formatting citations, to see how to properly format your references. The biggest issue, is that there is not a single in-line citation. Articles need citations within the body of the text in order to verify/validate any assertions made. For example, your article states: "Mr. Ayyangar joined Madras civil service in 1905". That needs to be proven. A footnote should occur at the end of the sentence (after the period).

Your article also has a few other issues. First, is formatting. Take a look at the Manual of Style, which will explain how to format the headings for your sections. You also need to get rid of honorifics, like Mr., and there are a couple of sections it looks like you indented, which caused a formatting break (the blue boxes you see). Finally, avoid making declarative statements, like "During this time the village panchayats, especially in the districts of Ramnad and Guntur, were well organized and efficient." Just list the facts. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:26, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 13:38:25, 13 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Manc86

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I'm asking advice, rather than requesting a review - I think I put this in the wrong place before. Hope this is OK here.

I have a question about notability. The Subject in question has been a member of three bands, whose notability already appears to have been established via three established pages. One band included Paul Cook from The Sex Pistols and still includes Rob Symmons (founder of Subway Sect). So, if accepted, the "Matthew Karas" page would immediately be linked to from four Wikipedia pages, where the subject's name is mentioned.

(1) Would those links from other Wikipedia pages make a difference to the measure of notability?

Also, those pages which mention this subject have a load more references, so

(2) should I just copy and paste some of those references to this page?

I figured that if there were links from the new page to those band pages, it would be unnecessary to repeat the reference on the new page . Finally, the subject's notability as a technologist is a separate issue. The references in that section came from "The Independent", "Wired" and "The Register", which are all influential and reliably independent. It is not my primary interest, but through the process, I met a journalist who had written articles relevant to both sections. So, another question -

(3) on the technology sections, are those links sufficient, i.e. would the article be acceptable without the music part?

Thanks for your help. It is very complicated, but, the mid-1980s music scene in Manchester isn't covered very well, so I have a few more articles up my sleeve, and want to get the process right.

Manc86 (talk) 13:38, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Manc86 - I see you were answered on the AfC help desk, so I'll let that answer stand. Onel5969 (talk) 20:51, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

reply to recent rejection

Thank you for the prompt and helpful critique of my proposed article on Ramon Guthrie. I think that I shall be able to find adequate documentation of his notability give the number of the contributors to his festschrift who have their own Wikipedia entries. I will visit the Teahouse.

Yours truly, Wendell Smith (talk) 13:50, 13 March 2015 (UTC)Wendell Smith

The important (and new) references in my F.O.D. article

Hi Onel5969, thanks for your quick response. You asked me to show which references in my article about F.O.D. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:F.O.D._%28band%29) were the new/reliable/highprofile ones, because you couldn't locate them.

The reference numbers are five and six. Reference 5 is the high profile European magazine, called RMP Magazine. If you scroll on the page it links to, it shows all the editions over the last couple of years. The printed Groezrock edition which is referenced (F.O.D. is on the cover, and there's an article about them in this magazine), is all the way down, between RMP Magazine #5 and RMP Magazine #6. I've also added another reference to a newspaper article in Het Nieuwsblad (reference seventeen). Reference twenty-four (which was already there) is another important one, because Gazet van Antwerpen is the local Newspaper of the City of Antwerpen (capital city of the Dutch speaking part of Belgium).

Looking forward to your feedback. Please let me know if I have to resubmit my article, if you can re-review it, or if there's another way for me to move forward with it now that I've updated it. Thanks.

Kind regards, Arjan van Geel, The Netherlands. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 14:57, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Arjanvangeel - Yup. Looks good. Resubmit and let me know. Onel5969 (talk) 01:23, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969, thanks so much for all your help in improving the article! You were the first of all reviewers who gave me some real and extensive feedback, which is much appreciated. I'm very pleased with the end result. I have resubmitted the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 09:32, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Arjanvangeel - I've posted a message on your draft, but your article was hijacked. Happens sometimes. That page will be deleted, and then we'll move your article to the mainspace. Nice work. You should be proud for sticking with it, and never losing your cool. Onel5969 (talk) 12:18, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969, thanks so much for your help, kind words and feedback. Means the world to me! Yes, it's been a long road, working on this article. But it the end, it was also really educational, writing my first Wikipedia article and getting insight into the inner workings of this. It was confusing at times (this hijacking in particular), but you live and learn. Cheers from the Netherlands. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 12:25, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Articles published but want to keep it in sand box till full proof reading

Dear Reviewer,
I created an article and it is accepted and have been published on main place. But i have to make so many updations in this articles. Even have to cross check the facts also with full proof.
Is it possible to keep article back in my sandbox, till i access are the sources and verify the facts myself first. Please help. Myfriendkrisna (talk) 14:13, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Myfriendkrisna - You can't put the article back to your sandbox, but you can copy it there, and then work on it. First, completely empty your sandbox (except for the top tag). Then go to your article's page, click on the edit button, and highlight the entire article. Click <ctrl> C; that copies the entire page. Then exit out of the article, without saving. Go to your sandbox, click edit, and then click <ctrl> V, that will paste the entire article onto your sandbox. Then you can work on it there, save all you want, use your preview, etc. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:28, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Article Rejection of Rev. W. A. (Willis Anselm), Jarrel D.D. article?

Onel5969, regarding the rejection of the Rev. W. A. Jarrel article on grounds he is not notable enough. Jarrel's work was endorsed by the world renouned Charles Spurgeon. I think that makes him very notable indeed, certainly in the 19th century he was. If nothing else the article should be here because it does relate to an associate of Spurgeon. Jarrel was a noted leader in the Baptist movement back in that day, very historially important.

I am new at this so I'm not sure what the threshold is to be considered notable, but I was looking for more information about this author and found nothing here at wikipedia so I decided to at least start an article.

Thank you, Ed — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ed Elam (talk • contribs) 18:42, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ed Elam - Wikipedia has some pretty good guidelines on notability. Take a look at the general guide on notability, and notability for biographies. Spurgeon's endorsement alone would not meet those criteria. Take a look at those guidelines, and see if you think the subject of the article meets those. Another good reference is Wikipedia:Your first article. After you look at those, if you think you can provide enough references to meet the notability threshold, add them, and I'll take another look. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:35, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the response. This is highly suspecious to me, I wasn't aware that wikipedia censored history that is not "notable". It's the notable characters that have the most myth connected to them. As a historian I can tell you that it is the secondary characters of history that tells us more about what was really going on. I will note this about wikipedia, secondary history is completely blocked, the most important information to historians. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ed Elam (talk • contribs) 05:04, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

For example, if I am doing research on Charles Spurgeon, as a historian it's not the front page news I'm most interested in, that is often hype. What I want is to find as many secondary persons connected to Spurgeon, such as an author like Jarrel. What did author think of Spurgeon, how did Spurgeon influence his work? I want Jarrel to show up in a google search, and he did but not here. So finding out that wikipedia blocks important historical information based solely on popularity is frustrating. I was aware that wikipedia didn’t seem to have any real good in-depth historical information but I thought that was just because wikipedia was in it’s infancy and the information will find it’s way there. But now I know wikipedia actually blocks secondary historical information. Nearly worthless. I short, I really don't want to contribute to an encyclopedia whose critia is "popularity" I can get "popular" information from the National Enquirer.

Ed Elam - Wow, you're really confused. Standards of notability are not censorship. But, take care. Onel5969 (talk) 12:18, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 - I don't think that is reasonable. Jarrel is a very prolific and well noted 19th century author. His books are still in circulation more than century later, and that's not notable? Why are you censoring this article? Wikipedia has tons of less notable people, take a look at "Arizona Charlie" [[1]] whose only claim to fame is he knew Buffalo Bill, posted based on a single reference, I have four. Ed Elam (talk) 02:16, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Ed Elam - Okay, so you're a little bit beyond confused. Take care, done with speaking with someone who is so recalcitrant. Onel5969 (talk) 03:06, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

The Great Grant Deed

formerly The Watauga Treaties: the Great Grant

With reference your guidance:

The sentence “In the end, the entire Richard Henderson & co purchases proved to be something of a fiasco.” Was removed

The sentence ”The record is of Indians, not necessarily Cherokee, but whomever they were, they did not acknowledge Richard Henderson's Great Grant deed.” was removed

obtained legal advice from Lord Mansfield, the great English jurist

Regarding your thought on the above, I added a citation the Wiki piece on Lord Mansfield that redirects to William Murray, 1st Earl of Mansfield. My statement is considered to be solidly factual and not opinionated. It should be ok when the wiki link is inserted. Please note also that the sentence on Lord Mansfield is very solidly supported by the citation 17 , Henderson: The Significance of the Transylvania Company , page 12. The sentence is considered completely factual

I also revised the paragraph For Further Reading to reflect what I assume will now be correct titles for the Path Gant Deed and as yet the unsubmitted articles on The Jacob Brown Grants, The Charles Robertson Grants and The Watauga Treaties: The People. I may not actually develop the People article because the subject is quite complex and perhaps lengthy and maybe even boring.

I thank you for your guidance and will endeavor to hold tight to cited reference as I develop future articles Bertmbc (talk) 20:00, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bertmbc - I tweaked the opening to conform more with MOS. I also edited the Dissention section, to give you an idea of the difference between an encyclopedia article, and an essay. Using verbiage like "a dark and bloody ground" should only be done if that is a direct quote, at which point it would need a specific, in-line reference.

The closing section has to go. That is truly something that would only appear in an essay, not an article. The opening quote also needs to be someplace else. I like it, it simply doesn't belong where it is. Incorporate it into the article in a blockquote, in an appropriate place.

You've taught me something though... I've never seen that Wikisource thing before. Thanks for that. Although, sentences like, The Path Grant deed in it’s entirety can be read at Path Grant" need to be deleted. You simply place a link in either a "See also" section (if it's another wikipage), or the "External links" section if it links to something outside of Wikipedia.

Any quote needs an inline reference, from EXACTLY where you got it (in other words, page #, not chapter). On the whole, avoid commentary or descriptive phrasing, such as "quite lengthy", "for the most part". Just the facts, no embellishments. While not every line needs a citation, there should be no section which is not sourced. I hope all of this makes sense. I'll keep working with you on this until we can get it into shape to be published. Onel5969 (talk) 02:12, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for your efforts.

I'm going to relax and enjoy the process. I'm going to take at least the next week to reflect on your comments and to make revisions Bertmbc (talk) 15:59, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Serge Blanc

Hi Onel5969,

You asked for a speedy deletion of this article : https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Serge_Blanc_(violinist)

However, there was no copyright infringement of the website www.sergeblanc.com as it is stated in the footer of this website : "This work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Sharealike 3.0 Unported License (CC-BY-SA)"

I'm working the author of the website itself, and we wanted to publish this article as it was... Is there a way to get it back?

Hi - although since this is unsigned, not sure. Can you send me a link to the page it was copied from. Even though it was a CC-BY-SA, I'm not sure that is okay, but I'll ask. If you send me the link to that page, I can check it out. Onel5969 (talk) 02:16, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Article deletion

Hi Onel5969,

You asked for a speedy deletion of this article : https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Serge_Blanc_(violinist)

However, there was no copyright infringement of the website www.sergeblanc.com as it is stated in the footer of this website : "This work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Sharealike 3.0 Unported License (CC-BY-SA)"

I'm working the author of the website itself, and we wanted to publish this article as it was... Is there a way to get it back? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Noeclement (talk • contribs) 21:26, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Montézic Power Station

Hello,

Thanks for your helpful comment about my article, Draft:Montézic Power Station. I've added a few more references that I hope will prove sufficient. The difficulty I have, since I only translate content from foreign wikis (I don't write my own articles), is finding English-language references to supplement or replace the original ones. I'm afraid I've exhausted my available resources for this particular article, however, so if what I've added isn't enough, there is nothing more I can do. Anyways, thanks again!--KeeperOfBees (talk) 22:33, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi KeeperOfBees - remember, you don't have to have English sources, only the citations need to be formatted in English. We all have translation programs. Thanks for taking the time to translate these articles. I'm not going to review this, since you've resubmitted, since I don't think with the current references it meets the notability criteria, but another editor may think differently, so let's wait and see. I did find two more references, which you might use: here and here. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 02:32, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Luke Bronin

Hey,

My username is Drapery24 and I wrote the Luke Bronin draft submission. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Luke_Bronin)

I realize there are problems with the page, and have removed many details on the draft I'm going to resubmit. However, in terms of relevance, is being a candidate for Mayor not enough? Am I missing something? Any help would be much appreciated!

Thanks

Drapery24 (talk)

Hi Drapery24 - the short answer is no. WP:POLITICIAN gives you the three criteria for politicians. Your best shot is under the general notability criteria, found at WP:GNG, but I don't think he meets those, most of the citations are not independent, or do not show substantial coverage. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 02:38, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hey,

You're right, just being a candidate doesn't guarantee notability. I thought that, given the background of the individual, this candidacy was prominent enough to warrant a page at this stage. Do you think it's close enough that you would reconsider if the sourcing was more independent and some details were deleted? Or, wait until there's more coverage? If you do a brief search on the guy, I think you may be persuaded that he meets the criteria by the volume and quality of results. Thanks again for the help.

Drapery24 (talk)

What do I need

Hello amonroe713 here, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:J._Abrams what do I need to do specifically to get my article published. Wiki is one of the best informational tools and I need my article to be published, therefore I need to know all that I need to do inorder for this to happen. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amonroe713 (talk • contribs) 03:51, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Amonroe713 - first, take a look at Wikipedia:Your first article. That's the best place to start. In a nutshell, you have to find good (in-depth) articles from independent, reliable sources to show the notability of the subject. That means they can't have anything to do with the brand (e.g. the brand's website, press releases), and they have to be secondary sources (e.g. not interviews). If you can come up with 3-4 good sources, then the brand will pass the notability threshold. Once that's done, you have to write the article in an unbiased, non-promotional tone. Don't sell us the brand, tell us facts about the brand. Sentences like "The main focus of their brand is to provide the Houston youth with a Ready to Wear and fashionable product to both males and females with an addition to clothes that have that street wear feel in great quality" and "J. Abrams brand believes fashion itself ..." need to go away. Finally, your article also reads in an informal manner. Phrases like "Just as musical artist, painters, photographers, etc gain ...", "True fashion should not be classified by the face ..." need to dropped. Stick with the facts. And if it is a fact, it should be able to be referenced. Onel5969 (talk) 12:31, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Philip Kapneck

photoloop here:

Hello, thanks for reviewing the entry I added. I'm having problems finding the references you asked for.

I have someone in Maryland trying to get to the MD Archives to find some documentation. They don't appear to have anything online from the 1970s.

Can you please advise me on what I'm missing - what do I actually need references to show?

Ambassador Kapneck was the first state Trade Ambassador - of any US state - and he has been the longest-serving - 40 years so far.

If we do find something in the offline Archives, how do I reference it? Can we use a scan/photo of a document?

Here is one reference I found, showing that he was the special advisor, but I don't know how to use it, can you please advise?

http://digital.lib.umd.edu/archivesum/findingaids/elkins.pdf

RECORDS OF THE PRESIDENT'S OFFICE: WILSON H. ELKINS University Archives, University of Maryland, College Park

Note of July 17, 1970 on Philip Kapneck, [1970] Page 354 Kapneck, Phil, Governor's Special Assistant for Student Affairs, 1971 Page 193

--- Also, I have this:

In 1970, university students throughout Maryland had been involved in protests over faculty tenure. Mandel wanted to change the dynamic, to open lines of communication between the students and his office. Mandel appointed Philip Kapneck, a local businessman, as Special Advisor on Student Affairs. Mandel's idea and the special advisor were both so successful and well received by students across the State of Maryland that in 1971, the student body presented Kapneck with a "Man of the Year" award, the first time in 12 years it went to someone other than a student.

http://newspaperarchive.com/us/maryland/cumberland/cumberland-news/1971/03-01/page-2

Hi - First, please remember to sign your messages with a four ~, that way we can take a look at any of your information if we're unclear. Regarding your article. Sources do not have to be available on-line. If you have good solid sources that are available off-line, use those, just cite them correctly (you can find out how at WP:CIT). I do a lot of historical editing, and I use books from the library all the time. Just make sure you have complete cites, with all the required info. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:39, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

07:36:02, 14 March 2015 review of submission by TheGoldenPachyderm

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I don't understand why I was denied--the portion that you wrote was copywrited was intended as a direct quote and formatted as such?

TheGoldenPachyderm (talk) 07:36, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi TheGoldenPachyderm - Ah, I see what you were attempting. The way you have it structured (even though you have it as a blockquote) makes it unclear if you were quoting the organization. Change the preceding sentence to something like: "On this issue, The National Association of Foreign Student Advisors said the following: " - You don't need to state where it's from, since that's included in the cite (makes the sentence less wordy), and the colon will inform the reader that what follows is a quote from the organization.

Your article, however, suffers from two other issues. First, and the easiest fix, is over-citing. Take a look at that link which explains what I mean by that. Basically, there is rarely a time when something needs more than two citations. Second, your article suffers from an NPOV issue. For instance, in the lead you state, "One explanation for the increase ...", but never discuss other explanations in the body of the article. In fact, you never discuss that explanation in the body of the article. A second example is the entire Anti- section. You offer no opposing viewpoints. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:53, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello again!

I'll fix that with the block quote. I didn't find other explanations but if anyone else did and edited them in that would be understandable. I don't think that takes away from the value of the article as a whole (there isn't one on International Students in the US which is a little crazy since there are so many and it is objectively increasing). Likewise with the anti section, there isn't much other than op-eds in the way of saying that reception is golden, and I added so many citations because people don't use Wikipedia as-is, it's often used as the starting point to find more sources if it's used for academic papers. I thought more citations would mean people could find more use from the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TheGoldenPachyderm (talk • contribs) 19:37, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

TheGoldenPachyderm - Just so you understand, I never said that the article should not be written. I agree that it could make a good article for Wikipedia. I was just trying to help you understand some of the concepts here regarding NPOV. Onel5969 (talk) 04:39, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Help! Seems like someone stole my article (and is asking band for money)

Hello again, Onel5969, I have an important question! While I was working on the article (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:F.O.D._%28band%29), and discussing it with you this week, somebody seems to have stolen the entire draft text I've put so much work into, and used it to put it up in the article space (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/F.O.D._%28band%29), without the six months of editing & reviewing history (which are important, as they prove how the article came to be).

One of the band members of F.O.D. contacted me about this in the past; apparently (a while ago) a third party was asking the band money, saying they had privileges to get an article published (which is weird, because I thought 'paid editing' is strictly forbidden on Wikipedia).

Can you confirm whether there is something weird/illegal going on, or not? This new, 'official' article was created on thursday (it is 99.9% an exact copy of my work - minus some external links at the end). I resubmitted mine, after your okay, today (this saturday morning). So this is two days later. The 'official' article was also published today (hence the confusion). Meanwhile, my (original) draft article about F.O.D. is still 'awaiting review'. And the new article (which seems to be LIVE, not a DRAFT) has no history with my edits anymore :'(.

Any information/help would be much appreciated, by this confused editor!

Kind regards, Arjan van Geel.

PS: details of the person who stole it, and was asking the band for money: Bombsperony (fake wikipedia user, who - apparently - has high wikipedia privileges?) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 10:14, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

(talk page stalker) @Arjanvangeel: I have nominated that page for speedy deletion under WP:CSD#G6 as a wp:Cut and paste move which is not allowed, as it does not take the edit history, which is required for wp:Attribution Copyright. This is normally meant for cases where a page is already in article space is copied and pasted into a page with a new name not, as you put it, a hijacking of your draft. (the correct procedure is at WP:Moving a page.) At the very least it's rather rude!. However Bombsperony (talk · contribs) is a new editor and we need to wp:Assume good faith, and that they were so impressed with your page that they thought it should go out there for everyone to read. (maybe). That editor has no special privileges over what you have. If anyone is asking for money, for an article, I'm sure that the WP hierarchy would be interested in knowing who they are.220 of ^Borg 12:14, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Arjanvangeel - (and thanks, 220 of Borg) - We're working on it. And Borg has already taken the necessary steps to clear it up. It should happen shortly. Be patient, like you've been for the last couple of months as you've worked to improve this article. btw - excellent job! Onel5969 (talk) 12:57, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

You're again welcome. (And I like Port myself, though Johnnie Walker or similar is always welcome ) --220 of ^Borg 13:08, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks Onel5969 (and thanks 220 of Borg), for making my experience on Wikipedia a pleasant and inspiring one. I'll be patient, no worries. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arjanvangeel (talk • contribs) 13:06, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

12:28:47, 14 March 2015 review of submission by Bent strings

• Bent strings (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Paul Swinton (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Thanks Onel5969 for reviewing so quickly (I had expected I would have a long time to improve it before it reached the top of the queue ;-) The url (which I hadn't seen before)quoted in the decline says "Source: Wikipedia - Text from this biography licensed under creative commons license" a) does that make it OK?

I had, in fact, sourced the info from the sonny black page - and yes I did follow the text closely believing that since Swinton and Black were in the same bands - the same textual history should be stated. b) do you think it would be better for me to rewrite in my own words?

Your guidance is appreciated — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bent strings (talk • contribs) 12:34, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Bent strings (talk) 12:28, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bent strings - it doesn't say which CC license. Even then, I'm not sure it can still be used. I actually have a question in to an administrator on this, but that could take some time getting answered. Best thing is to simply re-write the offending portions in your own words. Onel5969 (talk) 13:01, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Rather than create in my own words and have two versions of the band's history - I have replaced it with a link to the other Wiki page and resubmitted. Thanks again for your help. Bent strings (talk) 18:39, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Amanda McKerrow

Amanda McKerrow is one of the most accomplished dancers of her generation. Did you turn down Van Cliburn as "not notable"? I guess it is true that Wikipedia is written only by men, for men and about men. Not to worry. I shall never write another wikipedia article again. Psantry (talk) 13:38, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Psantry - did you even bother to read why the article was declined? Obviously not, based on your uncivil comment above. We attempt to help new writers understand the dynamics which go into getting an article approved. But you want no help, you simply want to vent. Rest assured, no further comments from you are welcome, nor will they be answered. Onel5969 (talk) 13:42, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

What happened to "assume good faith"?Psantry (talk) 11:57, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

I did assume it, until you proved not to have it. Onel5969 (talk) 01:19, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

13:44:59, 14 March 2015 review of submission by PauloCalvo

• PauloCalvo (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Amamalócotl (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Information about this topic is still scarce and wanted to get support from other users to improve it. What is definitely needed for approving the article? So I can research this part myself. Thanks in advance!

PauloCalvo (talk) 13:44, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

If you can come up with another solid (or better 2) references, that would work. Onel5969 (talk) 04:26, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

15:01:58, 14 March 2015 review of submission by Sansevieria4

• Sansevieria4 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Dorothy Lawson (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi Onel5969 - I really don't understand why this was rejected. Please let me know how to fix. I find this process particularly frustrating and threfore I don't contribute as much as I would like to. Why can't the Wikipedia directions be simplified? This shouldn't be that difficult!

Sansevieria4 (talk) 15:01, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 - I really don't understand why the Dorothy Lawson article was rejected. Please let me know how to fix. I find this process particularly frustrating and threfore I don't contribute as much as I would like to. Why can't the Wikipedia directions be simplified? This shouldn't be that difficult! Sansevieria4 (talk) 15:04, 14 March 2015 (UTC)Sansevieria4

Hi Sansevieria4 - You only have one source which goes to notability (the NYT article). All the others are either not independent (the bios), or are not from a reliable source (Allmusic), or are only brief mentions of the subject or don't mention her at all. Notability requires substantial coverage in independent, reliable sources. Hope this helps.Onel5969 (talk) 04:31, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 - I respectfully disagree with you. AllMusic is in fact encouraged as a reliable source by Wikipedia itself. (see below)

"Resources[edit]

Good online sources for recordings are the Freedb search engine or the Allmusic search engine. To find ownership information on song texts copyrighted in the US, the ASCAP ACE Title Search and BMI Repertoire Search utilities are invaluable. When looking in depth, a Google book search may turn something up. For material that has captured the attention of academics, a search on Google scholar may work."

This was copied directly from the directions Wikipedia:Notability (music). Lawson appears on several albums, both major record labels and important indie, including one that won a GRAMMY. She is a prominent member of more two independently notable ensembles. Lawson is mentioned by name multiple times in the two reviews of the Marcelo Zarvos albums. I am not sure you have thoroughly looked at my references. You seem to have dismissed them, furthermore, music does not seem to be your area. The Wikipedia instructions for notable musicians say that I only need to meet at least1 of the criteria and I have met at least 4 of them. When I look at the Wikipedia articles that have been allowed to be posted about other members of her group ETHEL, which I have used as a reference to help get Lawson's started (see Jennifer Choi and Todd Reynolds) I see little to no references and I feel that I am being singled out for some higher standard. Please take another look at this article.Sansevieria4 (talk) 16:36, 15 March 2015 (UTC)Sansevieria4

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anaheim,_California

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anaheim,_California The edits I made for this page were correct with the information that was previously cited. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.60.214.173 (talk) 17:29, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

No, they are not. The citations clearly indicate what was there previously. Please refrain from your disruptive editing. Onel5969 (talk) 18:09, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Decline of Draft:Joseph_Sledge

Ok I've been trough this and there is no copyrighted information, or material copied from elsewhere anywhere in this article. The article's format is based on the National Registry of Exonerations: Joseph Sledge page (which i assume you were talking about), which tells the story from start to finish, but THAT article is based on the North Carolina Innocence Inquiry Commission Brief for State v. Joseph Sledge Columbus County source, which also tells the story from start to finish in chronological order. I've taken information from BOTH of these sources and included it in the article, as well as information from news sources (unfortunately these news sources generally are about his exoneration and the length of time he spent in jail, and the NC centre for innocence report is the definitive source on the actual case-on which the national registry of exonerations source is based). This can't be helped as it is simply the only information available.

Are you saying that I shouldn't write the story in chronological order? The whole story has been rewritten by myself... and various parts of the story are doubly referenced to other sources where I could find them.

I'm confused as to how heavy reliance on one particular source (in this case two) violates copyright in any case, as everything has been rewritten, and if anything the only thing is the 'format' for the article following that of the NRoE source, which is chronological and the obvious choice for format of the article in any case.

please explain how the article violates copyright and if so how i can correct it, as I'm not seeing it after reading through WP:CP  InsertCleverPhraseHere ^{InsertTalkHere}  02:29, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Insertcleverphrasehere - Several sentences are verbatim, and many more are a close paraphrase. I think that it's difficult to avoid this issue when you rely so heavily on one of your references. It's really to your benefit to get this fixed before moving it to the mainspace. If it had been moved in its present form, it most likely would have been deleted and blanked in the AfD process, which then would give it yet another hurdle to overcome if you attempted to re-publish. If it helps, here's a link to the copyvio report: here, which might help you get an idea of what editors see which causes them to tag this for copyvio. Onel5969 (talk) 02:43, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Well its not so much that it relies on one reference, the Innocence Commissions report is not actually viewable using the copyvio tool you provided, in any case I've done a lot of work on the article. Copyvio won't ever give a result less than about 40% on an article like this as it picks out things like 'the jury convicted' and 'second-degree murder' and 'North Carolina Supreme Court'.  InsertCleverPhraseHere ^{InsertTalkHere}  06:24, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

I did a bunch of work on it to remove paraphrasing before resubmitting it. hopefully this time it will be ok.  InsertCleverPhraseHere ^{InsertTalkHere}  23:58, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Infobox title

The US City guidelines do not require the state name to be in the infobox title. Guidelines are just that: guidelines, not absolute requirements. That many pages use that is not a reason to mass-edit dozens of articles. Kent, Ohio is a featured article and made it through FAR without that being an issue since it's not a requirement; it's simply a case where most infoboxes use the title of the article. There are multiple examples of articles that have titles that simply do not work in the infobox title since they're only for disambiguation purposes. The name of the city of Akron is "Akron", not "Akron, Ohio". "Akron, Ohio" is the name of the article. --JonRidinger (talk) 03:32, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

I understand that. And we disagree. So that is why you should take it up on the talk page. Onel5969 (talk) 03:34, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

If you're going to claim you have consensus to for your mass changes, you need to actually have consensus that was specifically discussed, not simply your interpretation of how strictly the guidelines have to be followed. And of course there's: "This advice is not a formal Wikipedia policy or guideline and is not part of the Manual of Style" and "While it is just a guideline and there are no requirements to follow it in editing, it contains some of the basic elements of a city article, as well as useful tips that would help to bring the article to good article or featured article status" on the top of the WP:USCITIES page. Save yourself some time and don't do mass changes that are either unneeded and/or do nothing to really improve the quality of the article. --JonRidinger (talk) 03:51, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

You make my point - Every FA article of US City, in the top 200 populated cities uses this format. So perhaps this is a useful tip for formatting it this way. Onel5969 (talk) 04:18, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Arlington, Texas Demographics

Can you please stop adding the Vietnamese American subtitle in the demographic section. 1) Vietnamese people making approximately 10% of the foreign born population isn't noteworthy. They are not an overwhelming representative of the non-white population, therefore if you're going to single out Vietnamese Americans you need to single out every single ethnicity in Arlington. 2) It's outdated. Demographics of Arlington have changed drastically since 2000. 3) It's unnecessary, it doesn't add to the content and is strange looking. Vietnamese Americans are counted in the updated demographic statistics above it. Broadmoor (talk) 04:24, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

First, you should start using edit summaries, might limit confusion on some of your edits. Second, if they made 10% of the population, that would be noteworthy, since they are not a major ethnic group in this country, and if they had that large a presence, it would be of note. Onel5969 (talk) 04:37, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Allu Arjun filmography

Can you please copy edit this article's lead? Let me know if you are interested. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 07:24, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Sure, I'll get to it today or tomorrow, Pavanjandhyala. Onel5969 (talk) 12:20, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the c/e bro. Well, please do confirm whether you would conduct a GAR on Govindudu Andarivadele? Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:50, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

08:33:47, 15 March 2015 review of submission by Kanoog

• Kanoog (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:HJMS (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Please help me identify the sections that violate the terms and how to fix

Note that most of the material in the page created or reviewed by Faisal Taqi -Director of HJMS in Bahrain, the owner of the website http://hoijeonmoosool.free.fr and author of the books lsted as references- willingly for the sake of creating the page.

Kanoog (talk) 08:33, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Kanoog - it's already been deleted, which means that the vast majority of the article was copied from underlying sources. Onel5969 (talk) 12:21, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Request for another look

Hi Onel5969,

I have edited the page again and resubmitted (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Evidence-based_conservation). Could you please take a look? Many thanks for your valuable suggestions.

Avicennia marina (talk) 15:32, 15 March 2015 (UTC)Avicennia marina

Avicennia marina - Nice job! I'll approve it to the mainspace. Couple of suggestions. I would move the history section to be the first subsection. I would combine the three forms into a single section, with them being subsections, but that would require at least a brief few sentences opening that section. Anyway - congrats! Onel5969 (talk) 21:31, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Resubmission of article

Hi,

The rejected article (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Govindbhai_Shekhda) has been submitted again with some more references. You may look at the same, Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Xscontrib (talk • contribs) 16:12, 15 March 2015 (UTC) -- xscontrib — Preceding unsigned comment added by Xscontrib (talk • contribs) 16:10, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Xscontrib - the single additional reference still doesn't establish the notability of this subject, as per wiki criteria. Wikipedia requires substantial coverage from independent sources. Onel5969 (talk) 02:15, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Dorothy Lawson

Hi Onel5969. Please take another look at the Dorothy Lawson article. I have re-submitted it now twice. I cannot imagine that it doesn't have enough references now. Thanks! Sansevieria4 (talk) 18:43, 15 March 2015 (UTC)Sansevieria4

22:26:37, 15 March 2015 review of submission by Tatianajug

• Tatianajug (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Romolo Del Deo (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Dear Reviewer, Please help with a reference. I would appreciate your feedback. In your rejection you cited Alexander Noelle's article "The Gravity of Provincetown" as an obscure reference. Noelle, Alexander. "The Gravity of Provincetown". www.tfaoi.com. Traditional Fine Arts Organization. Retrieved 7 June 2014.

I understand that impression, but the link I cited is the scholarly repository of the article which I thought would be helpful for anyone checking the primary source material online. However that article is the primary essay in the book, The Tides of Provincetown, published by the New Britain Museum of American Art in support of a major exhibit that traveled to four US galleries. The ISBN reference and publication information is below. ISBN 0972449736 ISBN-13 9780972449731 Pages 176 Publisher New Britain Museum of American Art Published 2011

The roughly 80 artists chosen for this exhibit and the fewer cited in the book's essay are considered some of the most important artists from this art colony which is the oldest in the US. Hence by definition noteworthy in terms of American art history. I will bring some reviews from other magazine and newspapers into the initial work-up of Romolo Del Deo's biography, but I would like to include this source article because it is considered authoritative. So I would appreciate your advice and feedback. I will try and work with the text to make it more neutral in tone. Thank you for your assistance. Sincerely, Tatianajug Tatianajug (talk) 22:26, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Tatianajug - There's nothing wrong with that citation being included. But in terms of notability, it's obscure. If you're not counting on that for notability, it's actually a nice source. Onel5969 (talk) 02:23, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

02:30:22, 16 March 2015 review of submission by 120.148.0.216

• 120.148.0.216 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Neil McInnes (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi Onel5969 Thanks for reviewing. I've revised the page and taken out any personal references but as this is my first time adding to wikipedia, I'm finding it difficult to understand how to do the formatting or sidebar tables so haven't attempted them. Some of the best references that would be available for this article are unavailable to me on Google searches or publicly accessible newspaper archives. If you have academic access it might be easier. I know articles exist as I have the hard copies from those times. And lastly it if Tom Wallace can get an entry on Wikipedia, I think Neil McInnes definitely deserves one. Even if it is not written by me.

120.148.0.216 (talk) 02:30, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. Just because an article exists on Wikipedia does not mean it is necessarily a good model to base a new article on. Since McInnes did not hold a statewide office, he would have to qualify under the substantial coverage criteria. Those need to be from independent sources. Sources do not have to be available online, just from reliable sources. If you do use off-line sources, be very specific (see WP:CIT about how to format references, and about what information you need in references (i.e. for a news story, you need the name of the paper, the date of the article, the title of the article, the author of the article, and the page number on which the article appeared). You're right about Watson, I don't think he's notable either, and have nominated his article for deletion. Onel5969 (talk) 15:19, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi again. You're editing from an ip address, so I can't "ping" you to let you know I'm responding. Anyway, after discussion with a couple of other editors, I think McInnes does meet the notability requirements, so resubmit and let me know. Onel5969 (talk) 01:26, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 03:14:57, 16 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Ahlitanah

• Ahlitanah (talk · contribs)
  • User:Ahlitanah (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

The existing article on Eureka Quartzite is two short sentences. How can I replace those two sentences with my extensive article?Ahlitanah (talk) 03:14, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Ahlitanah (talk) 03:14, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ahlitanah I would open your article, and highlight the entire article (not including the AfC comments), but including all the references, etc. Hit <ctrl> C. The open the existing article, delete what's there, and paste your copy in its place by hitting <ctrl> V. Hit preview to make sure it worked before saving. Let me know how it turns out. Onel5969 (talk) 03:18, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 10:55:13, 16 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Silverspoon83

• Silverspoon83 (talk · contribs)
  • User:Silverspoon83 (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi there, thanks for taking the time to review my draft. I'm following up as really keen on getting this published and wanted to find out what I can do to make this happen. I did ask someone in the live messaging service what they thought and they said there were too many references to Racing Post and that I should use another source alongside RP. Could you let me know if this is along the right lines?

Is there anything else you can suggest?

With thanks

Silverspoon83

Silverspoon83 (talk) 10:55, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Silverspoon83 - The use of that source is all right to verify underlying facts, but it doesn't help the notability of the subject. You need to find articles from independent reliable sources (no press releases, interviews), which speak about the OLBG. We'd need 2-3 decent sources. If the Guardian article had been about OLBG, instead of just briefly mentioning them, that would have been a good source. The Owner and Breeder is a nice source, but it's a niche publication. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:31, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Eric._T._Costello

Regarding: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Eric._T._Costello. This draft was rejected on March 15, 2015 because it didn't prove notability: "See WP:NPOL - significant coverage needs to be from more than local coverage. Onel5969 (talk) 23:07, 15 March 2015 (UTC)" Eric Costello is a member of the City Council of Baltimore, Maryland. His work, and therefore his footnotes and citations, are from sources within the State of Maryland. Please note that all citations/references in Wikipedia articles that were published for Baltimore City Council Members are from within the State of Maryland. Following are 2 examples:

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bernard_C._Young
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/James_B._Kraft

In light of this information, I am requesting a rereview of Draft:Eric._T._Costello Thank you. DoreenRosenthal (talk) 12:40, 16 March 2015 (UTC)Doreen Rosenthal

Hi DoreenRosenthal - you're right, I don't think either of those two articles meets the notability requirements, and have nominated both of them for deletion. Onel5969 (talk) 15:34, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I'm looking at Wikipedia articles for members of other city councils around the country to see how they list their references. There are many with references only within their states. Here are 2 examples. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eric_Mar (also, AsianWeek.com, cited 3 times, doesn't exist.) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joe_Buscaino DoreenRosenthal (talk) 15:18, 19 March 2015 (UTC)DoreenRosenthal

16:43:21, 16 March 2015 review of submission by Shyamw1

• Shyamw1 (talk · contribs)
  • User:Shyamw1/sandbox (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Shyamw1 (talk) 16:43, 16 March 2015 (UTC) Hi,

Can you please tell me what's wrong with the footnotes. I can't seem to figure out my mistake although I read "Referencing for Beginners". Thank you. Shyamw1 (talk) 16:43, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Here is the link to the article I submitted (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shyamw1/sandbox. Your note says it was rejected because the footnoting was incorrect. Can you please point out my mistake so I don't repeat it. I don't see what's wrong with my footnote although I did read "Referencing for Beginners". Thank you. Shyamw1 (talk) 16:47, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Shyamw1 - There are two issues. First, I formatted the first citation for you (after the cite web | - the order of the entries doesn't matter, I usually put the url first). So you can fix the remainder. Second, the citations should not be strung out like that, they should be inserted into the body of the article. For example, any citations which back up his education claims should come at the end of that sentence in Early life and education. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:22, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

16:53:03, 16 March 2015 review of submission by 24.13.237.93

• 24.13.237.93 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Kol Hadash Humanistic Congregation (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I don't understand why the submission for Kol Hadash Humanistic Congregation was declined. The congregation is "notable" both as the "oldest and largest Humanistic Jewish congregation in Illinois" and for its rabbi emeritus being "the first Humanistic rabbi in Illinois." There are citations to articles ABOUT the congregation (not just a passing reference) in two different editions of the Chicago Tribune (Jan 13, 2008 and Sept 15, 2014), the Daily Herald (Dec 23, 2009), and WBEZ radio (July 16 2014).

Wikipedia has published articles about other Jewish congregations that have almost no citations or special distinction. See the links below:

1. Congregation Solel in Highland Park, Illinois - This article has almost no references, and none of the three references cited are independent, third-party references like a newspaper. The article was printed asking for additional submissions. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Congregation_Solel

2. North Shore Congregation Israel in Glencoe, Illinois – This article has only two references, one of which is just a “dictionary and sourcebook,” and the other is a reference to the synagogue’s building. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/North_Shore_Congregation_Israel

3. Temple Beth El in Madison, Wisconsin – This article has NO citations at all. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Temple_Beth_El_(Madison,_Wisconsin)

4. Temple Beth El in San Antonio, Texas – This article has only one citation, and not for anything that makes them “notable” http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Temple_Beth-El_(San_Antonio)

5. Temple Beth El in Great Neck, New York – No citation for anything other than its location. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Temple_Beth-El_(Great_Neck,_New_York)

6. Beth Shalom in Frederick, Maryland – Nothing notable about it. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Beth_Sholom_Congregation_(Frederick,_Maryland)

I would appreciate any explanation or specific instruction that would enable me to edit the article and have it approved for publication.

Thank you!

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24.13.237.93 (talk) 16:53, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

17:10:14, 16 March 2015 review of submission by Patburns93

• Patburns93 (talk · contribs)
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I have written this article on behalf of the copyright holder for the website Gerard M Burns and the information within it. Can you please let me know what I need to show/prove in order for the article to be accepted and published? I have written the entire article in my own words and it only copies very small pieces of information from the 'about' section on the Gerard Burns website. Patburns93 (talk) 17:10, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Patburns93 - The only copyvio issue is the lead section, which is still virtually cut and paste from the underlying source. Regarding sourcing, there are two issues. First, notability. Currently you have 3 sources. The first is a simple blurb, while the second is self-promotional, so neither of those two go to notability. The 2nd, is a good, solid citation from an independent, reliable source. If you come up with a couple of more of those, you should be okay. The second issue is verifying the underlying facts of the article. Being a BLP (biography of a living person), almost every assertion should be backed up by a citation. Where did you get the information? Cite your sources. You also need to format your citations, you can find out how at WP:CIT. The two citations which are not good for notability, are okay for fact verification. Hope this makes sense and helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:15, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

17:11:36, 16 March 2015 review of submission by 96.231.1.137

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The article has been resubmitted after using more "neutral" wording and adding in more references 96.231.1.137 (talk) 17:11, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

17:54:24, 16 March 2015 review of submission by David.Toledo.p

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You suggest that I merge this article into the definition for Conservation Grazing but they are two different things. The definition of targeted grazing in the conservation grazing page is not correct. Just because the person who started the conservation grazing page "got here first" does not mean his definition is correct and we should have to abide by it. There is actually more literature and scientist working on targeted grazing than there are working on conservation grazing. Additionally, the person who started the conservation grazing page has a conservation grazing business. I represent an interdisciplinary, multi-institutional workgroup with no financial interests that is working on targeted grazing. Can you please let me know what I need to do to clean/clear this up. Will just adding more content gain us a separate entry? We were trying to go for short, accurate and concise. DTP 17:54, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi David.Toledo.p - Not suggesting that they have priority because they got their first. However, their tie-in is cited, and the citation seems to indicate that the tie-in is appropriate. While targeted grazing is clearly a more specific term than conservation grazing, they both use animals to help control plant populations. Is there a more appropriate umbrella term for all types of this grazing? I think, based on my limited knowledge of the two types of grazing, it is clearly more appropriate to have the "parent" article titled with the more generic type, "Conservation" grazing. After looking into it more, I still believe you should re-write the current article, keeping the cited material, and clearly show the delineation between the generic term, and the more specific Targeted grazing. Frankly, I find the subject fascinating. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:36, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 18:10:15, 16 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by David.Toledo.p

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I just wrote you a message regarding targeted grazing a saved it without knowing it would automatically send it. Sorry, I am new at this. I wanted to end by saying that if you look at the conservation grazing page they say that Targeted grazing is just conservation grazing done on rangelands. Please look at the definition of rangeland. Any area that is grazed (even for conservation) is a rangeland and hence my co-authors and I believe that conservation grazing is a sub-discipline within targeted grazing.

Thank you for your thorough review

DTP 18:10, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 18:29:53, 16 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Artistsfind

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Hello, Thank you for reviewing this article. Please help me to understand your reasoning. This is of up-most importance to me. I value your time. I have put many long hours learning Wikipedia culture, styles, and markup for the purpose of having this artist's article. Please in all candor help me to understand the flaws of this article.

Please allow me to explain this- This artist is influential and very highly regarded. The artist has over one hundred solid offline biographical data and cites stored in library reference books. This doesn't help get references to easily look-up online. Example - The academy awards does not list the art directors or set design winners on line - they favor actors.

Questions- Do you want photocopies? I do have tangible proof of his awards and mentions. If this article is edited again, do you want this article shortened? What should be cut? What should I cut - teachers; education details; intros of others; other details or lists? There is a matter of the image, it is proper to use it and if documentations from the artist (subject) or me is requested I can do so. Help me with getting the image through the proper channels to be approved. Thank you very much for helping me getting this article approved. All advice that you have for me is welcome. Again, in all candor please help me to understand the flaws of this article. Caryl Jean 18:29, 16 March 2015 (UTC) Caryl Jean 18:29, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 18:30:47, 16 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Artistsfind

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Hello, Thank you for reviewing this article. Please help me to understand your reasoning. This is of up-most importance to me. I value your time. I have put many long hours learning Wikipedia culture, styles, and markup for the purpose of having this artist's article. Please in all candor help me to understand the flaws of this article.

Please allow me to explain this- This artist is influential and very highly regarded. The artist has over one hundred solid offline biographical data and cites stored in library reference books. This doesn't help get references to easily look-up online. Example - The academy awards does not list the art directors or set design winners on line - they favor actors.

Questions- Do you want photocopies? I do have tangible proof of his awards and mentions. If this article is edited again, do you want this article shortened? What should be cut? What should I cut - teachers; education details; intros of others; other details or lists? There is a matter of the image, it is proper to use it and if documentations from the artist (subject) or me is requested I can do so. Help me with getting the image through the proper channels to be approved. Thank you very much for helping me getting this article approved. All advice that you have for me is welcome. Again, in all candor please help me to understand the flaws of this article.Caryl Jean 18:30, 16 March 2015 (UTC) Caryl Jean 18:30, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Alexander_Liccione. Please help me to understand how to improve the article. Caryl Jean 18:32, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Alexander_Liccione. Please help me to understand how to improve the article,Caryl Jean 18:34, 16 March 2015 (UTC) Caryl Jean 18:34, 16 March 2015 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Artistsfind (talk • contribs)

Hi, I see you were answered on the AfC help page, so I'll let that answer stand. Onel5969 (talk) 13:39, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

20:15:54, 16 March 2015 review of submission by Thill101

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Hello - this is NOT a request for re-review. Not yet. At this point I'm just seeking guidance on how to make the entry look less like an advertisement. A "range of independent, reliable, and published sources..." does not really exist yet for this product. There are some press releases and a TechTarget article (all already in the References section). The core technology has been previously described in a separate Wikipedia article (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/OpenKBM ).

Would it help for me to remove marketing terms such as "service-aligned", "adaptive correlation", and "single-pane-of-glass"? Perhaps to list more potential negatives throughout? Or do the problems with the article go beyond those types of things?

I appreciate whatever guidance you can offer so that I can improve the article for acceptance.

Thanks

Thill101 (talk) 20:15, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Thill101 - if those types of sources don't yet exist for this subject, then it might be a case of this article being written too soon. They are pretty much a prerequisite to establish notability. Regarding your other question: absolutely, get rid of any marketing or "peacock" terms. You want to tell us about the product, without trying to sell us the product. Just state facts, and back them up with sources. Get rid of the features section, and all promotional information. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:49, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Donald Doe Part Three

Thank you for taking the time to help.

Fixed the edit and resubmit it. Draft:Donald_Gerrard_Doe Thanks again, -SageheartBK — Preceding unsigned comment added by SageheartBK (talk • contribs) 05:46, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

ZS Associates Article

Hi, Onel5969. Good morning! I am working with AGraves1 on this article. Please note we both have a WP:COI. Appreciate your quick review of this. Is there a specific portion you might point to that illustrates your concerns? The intent was only to use that article as a third-party source and provide detailed citations.

SusanChana (talk) 09:31, 17 March 2015 (UTC)SusanChana

Hi SusanChana - You've done a pretty good job of neutrality. I would combine the three small service/products/clients into one section called something like "The company". I would also delete the offices section. You could include a sentence about the scope of operations in the company section as well. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:20, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 - So grateful for your guidance on this! I have made all the changes you have suggested. SusanChana (talk) 20:47, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi SusanChana - looks good. Resubmit it and let me know. Onel5969 (talk) 03:09, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

- The article has been resubmitted. Thx again for all your guidance and the time you took to review. SusanChana (talk) 05:32, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 this article was resubmitted and declined again by another editor. Any suggestions for how to address this? Appreciate any guidance you can provide. SusanChana (talk) 01:38, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969 just checking back in. Not sure what I need to do. Can you advise? Appreciate your help! SusanChana (talk) 13:21, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jayantilal Gada

user name: Yatin Rewale article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jayantilal_Gada Hello - I've just seen that My article I submitted for review Draft:Jayantilal Gada has been rejected after review, with the feedback that This submission's references do not adequately show the subject's notability. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so.Please tell me what changes i have to do to get this article accepted.I added more references for notability now any reference in article are worng or not be reliable pls tell me .thank you (Yatin Rewale (talk) 04:52, 17 March 2015 (UTC)) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yatin Rewale (talk • contribs)

11:47:37, 17 March 2015 review of submission by Sohyle Jain

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The previous draft had material sourced from some websites. Those have been removed to ensure all material is original and nothing is copied from anywhere else. Please review and approve if deemed suitable. Thanks!

Sohyle Jain (talk) 11:47, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Please review the page https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Ayan_Pal

The draft was previously declined due to copyright issues. I have removed them, and thus requesting this article to be reviewed once again. Thanks a lot for your help! :) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sohyle Jain (talk • contribs) 11:51, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jayantilal Gada

user name: Yatin Rewale article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jayantilal_Gada Hello - Thanks for help. With the feedback that my references in article not correct. I removed refernces that not right or reliable as you mentioned .I added new reference for subject notability.Now any new references in article are reliable or not pls tell me .Please tell me what changes i have to do now to get this article accepted. thank you (Yatin Rewale (talk) 05:31, 17 March 2015 (UTC)) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yatin Rewale (talk • contribs)

DaisyDylanDoyle (talk) 13:10, 17 March 2015 (UTC)DaisyDylanDoyle Reference: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:John_Nassari

Hi One5969, and thank you for taking the time to review my article.

The article was declined on the following grounds: "This submission appears to be taken from http://www.olympus-imagespace.co.uk/photographers/john-nassari/. Wikipedia cannot accept material copied from elsewhere, unless it explicitly exists under a compatible licence and is written in an acceptable tone—this includes material that you own the copyright to. You should attribute the content of a draft to outside sources, using citations, but copying and pasting or closely paraphrasing sources is not acceptable. The entire draft should be written using your own words and structure."

I wish to state categorically that the article was not copied from this source, and that any similarity in paraphrasing was due to the fact that many of the biographical details contained in my article (and sourced from other online materials) are also details that appear in the Olympus link. Nonetheless, I can see how this assumption was made, and I have now rewritten the article.

Best & thanks

Daisy.

Draft:A.M. SNiPER

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you for your review on the article about A.M. SNiPER. I have made it sound in a more neutral way. Just wanted to note something. You left this note: "Comment: Also has a copyvio issue with THIS SITE. Onel5969 (talk) 03:31, 11 March 2015 (UTC)"

This is actually the BBC page about A.M. SNiPER and it pulls content from wikipedia. You can check it if you like.

I have applied for approval.

Thank you in advance George — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ayianapageorge (talk • contribs) 14:03, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Good catch

Good catch but NOT a good faith edit; the statue of David is notable for one particularly oversized component. Quis separabit? 16:47, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

i want to write a real people artical

When i write a article on wikipedia .it not valid and auto decay. WTF problem — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nepali2053 (talk • contribs) 01:05, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

01:35:40, 18 March 2015 review of submission by Rashawn770

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The article was rejected due to lack of notability. What do you think about the new article now? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Vanessa_Born I made sure to include some of their notable work, including an independent film award that they've won, and work they've done alongside academy award winning actors. Rashawn770 (talk) 01:35, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Rashawn770 - The article is better, however she still doesn't meet notability requirements. Most of the citations in the in article about the notability of the people she appeared with, and there is no inherited notability on Wikipedia. Please check out WP:NACTOR to see what constitutes notability among actors/actresses. Onel5969 (talk) 23:38, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Vanessa Born Article

Hi. Excuse me, but I'm new, and still confused about how the chat/private messaging features here work. I think I just submitted another request about a rejected article. I've since updated the article you've rejected to include more notable work: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Vanessa_Born

What do you think? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rashawn770 (talk • contribs) 01:37, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

About copyvio

Hi, I'm a bit confused with the way you deal with copyright violations. For example, you only simply declined Draft:Mai Kitazawa Arbegast even though the entire draft was a copyright violation. You should have G12'd the article as well. I've since nominated the page for deletion. In cases where violation is partial, you should delete those portions from the text. Thanks, Darylgolden^(talk) Ping when replying 04:45, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Darylgolden - I use Earwig's copyvio program to check on the articles. Then I look at what is the same/similar in an article. An article can get a 20% rating, and can still be declined for copyvio, since it may be a paragraph or two which is copy/paste. Conversely, sometimes I get a 70-80% rating, but when looking it over, it's because there are a lot of institutions named the same, or book titles, etc. Regarding when I choose between blanking the submission or simply declining, if the vast majority of the article is cut/paste, I blank it. If it's only a couple of paragraphs out of several (usually less than 40%), I decline for copyvio, but don't blank.

Regarding the specific example above, I don't recall it, so can't speak to it specifically. And I missed that section in copyvio about deleting the offending section, I will do that from now on. Thanks for pointing that out. Take it easy. Onel5969 (talk) 23:49, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

09:22:57, 18 March 2015 review of submission by Pawangangwar

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Pls let me know exactly what words or sentences are copyrighted, that I am using. This will help me in contributing better. As per my info, I have not copied from anywhere, but writing my own experience based on citations, I have mentioned

Pawangangwar (talk) 09:22, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Pawangangwar - There was a glitch in the review program yesterday, apparently. I did not decline your article for copyright violations. It was declined for lack of notability for a neologism. The message on your talk page is incorrect. The message on the draft article is the right reason. Take a look there. Onel5969 (talk) 23:54, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Question on notability

Hello Onel5969,

My login is Mbonvallet. Thanks for your work on the Wiki. The effort put into "The Book of Knowledge" has great impact.

This is in regard to the submission of [[2]]

I know there are many breweries on the planet. I feel that this story is notable not because it is a brewery but because the owners were instrumental in changing a very old ordinance in a major American city that prohibited alcohol sales within 300 feet of a place of worship. This legislative change was a major news story in the Minneapolis/St. Paul area and has set precedent for change to outdated alcohol laws throughout Minnesota and potentially the country.

Thanks for your consideration.

Mbonvallet (talk) 13:44, 18 March 2015 (UTC) Mike

Hi Mbonvallet - I hear you. However, I still don't see this as notable. If the passage of the local ordinance had national implications, or it was the first of its kind in the nation, that would be different. But another editor might see it differently. If you resubmit, I won't review it, so another editor can take a whack at it. Onel5969 (talk) 00:02, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Lee Harris Pomeroy page

Have you completed your edit of the Lee Harris Pomeroy page? If not, please let me know what I need to do next to have the page released. Thanks for your help so far. Regards, Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 14:28, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Mind Meld

Hi Onel,

Thank you for copy editing the Mind Meld article last November. I have started an FAC for the article here. If you would be willing to contribute to the discussion, I would be grateful for any constructive comments you might provide.

Neelix (talk) 15:26, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Neelix I find the FA process to be a bit of a farce, so I don't really participate in it. But thanks for thinking of me. Good luck with the FAC. Onel5969 (talk) 01:01, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Review for article on Sharon Middendorf (Catridge)

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing my article on Sharon Middendorf (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Sharon_Middendorf).

I was wondering if you would be able to tell me, on a scale of 1 to 10, how far from being accepted the article is (1 being very unlikely)? This is my first Wiki article, and I would be very appreciative of any advice you may have.

Thank you so much,

Catridge Catridge (talk) 16:08, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Catridge - That's a difficult question. It's a lot better than my first effort, in layout and section development. The prose is good. There are some problems with it. I'll deal with the minor ones first: external links. Very minor fix, I corrected the first one, so you can see how they should look. Second, was a format fix, which I went ahead and did. Third is the major issue, and that is a lack of references which show the notability. The references you have are okay for verifying the facts of the article, but not for notability. You need to come up with 2-3 solid references from independent, reliable sources (no interviews, no press releases, no bio pages). That could be an issue. I did a quick search, and couldn't find any articles which fit the bill, but you might with a bit more research. If you can come up with those, the article would be approved. One other issue, is that you need to have more inline citations, to verify your assertions. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:18, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

16:37:59, 18 March 2015 review of submission by Kantonus

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Thank you for the review and explanation as to how to improve the article. I have added some references as I understood that the article was rejected due to missing references. Any suggestions you might have that can help me bring the article to a level where it can be accepted is much appreciated

Kantonus (talk) 16:37, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Kantonus - Take a look at WP:CIT on how to format citations. I think it passes the notability threshold now. However, it seems to be a bit promotional in tone. It's fine to tell us about the subject, but stay away from "features" and items which are interest to customers/clients, rather than what would appear in an encyclopedia article. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:37, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

17:09:31, 18 March 2015 review of submission by Gdesigner1

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You've recently denied my submission of the wikipedia page Glenn Ogura. I feel that the referenced sources are verifiable third party sources and also show the subjects noteworthiness.

Editorial Reviews

The following third party reviews are well-known independent reviewers that are cited by most publishers. You often see Kirkus Reviews, Midwest Book Review and Examiner.com referenced on the front and back covers of best-selling paperbacks. These objective reviewers are on Wikipedia.

"In this debut novel, Zack Penny invokes the wrath of CEO Allen Henley after leaving DisplayTechnik to start his own high tech company...Ogura competently crafts a novel reminiscent of John Grisham's The Firm (1991). The entertaining novel is generally an easy read, serving up dirty details of Silicon Valley's arrogance and hardnosed capitalism. A solid business thriller ..." - Kirkus Reviews

https://www.kirkusreviews.com/book-reviews/glenn-ogura/startup-uAJmGPgL/

Kirkus Reviews was established in 1933 and greatly influences publishers, agents, libraries and film executives.

"...author Glenn Ogura demonstrates a rich woven and adroitly capable storytelling talent that is ideal for suspense laden thrillers that engage the readers total attention from beginning to end. Very highly recommended. "Startup" would prove an enduringly popular addition to personal reading lists and community library collections." -Midwest Book Review

http://www.midwestbookreview.com/rbw/mar_14.htm#mason

Midwest book review is an organization that publishes approx. 600 reviews every month.

"...this is one author who will shortly become a household name ...STARTUP is a smashing achievement ....Ogura's mastery of plot development is spectacular ... "wow" this guy can write!" -Examiner.com

http://www.exami ner.com/review/startup-reviewed-by-norm-goldman-of-bookpleasures-com

Examiner.com is Denver-based media company who operates a network of local news websites. Gdesigner1 (talk) 17:09, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Gdesigner1 (talk) 17:09, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Shyamw1

Thanks very much for responding to my question. You have been very helpful. Shyamw1 (talk) 18:03, 18 March 2015 (UTC)Winnie Shyam

No worries, Shyamw1 - happy editing. Onel5969 (talk) 01:39, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Message received from you...

I received a message from you stating that a page I submitted contained copyrighted material. I am happy to delete, but am not sure what it is. Please clarify and identify.

The page is for Stephen Hoffman. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Costarajah (talk • contribs) 18:03, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Stephen Hoffman page...

Saw a note from you that it contained copyright materials. Wondering what the issues are. I can't spot them.

Thanks, username: Costarajah — Preceding unsigned comment added by Costarajah (talk • contribs) 18:07, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Costarajah - Most of the lead is cut and paste, as are parts of his naval career; almost the entire paragraph on Celera is cut and paste. Onel5969 (talk) 01:49, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

22:34:35, 18 March 2015 review of submission by Norviel Vern

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Hello, Onel5969. I was curious to see, in more detail, why you rejected the Vern Norviel page earlier in March 2015, and what I can do to further strengthen the stub/page. I understand the page was rejected due to the fact that it needs more reliable sources, however I was wondering if you can lead me into the right direction with regards to what and where more sources are needed. Thank you in advance!

Sincerely, Erica Heinisch (USER: NorvielVern)-Representative of Wilson Sonsini Goodrich & Rosati PC- Link to Vern Norviel draft page

Norviel Vern (talk) 22:34, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Norviel Vern - the sources are all niche or non-independent sources, which don't rise to the level of substantial coverage which WP:GNG requires. He needs to have articles in mainstream publications which show his notability. Onel5969 (talk) 02:01, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Kacific Broadband Satellites

Hi Onel5969

Thanks very much for the feedback on the page I submitted about Kacific Broadband Satellites, that’s really helpful. I’ve been to the Teahouse and got some useful advice there also, so thank you for that recommendation.

The advice from the Teahouse was about providing more notable references: “Think of Notability and Verifiability as two separate (but related) concepts. The Reuters article and others like it will help to establish that the company is notable - even though the article doesn't contain much information. Once Notability is established you use any other reliable sources (even the company itself to a limited extent) to support the more detailed information. So you actually use both types of sources.”

In the Teahouse the point was also made that trade journals are not very independent, so I’ve sourced some other articles that are certainly independent, but don’t provide much detail about the company. Articles below:

Reuters

RadioNZ

There are several links from the ITU itself:

Speech: ITU Release: Reflections: Report of presentation:

SIDS Action platform (The IDS Action Platform has been developed to support the follow up to the Third International Conference on Small Island Developing States (SIDS Conference),

Would the best way forward be to substantially cut down the content of the article, provide the references to more notable sources, then resubmit the article?

Thanks and regards EvenstarNZ (talk) 01:28, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

EvenstarNZ - I fixed some format issues, and corrected the first citation format, so you can see how it's done. The stuff that was in "status" should be re-written in prose form, rather than bullet point. The article doesn't need to be cut down, but those citations are pretty essential. Once you get 2-3 really good ones, and correct those other minor issues, resubmit. Onel5969 (talk) 02:12, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Mass deletions of synagogues on WP

Hi there Onel5969: Please see my comments [3] : What's up doc? You should avoid nominating mass deletions, that look more like "massacres" without first trying to arrive at some WP:CONSENSUS and not laying the foundations for a misguided WP:BATTLEGROUND environment. You need to read up on WP:SPIDERMAN ASAP, and cool it! In future feel out the waters by consulting some WP:EXPERT editors at WP:TALKJUDAISM before going on a rampage of nominations like this that is not a formula for WP:CIVIL. If you have any questions about synagogues and anything else relating to Jews and Judaism please feel free to contact me on my talk page and I will be more than happy to help you out with some direction in that regard. Thanks, IZAK (talk) 03:45, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Ignoring uncivil editor. Onel5969 (talk) 04:01, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Dear Onel5969: There is absolutely nothing "uncivil" in trying to communicate with you and stretching out my hand in friendship and offering to help you and give of my time so that you can avoid the mistakes you have just blundered into by mass nominations of synagogue articles for deletion (please avoid WP:LAWYERING as an excuse to fess up to the situation). But there is something very wrong when an editor nominates, and refuses to take sincere feedback, about a whole slew of articles about a very sensitive subject -- namely: Jews, Judaism and Synagogues where Jews worship their God and express their Judaism through Jewish prayer and Jewish rituals -- that all go together and can make for misunderstanding and as should be obvious from history when dealing with such serious subjects. I again extend my offer to help you in any way I can to improve, and not destroy, articles relating to synagogues, Jews and Judaism. Sincerely, IZAK (talk) 04:15, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Attempting to ignore (as per the guidance at WP:UNCIVIL), but you seemingly have an issue understanding the concept of civility on Wikipedia, therefore, for your edification, here is the lead sentence from that policy: "Incivility consists of personal attacks, rudeness and disrespectful comments. Especially when done in an aggressive manner". You were rude and disrespectful, and in a very aggressive manner. Pretty much the perfect definition of incivility. My actions led to at least four of the articles being improved, so your statement that I was attempting to "destroy" the articles is erroneous at best. As I stated on the AfD talk page, the articles, when I reviewed them, did not meet GNG standards. I don't look at the subject matter of the underlying article: if it doesn't meet GNG, it doesn't meet GNG. Plain and simple. The fact that you are still attacking me, just goes to show that you truly do not understand the concept of civility. Please do not attempt to contact me again. Any further contact from you will be seen as harrasment, and you will be reported. Onel5969 (talk) 04:24, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 04:54:05, 19 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Surbhi mittal

• Surbhi mittal (talk · contribs)
  • User:Surbhi mittal (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

hi.. My article had been deleted before for the same reason because it violated copyright information on http://www.donehealth.com/new-best-call-center-pros.html.. But if you look at this link it is fake and the information there is my original content which I wrote for wikipedia initially. I already had a talk about this with the wikipedia person and had got it sorted. Now can I please get my article approved. Its been long I have been waiting.

I am the employee of this company and have all the copyright information. I hope you consider my case as soon as possible.

Surbhi mittal (talk) 04:54, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

I am awaiting your reply sir. Kindly reply as soon as possible. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Surbhi mittal (talk • contribs) 10:59, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Surbhi mittal - The site you mention above is not the cite which the copyrighted material comes from. It comes from Newswire.com, and is a press release of the company. Since you are a close associate of the company, there might be a conflict of interest issue. But that does not mean that you can't write the article, simply that you have to be very careful to maintain a neutral point of view. If you want to use the copyrighted material, the process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:56, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi.. Thank you for your reply. I guess if you are judging by the introduction lines then there is no solution. The introduction, headquarter, year the company was founded- will be the same and obviously can't be changed in another article for the same company. Only one or two lines i guess looks similar.. rest of the article has different information. Can you just have a look at it again and answer please.. Its a request.

Surbhi mittal (talk) 04:54, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Surbhi mittal - Copyvio is not about common terms or names be used in two different sources. You've done a good job getting away from the copyvio issue, however, the first sentence in the Services section is almost entirely cut and paste from the source, and needs to corrected. There is another issue with the article, and since there is a potential COI issue, it definitely needs correcting. Your article sounds like an advertisement. Lines like, "Call Center Pros advertises efficiency, customer service, improved technology, streamlined processes, and low costs", "This model helped Call Center Pros evolve into a full Business Process Outsourcing service provider", and probably the entire Services section, need to be deleted. Articles should state facts, not opinions or sales points. Onel5969 (talk) 13:22, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Requesting Help

Hello,

Your comment on my article states that it reads like an advertisement...can you highlight which sections need to be edited to establish a neutral point of view in the article...

Also the citations that have been documented are the only available references of newspaper articles uploaded on the website as these are old copies, they do not have archives on the independent news portals which had published them...

Please advice..

Deepa Topiwala (talk) 07:56, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Deepa Topiwala - Promotional material (stuff that is meant to entice customers/consumers) needs to be removed, (e.g. "Mehendi tattoos are temporary and give a traditional touch to your look", "Mehendi Jewellery is an inexpensive alternative..."), as well as extensive client lists. Mentioning 2 or 3 really prominent clients is okay.

Regarding the notability criteria. There's really no way around that, if you can't find several solid references from independent sources, she might not meet Wikipedia's criteria. Onel5969 (talk) 18:15, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

DigVentures

Hi, thanks for your comments regarding the DigVentures page (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:DigVentures), as you can probably tell I'm learning as I go. I have formatted the Citations section according to the guidelines and combed out peacock terms from the text so that it now (I believe) reads more formally. Perhaps if you have time you could quickly check whether it is suitable to be re-submitted? Thanks in advance! Hgfiske (talk) 08:25, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Hgfiske Nice job. Very interesting subject. Moved it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 18:25, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

11:57:36, 19 March 2015 review of submission by Andaraja

• Andaraja (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Faculty of Engineering, University of Indonesia (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Dear Sir,

First, I want to gratitude you for reviewing my draft on Faculty of Engineering University of Indonesia. I try to fix my draft based on your inputs but since this is my first contribution to wikipedia, I am a bit confused with the mean of nobility as your input. I have checked the nobility standard and try my best to edit the draft therefore can meet the nobility standard (by focusing only on important and relevant information to the article).

Please kindly review my re-submit article. Hopefully it can meet the requirement to wikipedia standard. Thank you

Andaraja (talk) 11:57, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 12:54:00, 19 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Volontaerin

• Volontaerin (talk · contribs)
  • User:Volontaerin (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi there, did I understand it correctly that I need to add more reliable sources to my Legal Resources Foundation article? Thanks for the links, I will go through the newspaper article and see what would be useful.

Volontaerin (talk) 12:54, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Volontaerin - Right now, there aren't any references. At least none that I can see. In addition, your article is written in an informal tone, rather than that of an encyclopedia article. Avoid conversational terms and phrases, as well as drawing conclusions and offering points of view. Just state the facts. I'm sure this is a notable organization, article just needs some work. Onel5969 (talk) 18:36, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Shyamw1

Thanks for reviewing my article and offering suggestions about footnotes. If the contents of more than one or two lines in a paragraph are taken from the same source, how do I cite it? Thank you.

Shyamw1 (talk) 16:15, 19 March 2015 (UTC)wshyam

Hi Shyamw1 - I'm not exactly sure what you're asking. Are you looking to use the same reference in more than one place in your article? Or are you asking if a citation can be used for an entire paragraph? Onel5969 (talk) 19:01, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for the follow-up.

Hi One15969. I appreciate the guidance and tip to the Wikipedia source to improve my article, Brightview Senior Living. I will certainly take a look and revise the draft. Thanks you again. Best, ```` — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shs123 (talk • contribs) 16:54, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Not my article

Hi, you posted a note on my talk page about an AFC article being declined. I don't submit articles via AFC, and I never have. Sometimes I evaluate AFC articles or clean them up. Regarding the declined article Draft:Deepak Kanyalal Nandwani, please inform the author, not me. Thanks. ~Amatulić (talk) 17:01, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Amatulic - Don't know how that happened, it's an automatic thing which is sent when an AfC article is accepted/declined. Thanks for the heads up, I've let the author know. Onel5969 (talk) 19:17, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

18:52:35, 19 March 2015 review of submission by Tapfs

• Tapfs (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:The Pearl Harts (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi. I have tried to add more references to the band and for Sara Leigh. There are printed reviews in a few magazines which i have linked to but I cant find direct links to the magazine articles as they are only available in print. I hope this will help you. Thanks in anticipation. Kevin

Kzoo 18:52, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Tapfs - References don't have to be web accessible (that just makes it easier to ascertain notability). If you use a non-accessible citation, please be as complete as you can be in the info in the citation (see WP:CIT to see what info should be there). I see you've re-submitted it, and if I reviewed it again, I'd decline it, again based on the same criteria. The best citations you have are not about the subject (e.g. The Blue Pills). If you can add some more citations, and correct the format of the citations, let me know and I'll take another look. Onel5969 (talk) 03:30, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

10:22:20, 20 March 2015 review of submission by AnnieVickerstaff

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I'd like advice please.

AnnieV 10:22, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I've looked at reasons why my page is not notifiable and that makes sense. The reasons for doing the page are that we are reissuing our original LP and it is a 40 year old recording done on equipment which is of interest to some people; also we have had requests from people asking for more information about the band, school, recording process and equipment. We thought a Wikipedia page would be the best way of giving people the information, but I can see now that it may not be appropriate. I'm wondering if Wikisource might be one way of putting the information out there? I apologise if this query is too long/a bit vague/ unsuitable - I find Wikipedia a bit complicated to get my head around.

Okay, I'm unsure if the above is from two different editors, or only from AnnieVickerstaff. Just need some clarification before I respond. Onel5969 (talk) 03:36, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

18:22:32, 20 March 2015 review of submission by Kallaben

• Kallaben (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Dance Marathon at the University of Florida (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Dear Onel5969,

I have done much research on other Dance Marathon pages from different universities that have already been published, and this article has the same or more references to secondary news sources and articles. I have been struggling to publish this entry for a few months now, but I do not know what other sources to use. I placed the links to other articles that I am trying to model this one after at the bottom of my page for reference. Please let me know what other sources I should consider because I have searched the Internet deeply and used every possible source I could find. Thank you!

Kallaben (talk) 18:22, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Kallaben - You ask two different questions above. First, regarding other articles, Wikipedia is monitored by volunteers, so it's not unusual for an inappropriate article to slip through the cracks. Those other examples you gave might have been created when standards for inclusion may have been different. Just because an article exists on Wikipedia does not mean it is necessarily a good model to base a new article on. It is often better to compare with existing recognised Wikipedia Good Articles.

Regarding referencing for your article, all the sources are either not independent, are local sources. While it may be a very notable local event, that doesn't meet Wikipedia criteria for inclusion. If you can find one or two sources which are not local, that would help. Onel5969 (talk) 03:44, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

ArtVigilante2

Hi Onel5969,

You declined my submission earlier today. Can you tell me why the pages below are sufficient, but my article is not? I am very new at this, but I feel it is important to add more contemporary realist artists to wikipedia.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellen_Eagle https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daniel_Maidman https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_T._Scott https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/David_Kassan

I appreciate your help!

Thanks, Art — Preceding unsigned comment added by ArtVigilante2 (talk • contribs) 19:32, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

19:35:47, 20 March 2015 review of submission by Riffed77

• Riffed77 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:L Shape Lot (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

The article failed the rules of notability. 7. Has become one of the most prominent representatives of a notable style or the most prominent of the local scene of a city; note that the subject must still meet all ordinary Wikipedia standards, including verifiability. 9. Has won or placed in a major music competition.

I've included an article from Encore magazine(www.encorepub.com) stating that L Shape Lot has won the Best Band award. They've actually won this 5 times. I can only find verified sources for 3 of those years. In 2011, http://www.encorepub.com/welcome/best-of-wilmington-2011-2/ In 2012, http://www.encorepub.com/welcome/best-of-wilmington-arts-entertainment/ In 2015, http://www.encorepub.com/welcome/best-of-2015-winners-list/

They've also won the prestigious FloydFest 10 Under the Radar series (2011) and performed on the main stage in 2012. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/FloydFest and http://www.encorepub.com/welcome/best-of-wilmington-arts-entertainment/ Riffed77 (talk) 19:35, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Riffed77 - The Encore Best Band award isn't really a major music competition. Neither is FloydFest. While those are nice achievements, they don't qualify as major competitions. Onel5969 (talk) 03:49, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Realist Artists

Hi Onel5969,

You declined my submission earlier today. Can you tell me why the pages below are sufficient, but my article is not? I am very new at this, but I feel it is important to add more contemporary realist artists to wikipedia.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellen_Eagle https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daniel_Maidman https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_T._Scott https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/David_Kassan https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rachel_Constantine — Preceding unsigned comment added by ArtVigilante2 (talk • contribs) 21:47, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

My submission: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ArtVigilante/sandbox

I appreciate your help!

Thanks, Art

update: I read your comments over again, and I will work on improving the citations and finding reliable sources. thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 73.196.99.28 (talk) 00:45, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

ArtVigilante2 (talk) 19:37, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi ArtVigilante2 - I know you're working on the article, but I just wanted to address your earlier concern comparing your article to others. Wikipedia is monitored by volunteers, so it's not unusual for an inappropriate article to slip through the cracks. Those examples you gave were created at some point in the past, when standards for inclusion may have been different. Just because an article exists on Wikipedia does not mean it is necessarily a good model to base a new article on. It is often better to compare with existing recognised Wikipedia Good Articles. I know this can be a frustrating process at times, but as time goes on, we're trying to elevate the level of the articles. Once you find reliable sources, let me know, and I'll take another look. Onel5969 (talk) 03:52, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969, thanks for your response! I was using these artists as examples, but now as I get more of a feel for wikipedia, I am reading the style manual, third-party sources page, etc. It should help me improve this article. Thanks again. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 73.196.99.28 (talk) 05:01, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 22:36:12, 20 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Wdahm

• Wdahm (talk · contribs)
  • User:Wdahm (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

In my recent submission of article describing the U.S. Air Force Scientific Advisory Board, can you give some guidance as to what text you believe violates copyrights? If it is only the graphics that are of concern, I received a bot notification that I had not identified the copyright status of these graphics, and I had planned to get to that tonight. Thanks in advance for any guidance you can give as to what needs to be changed to make this article conform.

Wdahm (talk) 22:36, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Wdahm - other than the copyvio issue, a very nice article. Here's a link to the copyright report I got. Some of the report is due simply to using the same terms, like "Secretary of the Air Force" etc., but at some points, there is direct copy and paste of the phrases/sentences in the source. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 03:57, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Aruppillai

Thanks for your example and advice. I have corrected all the references — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aruppillai (talk • contribs) 12:22, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Excellent, Aruppillai - And I see it's already been approved and moved to the mainspace. Good job. Congratulations! Onel5969 (talk) 15:01, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

15:08:56, 21 March 2015 review of submission by AKastelmacher

• AKastelmacher (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Maria Kong (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

hi, not looking for a re-review but perhaps a tip on how to improve the value,

how would i be able to define significant value if the value is for cultural development: i.e Maria Kong are a one of a kind theatre troupe in Israel, along the lines of the "bat-sheva" company, who have massive worldwide recognition for the unique work they do. for Israelis and visitors Maria Kong hold an important contemporary cultural value. contemporary artists do not profile in text books as these books are yet to be written. what source would i look for to prove significant value for wikipedia in order for the information to figure on the site?

I am working on translating and uploading many Submissions related to Israeli Culture, some of them, for instance the western wall, are thousand of years old and can be properly cited, others may not. how do I even go about looking for a reasonable cause for submission?

a museum would be an easy value to prove the importance of, a dance/music/theatre company may not be as simple as it seems? I presume many people who want to know more about these companies can't find any information on wikipedia, that is a shame as british companies like Punchdrunk who are in the same category of Maria Kong in the theatre world can be figured on wikipedia. I think there is great importance to providing good documentation for the arts on wikipedia and wonder how i can avoid a lot of re-edits in the future.

many thanks!

Andrey.

AKastelmacher (talk) 15:08, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi AKastelmacher - Great that you're doing the translating of articles. That's a very necessary component (and one in which I am sorely lacking). Articles need to be documented by reliable, third-party sources. In terms of cultural subjects, a very good source for references are newspapers and magazines, as well as ezines (as long as they are well-established). Any coverage in the Jerusalem Post? Haaretz? The Times of Israel? If this group has international acclaim, anything in the European papers? Great Britain? Asia? Also, you can find out how to properly format citations at WP:CIT. Hope this helps. Happy translating! Onel5969 (talk) 00:04, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

19:38:36, 21 March 2015 review of submission by Betty Ann Sharp

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  • Draft:Hildegard Woodward (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Betty Ann Sharp (talk) 19:38, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

After reviewing reason the page was rejected, I looked at the guidelines and would like to have this page reconsidered. If do feel Ms. Woordward's accomplishments both as an artist and as an illustrator are more than a minor figure. Ms. Woodward's works have been twice been recognized with a Caldecott Honor. This award is given yearly to the most distinguished American picture book for children. Many of her books are still in print, her artwork still collected.

In comparison the the information I have collected here, there are a great number of Wikipedia pages for less-well-known figures, with fewer external sources sited.

The information is not a stub, it is for an historical figure (one who is mentioned in Wikipedia I may add), and is well-referenced.

Thanks you again for your consideration.

Betty Ann

Problem with the article High school for environmental studies

This link is clearly valid and is verifiable. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 142.255.94.42 (talk) 03:20, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

Murder on the Blackboard

Unless there is some very compelling reason to, we generally don't list ADs in film infoboxes. Best, BMK (talk) 04:50, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

Please help add page on Thiru Narayana Iyengar

User: Ramanhome Article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Thiru_Narayana_Iyengar

Hi Onel5969

First, even though the underlying links might be in Tamil, the reference notes themselves need to be in English.

Reply>>> He is Tamil scholar in the pre-internet times. One of the references is in English, rest are in Tamil because articles about him were written in the Tamil vernacular since he is a Tamil scholar.

You misunderstand, Ramanhome, I'm speaking about the citation footnote in the article, not the underlying citation. The underlying citation may be in Tamil, but when you create the footnote, that needs to be in English.

To me, it looks like only 3 or 4 sources are referenced.

Reply>>> How many references do you need to accept the article? This cannot be a reason to reject the article.

You need at least 3 solid references to show notability. Then, since this is a biography, you need a fair amount of references to validate the underlying assertions in the article.

Most of the Tamil language in the article also needs to go away.

Reply>>> yes i have removed most of the tamil language in the article. Pls check and let me know.

Much better. I think the quotes in the original are okay, but you could (if you wanted to), simply leave the English translations.

All the raw links in the article have to go away.

Reply>>> what do you mean by the raw links? pls give an example of a raw link.

A raw link is simply inserting a link to an external source by using a weblink. An example would be in the Literary Work section, Madurai Tamil Sangam is a raw link. Simply put the name of the item, since the link does not have anything to do with the subject of the article, you shouldn't even use it as a reference. If the link showed the subject's relationship to the item, than you should use it as a reference. Your first two references are also raw links. You can find out how to format citations at WP:CIT.

And finally, the article has an WP:NPOV issue

Reply>>>Please be specific in places where you do not find no neutrality. Identify those places in the article.

Avoid using peacock or overly positive terms. "detailed work" should simply be work. "well discussed" should simply be discussed. "fully dedicated" should simply be dedicated. Get rid of words like that (other examples: "elaborate", "novel" (as in novel way), "important".

Ramanhome (talk)Ramanhome

Hope all this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 00:19, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Previous messages>>>> Hi Onel5969

You have rejected my draft on a page about a person: Thiru Narayana Iyengar (above link) for reasons that he is NOT notable.

The reason why i submitted this page and why he is notable are as below:

Thiru Narayana Iyengar already has a wiki page in Tamil language: https://ta.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E0%AE%A8%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%B0%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%AF%E0%AE%A3_%E0%AE%90%E0%AE%AF%E0%AE%99%E0%AF%8D%E0%AE%95%E0%AE%BE%E0%AE%B0%E0%AF%8D Thiru Narayana Iyengar was a notable Tamil and Sanskrit scholar during his time - 1861 to 1947. This english page is just to get the information about him to a world-wide english audience Winning awards and recognition from Prince of Wales during the commonwealth days for his competency in Tamil language is not considered notable? His contemporaries like (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Raghava_Iyengar), (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/S._Vaiyapuri_Pillai), (https://ta.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E0%AE%AA%E0%AE%9F%E0%AE%BF%E0%AE%AE%E0%AE%AE%E0%AF%8D:Somasundara_bharathiar.jpg) all already have a wiki page in english apart from pages in tamil language. If we dont have this wiki page in english, the english speaking world will not know about this tamil and sanskrit language scholar. I have already added more references to the draft article above. please take a look and let me know what else needs to be done.

Regards Ramanhome (talk) 01:44, 8 March 2015 (UTC)Ramanhome — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ramanhome (talk • contribs) 01:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ramanhome - This is a very difficult article to ascertain notability. First, even though the underlying links might be in Tamil, the reference notes themselves need to be in English. To me, it looks like only 3 or 4 sources are referenced. Most of the Tamil language in the article also needs to go away. All the raw links in the article have to go away. And finally, the article has an WP:NPOV issue. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:38, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Ken Kern-http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ken_Kern

Hearty hello to you, sir, You cannot be all bad if you enjoy Bass, but you are probably right about my first edit.

thank you for trying to steer me in the right direction. This is my first attempt to join in what I regard as one of the worthiest endeavors in the world today, Wikipedia. I have relied on and used Wikipedia more and more as time has gone on. I even have contributed some of my hard earned money to it, so I consider it to be one of the best bargains out there. I say all this to show my heart is in the right place although obviously my head needs to catch up.

I have read though multiple pages on editing and protocol and technique, but I am having a little trouble. First, where is there a succinct description of the rules and editorial policy of Wikipedia? I have seen the pyramid about staying on the upper three tiers. Civility and objectivity are essential.

I was motivated to add some information to Mr.Kern's page because it seemed so strange that such a great individual and great American would have so little about him on one of the primary sources of real knowledge, that of Wikipedia. But, I understand the need for documentation and the restriction of opinion based information.

One problem is that Mr.Ken Kern did most of the significant part of his work before the internet got under way and also labored in an relatively obscure area where you do not get much documentation.

I know several living architects who would love to be covered on Wikipedia, but what would be the basis of that coverage? It would seem to have to do with the significance of the contribution to the world at large; what is the value of their life's work.

So, Sir, I have a couple of questions:

1. How do you cite references for someone who was so little covered in his own lifetime that there are even now few references to his considerable efforts?

2. How do you attempt to make an evaluation without some measure of subjectivity?

Anything you can do to point me in the right direction would be most appreciated. Dullbladetoo (talk) 17:22, 22 March 2015 (UTC) dull blade too

Hi Dullbladetoo - The first question is simple. References do not have to be available online - that only makes checking them out easier. There are editors who check who have access to references not on the web. So feel free to use hard copies of books/magazines/newspaper articles. Just be careful, if you do, to format it correctly, and include all the necessary information. You can find out how to format citations at WP:CIT.

Your second question is more problematic, but also pretty straightforward. Wikipedia attempts to be an objective encyclopedia. Subjectivity is definitely frowned upon. Just give facts, and let the reader make up their own mind. When you enter subjective opinions, or attempt to evaluate, you break one of the 3 prime pillars of Wikipedia: No Original Research.

I hope this helps you, and welcome to the wacky world of Wikipedia. Happy editing! Onel5969 (talk) 23:52, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

19:54:43, 22 March 2015 review of submission by Dcw2003

• Dcw2003 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Abraham Jacob Hollandersky (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I have added twenty valid, and well researched references that support the facts in the article. I have better organized the article, and have re-written it in a more encyclopedic style. Dcw2003 (talk) 19:54, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. The article is well-referenced in terms of notability, but there are large sections lacking any citations. However, the article is not written in a formal, encyclopedic tone. Look at other articles regarding boxers from the early 1900s. No opinions, no subjective writing. Just state the facts. And get rid of the trivia, who cares if some navy commander sent him a thank you note. Get rid of stuff like, "This statistic may more accurately reflect ...", that's subjective opinion, not fact. Onel5969 (talk) 00:35, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Proof read

Hi Onel5969,

Could you please take a quick look at the article I edited: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/William_Sutherland_(scientist)  ?

Many thanks!

Avicennia marina (talk) 20:07, 22 March 2015 (UTC)Avicennia marina

Okay, wow, Avicennia marina, there are some formatting errors. You can still fix the format of the last 2 cites. Onel5969 (talk) 01:01, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

21:04:36, 22 March 2015 review of submission by Eleni Mamali

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  • User:Eleni Mamali/sandbox (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Eleni Mamali (talk) 21:04, 22 March 2015 (UTC){{SAFESUBST:Void|}

1. I cannot add a table. I use @insert table, choose number of rows, columnw etc , the word example appears in their place and the info. I provide does not appear. Can you help me what I should do?

2 Can I add a reference just below my text?

Hi Eleni Mamali - I hate tables myself, they are a pain in the ass. But they sure look pretty. When I want to add a table, I simply find a table in an article, and copy/paste it into my article. Then I simply edit the information in the table (and the number of columns/rows). If you tell me how many columns/rows you want, I can put a simple table into your article, and then you can fill it in.

You should add the references where they belong in the article. You can find out about referencing at referencing for beginners and WP:CITE; you can learn how to properly format citations at WP:CIT. When you add a reference, you should add a "Reference" section at the end of the article, and put a "reflist" (in {{}}) in that section. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:11, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

West Park article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Juphilli/sandbox

Hello,

This is my first attempt at an article on wikipedia, so I appreciate your feedback.

1. Peacock terms- I did delete "pleasant" in the first line about the neighborhood and I cut out some folksy language in the first line of discussion about West Park's name. Do you consider the quotes later in the article as non encyclopedic (referring to the Chief getting a new job, etc.) ? Those quotes should be eliminated?

2. independent, reliable sources- could you cite which ones you question so that I can substitute those, please? Thanks! "Juphilli (talk) 00:14, 23 March 2015 (UTC)"

Hi Juphilli - Sometimes all you need to do is tweak an article, and the entire tone changes. Which is what you've done. Nice job, now it simply reads as a factual account. The message template you got is an automatic thing, and a one-size-fits-all message. There was nothing wrong with your references, it was only the tone. Resubmit and let me know here, and I'll move it to the mainspace. Good work! And congratulations on your first article. Keep editing.

One final thing, I made some small format changes, but one thing you should do, is you'll notice I changed one of the references (the "Howdy") reference, the second time it was used. When you use the same reference multiple times in an article, you simply name that reference, then use the format I did the second time. You should go in and change all the uses of that reference. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:44, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Betty Lane

Hello, thank you for approving the article Betty Lane. This is my first submission to Wikipedia and I am sure there are shortcomings in my style. Please help me understand what they are. Looking at the Grading Scheme I see that the article may be a Stub due to its short length, but I am not sure Betty Lane needs to be longer. Looking at the Grading scheme Betty Lane has the criteria of A B or C Stub or Start qualifications. Please advise more specifically how I can improve its quality. Unless I am mistaken there are correct citations to reputable sources. --1offby (talk) 03:20, 23 March 2015 (UTC) Also I am waiting on permissions before adding images.--1offby (talk) 03:38, 23 March 2015 (UTC) Please advise whether the Stub status is due to the importance of the subject or an issue with the article, thank you--1offby (talk) 05:02, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi 1offby - Nice job on your first article. The difference between start and stub has nothing to do with quality, or subject importance. Simply how in-depth the article covers the subject. This was close between a stub and start, and looking at it again, probably deserves the start category (so I've made that change). I see from your strikeout above, you have a clearer understanding of the C, B and A categories. Your article wouldn't have been approved if the citations weren't good (trust me, I approve 1 article for every 10 I have to decline because of sources). Pictures would improve the article, so when you get approval, do add them. Other than that, you can objectively go more in-depth on the subject. That's the only real way to improve an article. I would probably break out a "Career" section from the current "Life" section, and make the "Exhibitions" a sub-section in Careers.

If you have enough information, you could have two life sections (e.g. early life (before her career started) and later years (where you discuss her teaching, personal life (marriage, children, etc), and her death. But avoid sections which are too short. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:55, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello Onel5969 Thank you for the feedback, and the change from stub to start. As I seek permissions for pictures I'll also look in to adding sections. I think there might be a source or two I have yet to access. Best, ----1offby (talk) 14:22, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:A_Tryst_with_Money

Hello Onel5969, My page on my recently published book 'A Tryst with Money' has been rejected for 'Notability' reasons. I have added a few references that highlights some of the coverages by major sources about the book. However, I am not sure why my page is getting declined.

Could you please let me know how I can get this validated?

Samarvijay (talk) 10:24, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Samarvijay - I usually like to see at least 3 solid references in an article. But taking another look at yours, the two you have are very solid. Sometimes we make mistakes, I most likely should have approved this. Resubmit, and let me know, and I'll move it to the mainspace. Nice job. Onel5969 (talk) 14:04, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks Onei5969, Just resubmitted. Thanks for your quick response. Samarvijay (talk) 11:25, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 10:48:01, 23 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by P Bonnin Cugno

• P Bonnin Cugno (talk · contribs)
  • User:P Bonnin Cugno (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

My First article on wikipedia was recently turned down. It was written about an influential artist who has lead departments at three universities has been honoured by national art academies by being asked to curate their exhibitions. He has also bridged the gap between science and art a thing seldom done. And has had major exhibitions throughout the world.

In Scotland our media is very London centric and therefore coverage of the Scottish Art scene by the printed press is almost non existent, therefore I would of thought that referencing govt bodies like the crop institute or national archives would of fulfilled wikipedias reference requirements. Can you give me some guidance on where exactly my referencing or article let me down please? Thank you in advance for your help.

P Bonnin Cugno (talk) 10:48, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi P Bonnin Cugno - there's really no way around the notability requirements. Based on the current sources, he clearly does not meet the criteria for an artist. I think you might make a better case for his notability as an academic, based on his academic credentials, but that's not the focus of the article. But even as an academic, I'm not sure he meets the criteria as per WP:NACADEMIC. If you can establish notability, the article still has a rather large WP:NPOV issue. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:42, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Ronnie Forbes Article

My user name is P Bonnin Cugno

I recently submitted an article on a influential Scottish artist by the name of Ronnie Forbes but was turned down. I am interested to know where you felt my article was weak and how I could improve it. I have already filled in the question page sent so I presume that you can read that so I will not elaborate too much. I really appreciate your time taken to first of all review my article but secondly to allow me to learn some editing skills. thanks in advance P Bonnin Cugno (talk) 10:56, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 11:14:02, 23 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by John Omar Larnell Adams

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I need help adding citations and secondary references to my John Omar Larnell Adams page.

John Omar Larnell Adams (talk) 11:14, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi John Omar Larnell Adams - I'll be happy to help, first, you can take a look at referencing for beginners. That should help. Formatting citations can be found at WP:CIT, and more information regarding citations can be found at WP:CITE. Let me know if you need more help. Onel5969 (talk) 15:11, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Help with Submission

Hi-

I am having trouble revising my submission to be approved. There are a variety of numerous sources, and just the basic facts of our company.

Please explain further on how to get this approved.

Thanks so much for your help. Jessieivy33 (talk) 15:33, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Jessieivy33 - Articles need to tell us about the subject, not attempt to sell the subject to us. Get rid of all "The company says..." stuff (and the stuff in those sentences - that's all promotional). Just the facts. Get rid of all tm, registered symbols. Your sources are fine and definitely show the notability, as well as verifying the underlying facts. It's simply the promotional tone of the article. Make the corrections and let me know here, and I'll take another look at it. Onel5969 (talk) 13:56, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969,

I made the edits you suggested. Please take another look at the article for approval.

Thanks again for your help! Jessieivy33 (talk) 16:05, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

MrArmstrong2

Thanks for approving my page on Alfredo Kanthack. MrArmstrong2 (talk) 15:51, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for approving my page on Arturo Kanthack. MrArmstrong2 (talk) 15:53, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi MrArmstrong2 - no problem, it was a good article. Nice job. Onel5969 (talk) 13:58, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

My Article Got Declined

Hi There,

I am new to Wikipedia. The article I have created has been declined. I understand that it can be fixed. Unfortunately I do not understand what exactly I need to fix and how? Would it be possible that you explain to me what I need to fix and how? Also would it be possible if you submit this article on my behalf? The article is already written so I can send you the Draft. All I need to know how to PROPERLY submitted so it is accepted.

My name is AnkaIva

Here is the link to the article I am referring to: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Ankaiva#Your_submission_at_Articles_for_creation:_Bjorn_Gunnar_Lefnaer_.28March_5.29 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ankaiva (talk • contribs) 17:10, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ankaiva - There are a couple of issues with your article. First, you need to establish notability of the subject. This is done through reliable, independent sources. Press releases are not independent, and Vox is not reliable. The Moneyshow citation is a dead link, and the last citation doesn't mention your subject at all. We'd need at least 2-3 in-depth articles from independent reliable sources to show your subject's notability. You can take a look at WP:GNG to learn more about notability. Second, once you have established notability, this would be a BLP (biography of a living person), and as such, requires inline citations to verify each fact you assert in the article. In other words, you say he appeared on VOX, the Vox citation, while not eligible for notability, would suffice to verify the fact that he appeared on the program. You simply have to put the citation after the comma where you talk about it. I'll do that for you, so you can have an example. You make some very strident claims about the subject's lifestyle, those REALLY need citations. Also, please make sure you format your citations correctly. I've done that for the Vox cite, but you can find other examples at WP:CIT. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

17:58:24, 23 March 2015 review of submission by Sothomensch

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  • Draft:Robert Oakeshott (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

First, thank you for reviewing so quickly my recent submission on Robert Oakeshott. It ought to be a straightforward task to comply with your request for a more formal tone. But I cannot get the feel for whether this needs to be a full-scale overhaul or more a matter of vocabulary choice. A bit of individually tailored guidance might be helpful. For example, could you perhaps suggest a revision to an egregiously "peacock" sentence?

I have enjoyed my learning curve on Wikipedia. As you no doubt guessed, this is my first time to create an entry from scratch. I look forward to becoming much better at it.

-tom holzinger, aka sothomensch <tom_holzinger@yahoo.com>

Sothomensch (talk) 17:58, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Sothomensch - No worries. Most folks choose something they have a great deal of interest in for their first article. Which can lead to a bit of over-exuberance on how they write about it. Afraid the entire article needs a going over. For example, your lead paragraph, "Robert Noel Waddington Oakeshott (26 July 1933 – 21 June 2011) was an English journalist, economist and social reformer who championed a form of workers' co operation called Employee Ownership. He also had a deep passion for Africa and worked in Zambia and Botswana in the early years of their independence." would read better as "Robert Noel Waddington Oakeshott (26 July 1933 – 21 June 2011) was an English journalist, economist and social reformer who worked on a form of workers' cooperation called "employee ownership". He was also interested in causes in Africa, working in Zambia and Botswana in the early years of their independence."

It's not a huge difference, but you can see how the paragraph now reads neutrally. Get rid of words like "enormous", "distinguished", etc. Also, on a different topic, the article also has an informal tone, phrases like "Never a religious man...", "Ever supportive of others..." should be cut. Don't make assumptions or draw conclusions, just give facts. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:12, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Re: The Cambridge Institute of International Education Page

Hello,

I just reviewed your comments on why this proposed page was not approved, specifically as it relates to notability. What would you recommend if a big part of a company's notability relates to media published in a language other than English? Specifically, this company is better known in China, where it has 7 offices, than the US, where it has only 2. Should I reference articles in the other language? How will that be reviewed?

Thanks for your help! Matt (Mjenningscambridge)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Cambridge_Institute_of_International_Education

Mjenningscambridge (talk) 18:48, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Mjenningscambridge - References in other languages are okay. It might take it a bit longer to get reviewed, as there are less editors which can handle that (for example, I couldn't), but they do get reviewed. Just remember, even though the underlying citation might be in a foreign language, the wording in the actual footnote should be in English. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:18, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

19:30:34, 23 March 2015 review of submission by Merise

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  • Draft:Alfredo Olivas (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi, I'm requesting help, not a re-review at this point. I wrote an wikipedia article on Alfredo Olivas, a Mexican corridor singer. You reviewed it.

My problem is this: Because he is so young (19) and has been performing for so few years (4), there has not yet been a lot written about him. Added to that, my searches for information and reviews of the artist's work are overwhelmed with articles about his recent on-stage shooting (Feb 2015). I have tried to filter out certain words and restrict dates, but have not found more information than I previously presented.

Could you, would you, help me fix the article and make it suitable for wikipedia?

Thank you

Merise (talk) 19:30, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Merise - he qualifies as notable due to his signing with a major label, Sony in 2014. While Allmusic isn't the best source, it can be used to verify this fact: HERE's the link. But regarding the rest, you'll have to slog through all the stuff about his shooting to come up with other articles as well. But if you had the information about Sony and use the Allmusic citation, you'll meet the notability criteria. Onel5969 (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Alfredo Olivas

Hi, I'm requesting help, not a re-review at this point. I wrote an wikipedia article on Alfredo Olivas, a Mexican corridor singer. You reviewed it.

My problem is this: Because he is so young (19) and has been performing for so few years (4), there has not yet been a lot written about him. Added to that, my searches for information and reviews of the artist's work are overwhelmed with articles about his recent on-stage shooting (Feb 2015). I have tried to filter out certain words and restrict dates, but have not found more information than I previously presented.

Could you, would you, help me fix the article and make it suitable for wikipedia?

Thank you

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Alfredo_Olivas

user: Merise

23:37:44, 23 March 2015 review of submission by Melbtheatreco

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  • Draft:NEON Festival of Independent Theatre (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi Onel5969,

Thanks for your feedback on my page NEON Festival of Independent Theatre. I wondered if you could tell me specifically which parts of the article you would like referenced? I have tried to be as thorough as possible, but am happy to try and improve.

Very best wishes,

Eleanor Melbourne Theatre Company

Melbtheatreco (talk) 23:37, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Melbtheatreco - to prove notability, references must be independent (no press releases or info from the company's site) and reliable (no blogs or interviews). The cite you have from dailyreview is good, but we need one or two others. It's interesting as well, that you use the dailyreview cite after talking about the best of award, and yet that article doesn't seem to mention that award (unless I missed it). Also, you don't need the media section, it's redundant. Finally, please see WP:CIT in order to format your citations properly. Hope this helps. Let me know if you want me to take another look at it after you edit it. Onel5969 (talk) 15:51, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

23:38:13, 23 March 2015 review of submission by Russkohn

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  • User:Russkohn/Michael Barclay (Rabbi) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi! Thanks for taking the time to review my first wikipedia article. Can you see unsubmitted drafts of mine if I have questions while I'm editing to address your concerns on Notability and Independent sources? If so...go for it as I've added a number of improved references (I Hope!). If not...I'll resubmit and see if I'm getting closer.

Russkohn (talk) 23:38, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi, Russkohn - yes I am. For notability purposes, stuff by the rabbi, and interviews can't be used. The Bnai Zion link is good, but not enough by itself. Amazon only shows that he wrote a book. The Liturgical press link is good for proving the notability of the book, but not the author. Are there any in-depth articles from independent sources about the rabbi? We need at least 2 more to show his notability. Onel5969 (talk) 15:59, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 09:24:00, 24 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Dlaxerton

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Dlaxerton (talk) 09:24, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

11:22:11, 24 March 2015 review of submission by 5.144.156.186

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  • User:Peter43Gif/sandbox/The Hyman Archive (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Not sure why this was rejected and not considered 'notable' or the citations were not reliable?

To reiterate, the Hyman Archive has the Guinness World Record for 'Largest Collection Of Magazines' and this has been verified, officially recognised and certified by Guinness themselves. That citation was used on the draft: http://www.guinnessworldrecords.com/world-records/largest-collection-of-magazines/

There are other citations, for example the reputable, established, notable, PPA (Professional Publishers Asscociation) are supporting the project: http://www.ppa.co.uk/news/blog/ppa/2014/6/hyman-archive-plan-digitise-worlds-largest-collection-magazines/

Other citations include: Hypebeast: http://hypebeast.com/2012/4/the-james-hyman-pop-culture-magazine-archive

If you see the video at http://www.hymanarchive.com, you will also note, many industry 'notables' talking about the archive and supplying testimonials.

So, as all of the above, unsure why this draft was rejected?

5.144.156.186 (talk) 11:22, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Seriously? You have two references the Guiness Book, and the subject's webpage. Guiness has tons of trivial stuff, and this is one of them. Not a shred of doubt that this article, as it stands is completely non-notable. Onel5969 (talk) 03:50, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

USAF Advisory Board

Thanks, that information was very helpful and much appreciated. The text fragments flagged as copyvios are standard "terms of art" but I can easily change them to avoid this issue. I'll do so and resubmit. The page is on the [United States Air Force Scientific Advisory Board], currently in my Sandbox Wdahm (talk) 17:54, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Looks better, Wdahm - you might want to format the citations as per WP:CIT, it will make it easier to evaluate. Onel5969 (talk) 03:56, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Article for AfC Declined - Draft:Small_Luxury_Hotels_of_the_World

Hi There

Thank you for reviewing the article. This is the third time its been declined for 'reading like an advertisement' and not in a 'neutral tone' and not being 'encyclopaedic'. Well, there is just some basic information about the company, there are references to third party sources and it definitely is an reputed and big luxury brand that deserves to have a wikipedia article.

Here is the link to the draft you declined Draft:Small Luxury Hotels of the World

Please let me know what is going wrong. And how I can improve the article.

Cheers! Firdaushaque (talk) 18:09, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Firdaushaque - Okay, here are some examples. "which was established as a Program of The Prince of Wales International Business Leaders Forum to provide leadership for responsible business in hotels, travel and tourism." You should stop at simply which was established as a Program of The Prince of Wales International Business Leaders Forum. "added a selection of Asian and Pacific properties" - very promotional, simply state it merged, expanding into Asia. "SLH maintains high standards for acceptance of new members." - simply promotional - in fact, that whole section is only promotional and should be deleted. "best of both worlds" - again, that entire section should probably be deleted. Articles are to inform, not sell. Onel5969 (talk) 04:10, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969

You have been very helpful. Nobody earlier pointed out specific things for me. Thank you.

If you notice some of the sections you are referring to were not there in the previous versions. But the admin who rejected the AfC said the article is too short to be 'notable' so i added these relevant sections. But now i think i get a clear picture of what needs to be there and how to put it. I will edit the piece and resubmit it. Thank you once again.

Firdaushaque (talk) 10:45, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

BaFa

Hello Onel5969,

Thank you for getting back to me about the article I submitted https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:BaFa%27_BaFa%27_-_Cross_Cultural/Diversity_Simulation.

I am in an interesting situation. It appears my submission was denied because it contains portions of a copyrighted document named "The History of BaFa' BaFa'". This fact it true, but the interesting thing is the article was originally written and submitted solely to Wikipedia in April 2011 but it was rejected. The interesting/difficult part of this story is that it was written by my Father, Dr. Garry Shirts, and submitted by his nephew in/around April of 2011 and before we found out that it had been declined my father died (late April 2011). As you can imagine we sort of lost track of the whole situation and a couple years later I found the article "The History of BaFa' BaFa'" and published it on the company website.

So while in fact portions of this article are from a copyrighted and published document, it is really a resubmission of an article which was submitted specifically & solely for Wikipedia but sort of abandoned because of the death of my father.

I tried to contact the person who originally submitted the article, but he doesn't remember his username, but his real name is John Foley.

I'm not sure if any of this matters, I have unpublished the article on the company website and I'd love to make this work.

Please advise.

I appreciate your time and effort.

Sincerely Mitch Shirts Username: MgshirtsMgshirts (talk) 18:36, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Mgshirts - wow, that's a pretty unique situation. I want to give this article justice, so give me a few days to go over it (I'm working on a couple of other things at the moment). If I don't get back to you by Saturday, hit me up again.

One issue I will point out is that even though you took care of the copyvio issue, if you at some point in the future republish it on the website, another editor might delete the article. If you think that might happen, you might want to go through the process of giving the copyright to Wikipedia. The process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. Anyway, I'll take a look at it. Onel5969 (talk) 04:18, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

I wouldn't mind giving Wikipedia the copyright if that's needed, the whole article was written for Wikipedia in the first place. I wish I would have known this whole situation back when it originally happened, I would have edited the article back then and probably would have been able to avoid all this. Thanks again and I'll look for your reply.

MgshirtsMgshirts (talk) 17:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Resubmit and I'll move it to the mainspace. I made some slight changes to the headings. I changed the first section to "Plot", so that it gives you a bit more leeway in verbiage you can use, and you don't have to have citations in a plot section. I would also cede your copyright to Wikipedia, using the information HERE, so that no issues arise in the future. Onel5969 (talk) 00:21, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Don Doe

Hello,

I submitted the wiki after making the edits you required, and it was declined by a different reviewer. The person listed the same compliant you had in January, though I felt those changes had been made. Let me know if their are any other changes to be made, or if I just need to submit it for your review.

Link Here: [[4]]

Thank you, -Sage — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.46.114.112 (talk) 19:18, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Sage - I think the other editor meant the same thing I did. That there need to be more inline citations. By his inclusion in the MOMA and AIC collections, he clearly meets the notability criteria as per WP:NARTIST. It would be nice if there were links to an in-depth article or two about the artist (but that's not required, simply would make the article more solidly referenced). But the article still needs more citations to verify the underlying facts of the article, placed in the appropriate position within the article. I'll go through and add "citation needed" tags to show you where you need more references. After you get the citations, let me know and I'll take another look at it. Also, be wary of making declarative or conclusion statements, or of stating opinions. As you'll see where I inserted the cn tags, when you make the statement, "These images still mimic a humorous and sensual view of pin-up illustrations", you need a citation to back that up, or else it is simply your opinion, and therefore would fall under original research. Onel5969 (talk) 13:27, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Great Grant Deed

Regarding The Great Grant Deed: I have addressed the various issues you raised on 3/154/15 by deleting "essay like" commentary and the whole Closing section, added page numbers, clarified some citiations, added a citation where noted, moved the opening quote to the graphic caption and provided citation directly at the point of a quotation. There are no page numbers for material cited on web pages. However, I tried to keep web citations to a minimum preferring the stronger sources I have chosen. The site has been rejected by a different editor but I trust the process you have developed will yield a published result

Thanks Bertmbc (talk) 20:28, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bertmbc - let me know the next time you resubmit. How does your article relate to the Sycamore Shoals Treaty? And to the Transylvania colony? It seems that your article is tangentially related, but a basically different subject. The reference to Dragging Canoe is troubling. Are these the same treaty? Onel5969 (talk) 04:28, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

03:13:07, 25 March 2015 review of submission by Sfjmercado

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  • Draft:United States Rangers (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

This cadet program is modeled by many national programs and does not utilize specific, or cite worthy material.

Sfjmercado (talk) 03:13, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

04:23:23, 25 March 2015 review of submission by TCSadvocate

Because wikipedia editors are declining my article regarding golla and yadav caste. Those who are declining my article doesnt know about ancient civizations. Please read frederick engels 'origin of family,private property and constitution' in which he wrote certain things about shepherds and ancient cowherds in one of its chapters barbarism and civilization.I think scholars who refuse the value of cattle in ancient societies are not at all scholars.

TCSadvocate (talk) 04:23, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi TCSadvocate - No one is declining "your article" on either Golla or Yadav. In fact, I can't see where you submitted an article on those subjects. I do see where you attempted to edit the existing articles, and those edits were reverted. If you wish to add to an article, please have citations to back up your edits. If not, you will most likely continue to be reverted. Onel5969 (talk) 13:52, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Nakuru County Peace Accord

I just wanted to say that I just resubmitted the Nakuru County Peace Accord following your suggestions from January. It'd be great if you could take another look. Thanks! --Timoluege (talk) 12:00, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Timoluege - Nice job! Moved it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 14:01, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Paraphrasing issue on article submission

Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Draft:Rebecca_Harding&direction=next&oldid=646371106

Dear Onel5969, Thanks for your feedback on this article - you have noted it is a paraphrase rather than a copyright issue (leading to the article submission being declined).

Is the best thing to do to re-write the whole article to avoid paraphrasing (still keeping all the citations/references) and re-submit it? And do you have any other advice in order to get the article submitted, if it is a paraphrasing issue?

Many thanks for your help! Ilovetomatoes321 Ilovetomatoes321 (talk) 14:10, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ilovetomatoes321 - that's really up to you. I don't think it's so extensive that an entire re-write is necessary. Just take a look at the underlying source, and you can see where you've phrased things very closely (particularly in the lead and consultancy sections) - the rest only has two or three phrases which are like the underlying article. A lot of the stuff which is the same throughout the article, are the names of the corporations, agencies, etc. to which she was affiliated. Can't help those being the same, that's not copyright violation. Onel5969 (talk) 22:34, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

The Great Grant

I sent you a note on your talk page advising the various revisions per your last contact. Perhaps I did not chose the correct means for communication. I don't have a firm grip on how to communicate with you but here goes.

To explain the purpose:

There was a gathering at Sycamore Shoals in March 1775 that resulted in four separate treaties or property grants each of which had a separate deed from the Cherokee.

Taken all together the four treaties resulting in Grants or Deeds are known as the Watauga Treaties of March 1775. The largest of the grants was for land in Central Kentucky that Richard Henderson called the 14th or Transylvania colony.

The Great Grant Deed piece in question is intended to concentrate on facts specifically related to the Great Grant and to relate the actual words describing the property as described in the actual deed (grant). Since those words are difficult to comprehend, a map was provided (actually two maps) that clearly indicate the boundaries described. A citation was made to a Wiki Commons map that while correctly describing part of the Great Grant/Transylvania Colony properties, omits a very large but important portion. This map is nor wrong, but it is not right. It is incomplete and omits as part of the Grant the extremely important Cumberland Gap, the key to the Wilderness Trail and the whole Transylvania Colony proposition.

The same attention to the actual property and the deed and the map was the focus of the already published Wiki piece the Path Grant Deed.

The primary deed was the Great Grant to the Henderson & Co on March 17 (the Transylvania Colony land) and the Path Grant Deed (the Cherokee land to be crossed to reach the vast Great Grant tract) on March 19.

A day or two later March 21 or so, still at Sycamore shoals, there were treaties with the Cherokee for a grant to Jacob Brown (aka the Nolichucky Grant) that actually consisted of two deeds and lastly a grant to Charles Robinson (The Watauga Association Grant). The last two were sales by the Cherokee to existing settlers occupying property in what is now East Tennessee they might have actually already bought, leased or were just squatters. There were lots of settlers involved and rather than negotiate many treaties or grants, the negotiations were simplified into the watersheds of the Nolichucky River and the Watauga River. Once the watershed properties were deeded from the Cherokee, the settlers divided them up according to what they already claimed.

To put it mildly the status of the last two was a serious mess and the gathering at Sycamore Shoals offered the opportunity to Treat with the Cherokee to resolve the various issues with property ownership. These last grants are the subject of future (but shorter) Wiki pieces. These pieces will also address the confusion that resulted from not knowing if the lands in question were part of Virginia or of North Carolina.

All are tangentially related to other Wiki pieces that do not address the issues of property transfer or the subsequent problems that arose as a result of the political actions of Virginia, North Carolina and the Revolutionary war that was started a few days after the signing of the treaties at Watauga.

Now, regarding Dragging Canoe and the Dark and Bloody ground.

Virtually all the historians use the phrase "dark and bloody ground" or "dark cloud hanging over the bloody ground" in some manner. The phrase was omitted from the Dissention section but remains in the Sellers Right To Sell section where the direct quote is solidly referenced. The citation to the speech was intended to comply with your advice on how to use and cite direct quotes. Specifically Reference 34 is pertinent.

This is longer than might be prudent but provides an insight into the complexity of the subject matter of properties sold by the Cherokee in March 1775. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bertmbc (talk • contribs) 14:21, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Bertmbc - nice job. Still a little essay-ish, but not enough to preclude moving it to the mainspace. Congrats. Let me know when you finish the next one. Onel5969 (talk) 22:41, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hotel Jerusalem

Hi there, This is a bit new to me but I wanted to upload an entry for the Hotel Jerusalem. I am working from a 150 page hard copy presentation that was created by Pedro Santos from the ITAC organization. This dossier was created for the Israeli architect Yair Cohen. There is significant overlap of content from what appears on the Wikipedia entry on the German / American Colony in Jaffa and I am sure that they relied on the same sources. Please advise as to how I can upload this content. Thx David — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dlaxerton (talk • contribs) 14:52, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Dlaxerton - The citations should really be inline, so that we can know what facts are substantiated by references. You need another source or two to show the notability of the subject. Ideally, they should be accessible by web (but that's not necessary, just makes it easier to check), and they need to be from independent, reliable sources. Onel5969 (talk) 22:56, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hans-Jurgen Sasse

Hi Onel5969,

My recent article on Hans-Jurgen Sasse has been tagged for deletion because it duplicates content at http://www.ssila.org/2015/03/05/hans-jurgen-sasse-1943-2015/.

However, I wrote the article/obituary at the SSILA newsletter, based on the German wikipedia page. (I am one of the editors of the newsletter.) I noticed that there was no Wikipedia page for Sasse, so I edited my obituary for en.wikipedia.org.

Can you help?

George Aaron Broadwell (g.broadwell@gmail.com)

Hi George. First, contest the speedy deletion, with the above information, and say that you are going to donate the copyrighted material. Then, the process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 16:42, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Article - Rebecca Harding

Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Draft:Rebecca_Harding&direction=next&oldid=646371106

Dear Onel5969, Thanks for your feedback on this article - you have noted it is a paraphrase rather than a copyright issue (leading to the article submission being declined).

Is the best thing to do to re-write the whole article to avoid paraphrasing (still keeping all the citations/references) and re-submit it? And do you have any other advice in order to get the article submitted, if it is a paraphrasing issue?

Many thanks for your help! Ilovetomatoes321 Ilovetomatoes321 (talk) 14:10, 25 March 2015 (UTC) Ilovetomatoes321 (talk) 17:09, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Nature Based Solutions

Hello,

I would like to thank you very much for reviewing our wiki article on Nature-Based Solutions (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Nature-based_solutions).

I do see some of the points of the reasons for rejection (indeed sometimes wording does look promotional), but at the same time it would be very helpful for me if I can have a concrete indication on which parts you see as purely academic or reading like an essay, and some hints on how we can improve them (and the wiki overall).

It would be great if you can give us some feedback on those!!!

Thank you very much in advance,

Eleni.Manoli (talk) 17:56, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Eleni.Manoli - Well, essays talk about a subject, offering conclusions, making assumptions, etc. Articles tell about a subject, offering facts, supported by reliable sources. Take your opening sentence: "Nature-based solutions to societal challenges such as climate change, unsustainable urbanisation, environmental degradation and human health and well-being are inspired or supported by nature and simultaneously provide environmental, social and economic benefits." That's a beginning of a discussion. It should really start by saying "Nature-based solutions are ________________________. And then add several facts which you will flesh out in the remainder of the article. Take a look at Wikipedia:Your first article, and then look at the Manual of Style (MOS). Those are really big helps in understanding what wiki articles are like. Also, take a look at WP:CIT, which will give you instructions on how to properly format your citations. In the rest of the article, take the Mitigating section - the first two sentences are pretty much fine (as long as the citation at the end of the sentence backs them up); but the second paragraph goes back into discussion mode. I hope this helps.Onel5969 (talk) 23:08, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

19:13:12, 25 March 2015 review of submission by 195.191.67.226

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Why has this draft been declined again? A 3rd citation was given and ignored: http://www.ppa.co.uk/news/blog/ppa/2014/6/hyman-archive-plan-digitise-worlds-largest-collection-magazines/ The PPA and its members, asscoiates etc. are hardly 'un-notable'. They are supporting this project, the Hyman Archive. The PPA has been operating for 100 years and has its own wiki page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Professional_Publishers_Association 195.191.67.226 (talk) 19:13, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

I've responded to this already above. You need to have sources which support the notability. Currently you have two sources: The Guiness source which is trivia, and a blog, which is not a reliable source. Onel5969 (talk) 23:11, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Re: Draft:Karola Bloch

I was contacted by a concerned user that Draft:Karola Bloch was indeed notable, but that its sources were mainly in German. I did a quick look and was able to find some English language references: [5] [6] [7] and at least 6000 more results. Andrevan@ 19:53, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Andrevan - the language of the citations had nothing to do with it. The article only had a single, independent source, which clearly does not meet the notability guidelines. Onel5969 (talk) 23:20, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

There are several sources listed, they just aren't formatted as inline references. More to the point, this is a translation of a German article and can easily be corroborated with a little poking around. I think the larger issue is that this user has been bitten by a process that could have been more helpful and less negative. Andrevan@ 00:05, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Andrevan - No, there are not several sources listed, there are two sources listed. And one is by the subject of the article, if you had looked closely at the article, you would have realized that. More to the point, I am not sure where you think that declining an obviously non-notable article is negative. I think the larger issue is why you are even speaking to me about this. If the author has a question, let them ask it. I would have told them that they simply needed to add more citations, and let them know the types of citations. If you take a look at this talk page, you can see that's all they had to do. Onel5969 (talk) 03:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Anne Frommann: Ich gehe zu jenen, die mich brauchen: Zum 85. Geburtstag von Karola Bloch. ISBN 3-893-760-13X (Translation: I go to those who need me: the 85th birthday of Karola Bloch.)

Irene Scherer, Welf Schröter (Eds.): Karola Bloch – Architektin, Sozialistin, Freundin. Eine Neuentdeckung des Wirkens der Bauhaus-Schülerin Karola Bloch. ISBN 978-3-89376-073-2 (Translation: Karola Bloch - architect, socialist, girlfriend. A rediscovery of the work of the Bauhaus student Karola Bloch. )

These are both independent works. They are listed under "Sources." I am pretty surprised you can say that the subject of this article is obviously non-notable, since a cursory glance at Google Books shows otherwise. The editor is a newbie and your response is bitey. Andrevan@ 04:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Andrevan - I was looking under references (where the Scherer work is also listed). Two is still not "several", and the second "source", appears to be a collection of the subject's work, which would clearly make it not independent. In addition, the criteria is not simply "independent", but, when dealing with books specifically, but "widely-published book[s]" (see Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Reviewing instructions#Step 2: Notability and verifiability - you have to open the paragraph), which the first book by Frommann clearly is not. And how is my response, which is a canned template, "bitey". AfC, unlike AfD, does not require reviewers to do a google search. That is up to the authors of the articles (as it should be, in my opinion). We can do a search, and in some cases we do, but it is not a requirement. Some editors accept 2 references, and in some instances so do I, but not in such a recent subject. As I have said before in response to you, and as I think you can discern from looking at the responses on this page, I'm more than willing to help folks get their articles into shape. What I am not willing to do, is listen to accusations. Good day. Onel5969 (talk) 13:18, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

21:32:25, 25 March 2015 review of submission by Lornajbrunelle

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Lornajbrunelle (talk) 21:32, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Good evening,

I am inquiring why my page has been declined for a third time. We updated and corrected all of your suggestions, do press release references need to be removed? Please clarify what we need to do to have this approved. Thank you.

Lorna

Hi Lorna - Not sure what you're talking about. I look at your page, and it's only been declined once. And you've made no corrections since it was declined. Onel5969 (talk) 23:37, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

World Head of Family Sokeship Council

Hi Onel5969,

I see you declined my article because of a lack of notability. I do not understand this. The references I cited are independently published books and citations to articles about the organization in independent martial arts magazines. I also cited a proclamation from the Mayor of the City of Orlando recognizing the organization and its contribution to the martial arts. We have over 300 members WORLD WIDE for the purpose of promoting and teaching all martial arts.

I would appreciate it if you would reconsider the approval or in the alternative provide me with some more specific advice on how to get this article approved. I have submitted it several times and each time I made the requested revisions to the article and corrected the references and how I cited them. I am extremely frustrated and I really want to get this approved for our organization. Help!

Thank you,

Lograssolaw

Lograssolaw (talk) 01:47, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Lograssolaw - The last two citations do not have valid isbn numbers, so they cannot be checked. Combat magazine is a small, insignificant magazine. The Orlando proclamation does not count towards notability. You need citations from VALID, independent third party sources. And 300 members out of 7 billion doesn't really denote notability. Onel5969 (talk) 03:18, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

02:10:59, 26 March 2015 review of submission by Assumption College Primary (ACP)

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Hello, I submitted my first article and was declined. I would like to ask help on how I can get my article be improved and be considered. I would like to know how to give citations on sources I used, as this is what you said I need to improve to become verifiable. Thank you for your feedback and help! Assumption College Primary (ACP) (talk) 02:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Assumption College Primary (ACP) (talk) 02:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Assumption College Primary (ACP) - Articles need references from independent, reliable sources. Currently your article does not have any references at all. Facts in the article should be supported by those sources. For example, your article states: "Assumption College Primary Section, which is originally called “Assumption College”, officially opened its door for its first day of teaching on 23rd May 1966 with 27 teachers and 997 students from Prathoms 1-4 only." Everything in that sentence should be able to be corroborated in the sources. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:24, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Multiple cites of the same Reference

Hello,

You showed me how to correct my one source of "Howdy, Miss West Park" and I was able to change the format as you suggested. But, I tried the same format for the Anthony Iezzi and "West Park" encyclopedia article and it won't work. What am I doing wrong?

The article is

Wiki/User:Juphilli/sandbox

Thanks for your help! Feezos (talk) 03:25, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Feezos (or is it Juphilli?) - I corrected the West Park reference. The first time you use a citation, instead of simply putting "ref" in <>, you have to put "ref name=xxxxxx" in <>. Then the next time you use that same exact reference, rather than putting the entire reference again, beginning with "ref" in <>, you simply put "ref name=xxxxxx /" in <>. I hope that makes it clear. Try it with the Iezzi citation and let me know if you get it. Also, I tend to make my ref names simple, so that I can remember them, and they have to be exactly the same throughout the article. Onel5969 (talk) 13:31, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 08:52:52, 26 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Maybelline Ooi

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Dear Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing my submission previously. I have taken your comments into the editing. Could I know if I am on the right track with regards to the notability of the references?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Queen_Silvia_Nursing_Award

Thank you in advance! Maybelline Ooi (talk) 08:52, 26 March 2015 (UTC)Maybel

Maybelline Ooi (talk) 08:52, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Maybelline Ooi - Absolutely! In fact, I see that Tokyogirl79 has already approved the article after you made your edits. Nice job. Congrats! Onel5969 (talk) 13:49, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Reply to message left ref: OLBG Mares' Series Draft

Thanks for the reply. I thought that, because the page is about the mares' series and not directly about OLBG the site then the references I have provided would be ok. If I were to write an article about the company OLBG then I would expect to have to reference sources that speak about who OLBG are. Could you let me know the rule here? Is it because the company is mentioned in the title that it is not allowed?

With thanks

Silverspoon83

Silverspoon83 (talk) 10:38, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Silverspoon83 - It is not that the references are not allowed. What the issue is, is that the current underlying sources do not show the notability of the particular subject of the article: "OLBG Mares' Hurdle Series". The sources make an argument for the notability of OLBG, and for certain of the individual races, but not to the Hurdle Series. You need at least two in-depth articles which speak to not just the existence of the series, but to its notability. I hope this makes sense. Oh, also, I would at some point near the beginning of the article, explain what the OLBG acronym stands for. Onel5969 (talk) 14:01, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Alfredo Olivas - resubmit

Hi, One15969! Thank you for your help and suggestions on the Alfredo Olivas article. I've integrated your suggestions and further edited the submission. I think it's closer to acceptable... if not, is there any more direction you can offer me? Here's the link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Alfredo_Olivas#Alfredo_Olivas_-_resubmit Merise (talk) 14:04, 26 March 2015 (UTC)Merise

Hi Merise - This might simply be a question of WP:TOOSOON. If you can find two in-depth articles from reliable, independent sources, which have nothing to do with the shooting, than add them and resubmit. Other than that, I can see a way around the WP:NMUSIC and WP:GNG. I purposely did not review it again (as I thought it still did not meet the notability criteria), letting another editor take a look at it, and they came to the same conclusion. I hope you can understand the process better now. Onel5969 (talk) 00:35, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

THANKS FOR YOUR HELP!!

I've updated my article. I think its a valuable one as it introduces new information about a very significant 20th century sports figure, a boxer. The new information is tied to the work of a genealogist and her publication specifically about Abraham Hollandersky.

My primary concern now, that I've added inline references is to verify that the one photo that appears in the article has the necessary items in the file that it will not be deleted. I think its missing the user name and information on the copyright. If I just say I pulled the picture from Hollandersky's 1930 book edition, is that sufficient? Thanks.

My only concerns are that I do repeat a few of my references, and sometimes have to give a page range and not an exact page, at least for Abe's autobiography, as each edition has different pages, and I was hoping to create an inline reference that can be used by people who may have a different edition of Abe's book. (There were nearly twenty editions, so citing a page that may only work for that one edition is not really very useful, especially since, Abe's autobiography is an important source for much of his life history). — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dcw2003 (talk • contribs) 14:11, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Dcw2003 - First, I'm going to let another editor take a look at the article, to get a different perspective. Now a few things about your article.

First, the footnotes: I formatted one in the sfn (short footnote) style. It's okay to quote a page range, but not a chapter. For a page range, simply say pages=xxx-yyy. Second, your lead is too long. The lead should only be a highlighted version of the body of the article (take a look at MOS:LEAD). Just touch base on the concepts here, and put the actual information into the appropriate sections in the article. Third, you shouldn't use the term "According to" so frequently. Instead simply state the information, then cite the source. Another example of this is "This date of entry is also referenced in a letter by James Forrestal, Secretary of the Navy, dated November 15, 1946 which appears in the back of Hollandersky's autobiographies published after this date." - simply put that information into a citation (use one of the templates you can find at WP:CIT). Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 01:07, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

16:05:39, 26 March 2015 review of submission by 5.144.156.186

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"Currently you have two sources: The Guiness source which is trivia, and a blog, which is not a reliable source. Onel5969 (talk) 23:11, 25 March 2015 (UTC)" The link you consider a blog source is not a blog, it's a news story on the PPA's web site. The PPA are the voice of the publishing industry, i.e. noteworthy? Seems strange why this page can't be accepted on its merits. Also look at the video www.hymanarchive.com, key industry sources are providing source & testimony to the project. What sources are needed in your opinion to have this accepted? Does this just rely on your opinion? Can some other user over rule your opinion? Appreciate your help 5.144.156.186 (talk) 16:05, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. Even if you consider that source as not a blog, that's still a single source, which doesn't meet the notability requirements. And sure, another editor could approve the article. Doubt they will, with only a single source, but resubmit if you want. I won't comment on it, and see if another editor will approve it. Onel5969 (talk) 17:55, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

18:09:00, 26 March 2015 review of submission by Sean M Jones

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Hi my reviewer, thanks for the advice, I have been working to improve the article as you indicated when rejecting it yesterday and in particular I compiled about 40 new external independent references to substantiate what is said in the text. There is more to come; I am looking for more evidence of certain items still, but I wonder if I could ask you, whether you think I am on the right track now, please? This is my first article so it's a challenge. The draft article is: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sean_M_Jones/sandbox#Barry_Kerzin Many thanks indeed, Sean M Jones (talk) 18:09, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Sean M Jones - Okay, here's the thing. The first half of the article is virtually un-referenced. This is a blp, so almost every fact which could be challenged should have a citation. Adding 2 & 3 citations is usually not a good idea. A single citation from a reputable, independent source will suffice. Also, take a look at WP:CIT to learn how to properly format your citations. Whenever articles begin "The subject is an wwwww, and an xxxx, and a yyyy, and a zzzz, that's usually not a good thing. Pick one or two things which he is known for, and concentrate on them. If there are other things he is involved in, fine. But don't put them in the opening sentence. I like your use of negative information, in order to remain neutral (e.g. the WSJ article, even though it doesn't mention the subject). I think you have an article here, format the citations and let me know... I'll take another look at it then, and tell you if (any) changes need to be made. It's nice to see someone who wants to understand. Onel5969 (talk) 04:07, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 18:40:04, 26 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Tmforumorg

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Tmforumorg (talk) 18:40, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 20:30:29, 26 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Ktscurria

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I wrote earlier this month but never received an answer so assume my request was lost. My article was originally declined for "Unambiguous copyright infringement" (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Thomas_A._Nazario) for using information from the biography of the subject, Thomas Nazario. I had talked to Mr. Nazario before writing the article, asking for an interview, but he said everything he would have to say is on his web page, thus I used that information as the basis for what I wrote. Do I have to get his written permission for this, or do I need to rewrite the article.

You originally left me a message on January 24, but I was unable to respond as I've been out of town. Unfortunately, I have to leave again and won't be returning until 10 April. Can I get in touch with you about this at that time?Ktscurria (talk) 20:30, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ktscurria - Unfortunately, Wikipedia won't accept copyrighted material. If you want to get the owner's permission, the process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. But feel free to contact me when you are back. Onel5969 (talk) 04:12, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Discuss page you declined

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Hippo_Campus

Hi Onel5969. I wanted to talk to you about a page that I submitted for review, but let me give you some back story. I was watching Conan the other night on TBS and they had a band on that I thought sounded pretty good, and then I heard they were from Minnesota so I was curious to read some more of their back story. I found their page on Wikipedia which had been declined sometime last year because the reviewer didn't feel them notable enough and they didn't have enough sources. So I thought I'd give some young musicians a hand and did a bit of research on them, found some news articles talking about their appearance on Conan and their upcoming tour as well as their album which is for sale on Amazon. Of course they're no Alice in Chains, but I think they've made it far enough to merit a page on Wikipedia. Who knows, maybe someone else saw them the other night and will be wanting some more information too.

What changes do I need to make to get the page submitted? Thank you — Preceding unsigned comment added by Devilsbane (talk • contribs) 21:38, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Devilsbane - take a look at notability for musicians. I think this group is a case of WP:TOOSOON. If they had other stuff than their upcoming Conan appearance, they might be notable. Onel5969 (talk) 04:15, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for your reply Onel5969. They are currently on tour with the Mowgli's and have an EP that is for sale on 3rd party websites. Also, the Conan appearance is no longer upcoming, it happened last Tuesday. Included in the article are references to Conan's website (team coco) which announce them as the musical guest and includes a video of their performance. As I mentioned before, they are still very much up and coming but they have already been introduced to the national stage and I don't see why they wouldn't be deserving of a wiki page.

Gielgud list: new review

I see that you commented on the list of Gielgud's awards. You may wish to comment on this review of the list. -- Ssilvers (talk) 23:21, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Herbert G. MacPherson

Thank you for editing and accepting my new article Herbert G. MacPherson. It is my first submission to Wikipedia. You have assigned it a grade as "C-Class". If you have any specific recommendations for improving this article, I would be very happy to hear them. Thanks again for your help, Gnoggin11 (talk) 23:28, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Gnoggin11 - Congrats on your first article. Remember, the "class" of the article is not a reflection on the quality, but rather on the depth of the article. Take a look at the grading scale for an idea of what the different levels mean. It's very unusual for a beginner's article to be given a class which isn't a "stub" or "start" class. In my opinion (and another editor may feel differently) it was a high C article. It's not a question of "improvement" as much as it is going further in-depth. I hope this makes sense. Onel5969 (talk) 04:27, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

SAB

Thanks. As you suggested, I improved the citations to conform to by-hand standards; many of these are historical reports and government documents that do not fit the standard template, so manual entry communicated their educational content most clearly. Let me know if there are other areas that need to be improved. Wdahm (talk) 01:47, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 02:06:31, 27 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Will Swaim

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Hey there! Thanks for your feedback on Al Luster's bio. I'm an ex-academic (history) and a journalist with an interest in postwar pop culture. Luster was part of a couple of seminal arts groups that blew onto the comics scene and then seem to have been shut down during the Red Scare; I'm doing research and interviews on the subject, and figured I'd contribute to Wikipedia as I pick up new information. Hope that makes sense.

Following your review, I subsequently worked with another editor, made the changes he/she suggested, and all seemed good. I hit the "resubmit" button. Is that all I need to do for the moment?

Thanks, Will Swaim

Will Swaim (talk) 02:06, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Will Swaim (talk) 02:06, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Will Swaim - Hi and welcome to Wikipedia. Yes, that's all you need to do. We're a bit backlogged, so it might take a bit to get your article reviewed. Be patient. Onel5969 (talk) 13:10, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Veerapandiya Kattabomman (film)

Can you do a c/e on this film? This is my next planned GA. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 09:19, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Sure Ssven2, it will take me a few days. Onel5969 (talk) 13:11, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ssven2 -  Done

Thanks again. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 05:52, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Article Submission

Hello I submitted by article on 'Lon Safko' and it was rejected on 14 March due to non-verifiable references. I then improved the references an resubmitted my article for a re-review. However about 10 days have elapsed and this article hasn't be re-reviewed as yet. I will appreciate if you could let me know how much time is needed to re-review this article.

Ayazf (talk) 10:38, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ayazf - we're a bit backlogged at the moment. However, we don't have any articles which have been waiting in the queue over 14 days. Onel5969 (talk) 13:24, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the help with Al Luster bio

Thanks for the assist on this. --ws — Preceding unsigned comment added by Will Swaim (talk • contribs) 14:40, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Will Swaim - I'm going to comment on the draft, so that other editors can see the work you do on the article. Onel5969 (talk) 01:37, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

A kitten for you!

Thank you!

Bjorklund21 (talk) 18:27, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Awaiting Article Approval

Hi, My first article/page on wikipedia has been on hold for over three months, would appreciate if you help in publishing it. It was last rejected by you due to copyright issue, have edited the article check and approve. If there is further editing require would request to properly guide what changes needs to be done. This article is about an Indian movie page and is long over due, movie is releasing in India and across the globe, hence need to publish the article at the earliest.

Thanks Link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Uppi_2 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gypsz13 (talk • contribs) 19:08, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Gypsz13 - I think you've met the notability requirement. There are still some issues with your article. I do a bit of work on Indian and Tamil films. Take a look at some of the articles which have been given GA status, or are going for GA status. A current one I'm working on is Veerapandiya Kattabomman (film). Take a look at its format and layout. Now, it has quite a bit more information than your article, but it will give you an idea of format/layout. Another thing are your citations. Again, take a look at that article, and you can see how they should be formatted. You should at least have information about its release and critical reception. Onel5969 (talk) 02:03, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

04:23:27, 28 March 2015 review of submission by Parthkhatri

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Parthkhatri (talk) 04:23, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Dear Reviewer,

we check other companies write up & then we put our article for publish .

we are not making any advertisement of company. just we share information to wikipedia users about our company & its achievement.

Kindly do needfull & also suggest us which content from our sandbox likes advertisement .

Cincinnati edit

Taft WAS from Cincinnati- I undid your WRONG edit Encyclopediaexperiencelover (talk) 13:46, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Encyclopediaexperiencelover - Hopefully you understand your mistake now. Thanks for being so pleasant. Onel5969 (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

19:54:59, 28 March 2015 review of submission by Merinsan

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Thank you for your review and guidance. This being my first article, I hurriedly submitted the article thinking that references could be added later. Now I have provided adequate references as you have instructed and hope this would suffice for you to re-review and accept the article. Thanks again. Merinsan (talk) 19:54, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Merinsan - Hi. Yeah, references are sort of important. I see you resubmitted and it was declined for an neutrality issue. Nice job getting rid of the non-neutral issues. Moved it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 13:18, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi, could you please check this article. This user Ncmvocalist is removing bulk contents from the article without fair and proper justification. Could you please do the needful and help stop this user from repeatedly removing whole or bulk of the article. Merinsan (talk) 14:18, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Need suggestions for how to document submission for Wiki Page for Carla Norton

https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:ExecutivePowers/sandbox&action=edit&preload=Template%3AUser_sandbox%2Fpreload&editintro=Template%3AUser_sandbox&redlink=1

You rejected a submission for a Wiki entry for Carla Norton and indicated one of the reasons was the lack of documentation. Since some of Ms. Norton's accomplishment occurred before electronic records were common, I would like your suggestion on how to document certain facts. Ms. Norton's first book was #1 on the New York Times Best Seller list in 1989 but I have searched the Web extensively and can find no electronic documentation of the Times Bestseller list prior to the 1990's. Similarly Ms. Norton appeared on the Larry King Live television in the late 1980's but, while I have a VCR tape of the interview, no electronic documents of the guests on Mr. King's show in the time period exists. Of course, some documentation could probably be obtained by paying someone to search the microfilm records or the NY Times and by contacting a TV network and asking someone to search their records. But this seems somewhat old school and unrealistic. Can you provide some suggestions on how to document these types of accomplishments. ExecutivePowers (talk) 20:48, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi ExecutivePowers - sources do not have to be accessible on the web. But if you do use off-line sources, please make the citation as complete as possible. You can find out what needs to be included at WP:CIT. That's so editors can check out your sources. Sometimes it's necessary to go old school. I do a lot of editing on historical articles, and trust me, it can be very time consuming going through non-internet sources, but as Wikipedia tries to improve its content, you see it more and more. I belong to a newspaper on-line archive (unfortunately the New York Times isn't one of the papers), and I couldn't find a single story about her. I think you'll need to target more specific sources, lke the Times archive. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:33, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Dcw2003

Thank you so much for your help. You may re-message me if you have time, I tried to make the changes you suggested. I wanted to let you know I included chapter numbers simply because, the books pages were renumbered for many of the 22 editions, so a chapter number, when included with a page is very useful. The chapter text contents did not change. The page numbers frequently did.

If you have time, I would be thrilled if you would look at my submission again and let me know if you think it could be accepted.

Thanks again!!!

David Wasserman — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dcw2003 (talk • contribs) 20:54, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi David - Nice job on the re-write and corrections. I see another editor has already moved it to the mainspace. Congrats! Onel5969 (talk) 13:37, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 21:34:07, 28 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Will Swaim

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Will Swaim (talk) 21:34, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Will Swaim - I put my comments about the article on the draft. You'll need to improve the references in order to get it moved to the mainspace, in my opinion. Onel5969 (talk) 13:41, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

22:20:27, 28 March 2015 review of submission by Mekzholan

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Hi Onel5969, thank you for reviewing my article about the CometVisu. To show the notability I've added a few more citations like the papers from completely unrelated resarchers.

I also know about blog postings about the CometVisu but as those are in German (e.g. [8]) and don't really add relevant information for an encyclopedia I have choosen to leave them out...

Do you think I should resubmit the article now?

Mekzholan (talk) 22:20, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Mekzholan - It's better, but none of the articles appear to be in-depth coverage of the subject. If I reviewed it, I'd probably decline it again, but another editor might see it differently, so feel free to resubmit, and I'll let another editor comment. If you could find one or two solid articles from a reputable newspaper or magazine discussing the application, that would help a lot. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:49, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/H._C._Cardwell

Hi! Please help - I'm a complete newb. My page keeps showing a citation error - for a citation that was removed - because even though all the tags were correct, it kept showing a citation error! Really driving me nuts, and I'd appreciate your help. Thank you! PaulaHaug

Hi PaulaHaug, it seems that Howicus already popped by and made the correction. Congrats on the article! Onel5969 (talk) 04:18, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

09:01:53, 29 March 2015 review of submission by Reefswaggie

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Hi. I am requesting a re-review of my article on RT Wallen because I have re-written it. I have shortened it, made it less encyclopedic, fixed the references and made sure that all citations are from reliable secondary sources. I now think it is ready to resubmit but thought it best to ask you to have a look first. It is not a story now... just the facts and I have looked at other biographies and think mine is as well done as many published pages. I hope you agree. Reefswaggie (talk) 09:01, 29 March 2015 (UTC) Reefswaggie (talk) 09:01, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Reefswaggie - Definitely much better. Very nice job! Resubmit, and let me know, and I'll move it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 13:52, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 thanks! my first article... this is like giving birth :) hopefully, worth all the hard effort Reefswaggie (talk) 23:18, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 ok it has been resubmitted Reefswaggie (talk) 23:21, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Onel5969 when i looked at the article today it said it was an orphan so i started looking for articles to link to it. I went to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kennedy_Galleries and put in a sentence about the Alaskan Masters exhibit but when i tried to link R.T. Wallen there it came up brown as if the page does not exist... not sure what to do next so hoping you can help. Reefswaggie (talk) 04:33, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Reefswaggie - It's fixed. There's a space between the two initials. You can remove the orphan tag now. Oh, btw, when leaving a message on an editor's talk page, there's no need to "ping" them (like you have been doing to me in this thread). When someone writes on an editor's talk page, they are automatically "pinged", so it's a bit redundant. I "ping" you, so that you'll know I've responded. It'll just save you a little time. Happy editing! Onel5969 (talk) 13:57, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

09:03:56, 29 March 2015 review of submission by Reefswaggie

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sorry i forgot to put a link to my article: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:R.T._Skip_Wallen Reefswaggie (talk) 09:03, 29 March 2015 (UTC) Reefswaggie (talk) 09:03, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

In Largest Organisms, Pando (106-acres) is over 20x as large as the 5-acre tree referenced.

Article: Largest_organisms

Specifically mentioned (5 acres): Thimmamma Marrimanu

Much larger (106 acres): Pando (tree)

There's mention of the 5-acre tree having been awarded a Guinness World Record in '89, however Guinness is really just a commercial enterprise designed to sell entertainment. So I'm not sure that should be given too much merit in deciding content on Wikipedia? If only one of them will be referenced, I would think that the logical choice would be the larger tree, rather than the one that an entertainment company picked. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2602:304:CE0A:6940:0:0:0:49 (talk) 15:26, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

I have no issue with you adding it. Simply with your adding it without a citation. Onel5969 (talk) 19:52, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

18:58:12, 29 March 2015 review of submission by Sean M Jones

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Hi there, I have done what you suggested to improve the article on Barry Kerzin and just now resubmitted it, thanks again, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sean_M_Jones/sandbox#Barry_Kerzin Sean M Jones (talk) 18:58, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Sean M Jones (talk) 18:58, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Sean M Jones - no worries. Nice job. Moved it to the mainspace. Did a bit of MOS cleanup on it. There's a whacky issue with references 4 & 5. You've inserted files (pictures) into the reference sections. Those need to go away, and you should find a reference in a publication that you can cite in their place. Onel5969 (talk) 20:08, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello there, I have fixed the stupid image/file problem, it was OK while in the sandbox but I now see what it does in mainspace. Thanks for cleaning up, I saw you'd been through it improving various details. "MOS" means "My Own ...Sweat?" - could not decode it on disambigation/slang.

Now, how would you advise me to go about trying to upgrade the rating from C to B, specifically? Is there too much speculative blah-blah, too many references; or too many contentious comments, superfluous asides, irrelevant assertions, vague conjecture, . . . or what?

Thanks again for your encouragement!

Sean M Jones (talk) 14:33, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Sean M Jones - that image thing was weird. I went back to a version before I accepted it, and it was fine. MOS is the acronym for Manual of Style, which is a great resource. Regarding upgrading to B, best advice is to take a look at the different criteria with an objective eye, and then begin to work on each of those criteria. A good start is to clean up the format of the citations. You can find examples of those formats at WP:CIT. Good luck with it! Onel5969 (talk) 14:56, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

I saw that inserting some illustrations are good, so I uploaded this file to Wiki: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Barry_Kerzin_wearing_electrodes_on_his_cranium.jpg but when I tried to link it into the text, using the image icon and following the prompts, I just get the caption, in red letters, no image, what am I doing wrong?

And secondly, can't see what needs 'cleaning up' in the references, I followed the formats at WP:CIT as well as I could, can you be a bit more specific please? I'm on a learning curve here! Thanks, Sean M Jones (talk) 15:48, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

- I fixed the photo. Also saw you had a raw link in the article, and removed that, you shouldn't have those. I formatted the first reference for you to give you an example. You can check out other format examples at WP:CIT. For example, if there is an author, you should put that in the citation, as well as if there is a date (e.g., if the website is an online newsource, you'll need those). Onel5969 (talk) 17:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for fixing the photo. What was the raw link? I avoid them like the plague, and it might have been something showing because of a typo or format error. And thanks for the example reference format, I am following suit with the others, one by one. It will take me a day or two to get the hang and work through them. Sean M Jones (talk) 21:46, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

OK, never mind the raw link, I've revised everything and all those 40 refs are in the format you sugested now. What next to improve the article? Thanks again Sean M Jones (talk) 18:42, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Sean M Jones - Nice job on the references. One note... #29, either put the English translation of the title in place of the Russian, or put the English translation in parenthesis in addition to the Russian.

Now to the specifics about upgrading. Right now, you almost have #1 taken care of. But we'll get back to that later. #2 is where you are lacking. Right now, you focus on his career (which you definitely should have, to begin with), but completely ignore his life outside his career. You should have a section about his life before college, and then another section at the end called something like "Personal life", where you cover his marital status, children, where he lives, any outside activities, etc. Once you add those sections, you'll have to alter the lead section a bit, which should be a brief summary which outlines the rest of the article (for instance, I'd move the detail about his near-death experience to the new early life section - and that experience DEFINITELY needs a source - that's what I was speaking of regarding #1). As it stands you are okay with #3, except for needing to add the new sections. #4, #5, and #6 are fine. Hope this is understandable. Onel5969 (talk) 23:55, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Help editing DataXoom Corp

Hi there, sorry to be a pain, but this is my first time creating a page about a company.

I thought I had done a decent job of being neutral, and providing independent references. Obviously not good enough!

In my update, I have tried to be more neutral and to provide more reference points. I'd appreciate it if you could review again.

If you're still not comfortable with it, could you please be more specific as to the sentences you dislike and what the objection is.

If there is any doubt in your mind about the notability issue. Let me explain. MVNOs have been around for several years, and we may only seeing the tip of the iceberg... as mobile data growth continues, so will the opportunity for MVNOs. Out of the several thousand MVNOs in existence, DataXoom is the first and only to offer DATA ONLY to BUSINESS ONLY.... most MVNOs are voice and data to consumers and a handful are voice AND data to business (and) consumer. Data is eclipsing voice in volume and value. I predict years from now, Data Only MVNOs will be commonplace. This suggests that being the first to envision this, and create a company around it, is notable.

Obviously this is difficult to prove, without examining every competitive MVNO's business model... I have presented independent references making this "first / only" claim, that are in the pen of the writer, not just a reproduction of a DataXoom press release. In addition one should trust that a bonafide independent MVNO directory has does their homework before listing MVNOs. This directory requires no fees, and does not permit self-service submissions. Please note how this MVNO Directory calls out DataXoom as being unique... in the opening paragraph about the Business MVNO category. http://www.bestmvno.com/business-mvnos.html and a blog about DataXoom repeating this assertion: http://www.bestmvno.com/dataxoom-mvno-providing-data-business/ Other Not-so-unique MVNOs are listed in Wikipedia.

My thanks in advance.

Mark Cowtan — Preceding unsigned comment added by Markcowtan (talk • contribs) 20:15, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Markcowtan - nice job on the edit. Most of the article no longer reads like an advert, but the "Products & Services" is still highly promotional. You've already described what they do, this section is purely advertising for the company. Also, take a look at MOS:LAYOUT on how to break an article into sections. I'll correct your first section to give you an example. I'll also do some other edits as examples of proper format, and then you can fix the rest. You know what improve the article? If you have citations which can document what you say above, in the paragraph about how long they've been around, and how they've grown, and what their expected growth, that would add to the article. Get rid of the external links which are references, that's redundant. And I would definitely expand your article slightly with a line or two regarding their deal with AT&T, and then use that external link as a references. External links are for links to external sources (unlike wikilinks which go to other wiki pages, and go in the "See also" section - which you've done), which aren't references, but rather other information about the subject which might be of interest to a reader. For example, most film articles have an external link section, and then offer links to the film's imdb.com, tcm.com pages. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:25, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Dcw2003

Thank you so much for your help!!

Is it allowable to remove the piece at the top of the source that includes the warning that the article may not conform to the encyclopedic style required of Wikipedia articles? I am concerned this may cause people to target the article for changes, that may not be warranted, or that it may reduce the perceived veracity of the article in some way.

I may want to add a few short articles on other boxers who Hollandersky boxed that no wikipage exists for. Do you think this would be acceptable?

Anyway thank-you for your help. Do you know how I can contribute to wiki financially? I don't often see a request for contributions, though I have given previously.

Thank you again for your kind words, and you help.

David Wasserman — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dcw2003 (talk • contribs) 20:49, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Dcw2003 - No problem. Pleasure to work with someone who makes an effort to improve the site, and understand how to correctly write an article. No, you shouldn't remove that label, unless you do some more extensive work on the article. Take a look at the link the tag offers, and then make improvements. After that, yes, you can remove it. Remember, no one "owns" an article, other editors have the right to make changes. If you feel a change is unwarranted, you can revert, but be aware of edit-warring and the WP:3RR rule. One of the keys to Wikipedia is to have folks who may not know how to write an article write about a subject they know about (like your article). Then other editors can contribute to article and bring it into shape. I hope this makes sense.

Regarding contributing to Wikipedia, on the left side of your page, the 5th link down is a link to donate. Happy editing! Onel5969 (talk) 13:33, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Alfredo Olivas once more!

Hi! I'm not sure if you'll be reviewing the Olivas article again or not (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Alfredo_Olivas) I did further research on the song charts, and found that he has appeared in the top 40 Latin/Regional charts (Billboard) and the top 100 Latin albums on iTunes. He wrote a song for another band which reached a peak of #13 on the Mexican airplay charts. Do these points help his cause? Thank you thank you thank you.... — Preceding unsigned comment added by Merise (talk • contribs) 21:13, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

It absolutely matters, Merise - That's one of the clear criteria for notability as per WP:NMUSIC. I've moved it to the mainspace. Still needs some work, particularly formatting the references. But congrats! Onel5969 (talk) 13:45, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Feezos

Hello,

About 3 days ago you gave me feedback on my article and you approved my edits and you were very helpful with my citations and the tone of the article. I resubmitted it after those corrections, but now another editor has rejected it. Is this a process that editor after editor reviews it? Thanks for any info you can give me!

Feezos (talk) 02:23, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Feezos - Yes, once you resubmit, it goes back in the queue, and another editor may take a look at it. In fact, I usually try not to re-review the same article again. A different set of eyes is usually not a bad thing. Sometimes, when I'm actively working with an editor, I'll re-review, but usually it's another editor. You might speak with the other editor and find out exactly what they feel is promotional. Don't argue with them, simply ask for guidance, like you did with me. After you do another edit, let me know when you resubmit it, and I'll take another look at it for you. Above all else, DON'T GET DISCOURAGED. This is a learning process. I like the way your article is going. Onel5969 (talk) 15:07, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Re https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Satwant_Singh_Dhaliwal

Please let me know if the changes are okay, or if more changes are needed, and if so, which parts need to be changed from what to what. Thank you. jefferyseow (talk) 06:40, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Jefferyseow - I've commented at the draft, so you have all the comments together. Take a look at what the other editors have to say, they give some very good insight. Onel5969 (talk) 15:17, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello Onel5969 I have made all the changes I could make. I have removed Brief Bio and Resume and all info related to those sources. Please let me know what else is wrong with the entry now, or if you will approve it in its revised state. Thank you. jefferyseow (talk) 04:05, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Jefferyseow - See Fiddle's comments on the draft. He pretty much sums up what I feel the issues are as well. Will make my comment there as well, again, so they will all be together. Onel5969 (talk) 14:07, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

rejection of my article Perseverative cognition

Hello, thank you for your review of my draft article on perseverative cognition. I read that it was declined due to copyright issues, but I don't really understand what the issues are. So would you please elaborate on these issues? I am citing some scientific publications, but I do cite my sources so personally I don't see how there could be copyright issues there. Thank you very much for your reply. Wikimoort (talk) 10:19, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Wikimoort Articles on Wikipedia cannot contain information which is copyrighted somewhere else. Since the article has already been deleted, I can't go back and reconstruct what occurred, but that means that the majority of the article was simply cut and paste from an underlying source. Articles have to be in your own words. Onel5969 (talk) 15:32, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969. I wrote an article based on several scientific publications, so there is bound to be quite a bit of overlap between what I wrote and what they wrote. What would be the best way to write this 'in my own words'? Because I wrote it in the same way that I would write a scientific paper, and I wasn't aware that that would result in copyright issues on wikipedia. Also I wrote this article on behalf of one of my professors (who studies this subject extensively), so would it make any difference if he uploaded the article (because most of the papers are his, and he can't plagiarism himself right?). Thanks in advance! (Wikimoort (talk) 08:04, 31 March 2015 (UTC))

Hi Wikimoort - There is a process for donating copyrighted material, which can be found HERE. And he can't write the article and then use his own research, for that would violate Wikipedia's no original research rule. Wikipedia is not a scientific journal, it strives to be an encyclopedia, which means that we have articles on notable subjects, which are referenced by reliable sources. Articles have to be written in your own words. Copyright issues don't come up because you use the same terms, but because you use substantially identical language. Sometimes, we'll get a copyright report, and when we take an in-depth look at it, it's due to significant use of normal terms (for a brief example, if the article is about a murder, the article may talk about "District Attorney" "seeking the death penalty", "trial starts" etc.) That's okay that those individual terms appear in both is not a copyright violation. However, if the source says, "The District Attorney is seeking the death penalty, with the trial starting on next Wednesday", and the article says "The District Attorney is seeking the death penalty, with the trial scheduled to start on a Wednesday". That's plagiarism. Hope this makes sense.Onel5969 (talk) 14:19, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 11:16:22, 30 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by David Herrera 1985

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Hi Onel5969, thank you for reviewing my submission on Nemea Bank. On March 22, I received a review from Worldbruce that my submission included copyright material, and I was preparing a request to submit copyrighted material for use by Wikipedia. At this stage I am not sure whether I should go ahead with donating the copyrighted material or rewriting large chunks of it from scratch. How should I proceed?

In your feedback, you stated that I should work on improving the article's neutrality. Is this problem in the text itself or in the references? For instance, I've noted you removed the opening sentence which stated: "Nemea Bank is a modern pan-European direct bank, providing banking and investment services to individuals, companies, institutions, public sector entities and high net worth individuals based in the 31 countries of the EU/EEA area. It is headquartered in St Julian’s, Malta", so that it now appears as "Nemea Bank is headquartered in St Julian's, Malta." On review I understand that the word "modern" is not neutral (it was taken from Nemea Bank's text which I was planning to submit to Wikipedia as approved copyright material), but am I requested to improve it further than that?

The feedback I received from you also stated that the article "should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources, not just to materials produced by the creator of the subject being discussed." I have submitted 21 references, 18 of which are independent, reliable, published sources. Should I remove the 3 references to articles created by Nemea Bank?

Thanks again for your guidance on these matters.David Herrera 1985 (talk) 11:16, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi David Herrera 1985 - The copyrighted material is so slight, I would simply re-write in your own words.

Regarding neutrality: tell us about the company, don't sell it to us. Avoid works like cheaper, faster, free, major, and avoid discussing cost reducing etc. The Products and services section is clearly promotional, as is the instant payment section.

Regarding sources... that's a canned response, because usually that's an issue. I don't see an issue with your sources. Keep in mind that there are two different kinds of sources: those to verify (the facts in the article), and those which establish notability. The first can come from virtually any reliable source (company websites, corporate bios, etc) and don't have to be independent. The second type need to be independent. You have both in your article, but, imho, you've established notability. Hope this all makes sense. Onel5969 (talk) 16:38, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Onel5969, thanks for your feedback. I'll get to work on it straight away and inform you once I resubmit.

Hi Onel5969, I have just modified large parts of the Nemea Bank article to ensure that article falls under neutral point of view guidelines and removed the section "Nemea Instant Payment" since it is sufficiently referenced in the introduction and products and services section and, as you stated, the section by itself would have looked a bit like advertising. I also have one quick question which you might be able to help me with: whenever I submit the article, somehow I find the categories section directly above the list of references. Is there something I am doing wrong? Please excuse me if I am interrupting your direct line of responsibility. I would appreciate your review of the text of the article. David Herrera 1985 (User talk:David Herrera 1985) 16:12, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

AnkaIva

HI,

My name is AnkaIva. I just re-submitted a draft and made corrections as you suggested.

I included more articles about Bjorn Lefnaer.

Also, I included VOX seris episode about him. May I please ask why you said that VOX reference was not reliable? Its a TV series that were made about Lefnaer in Germany. It was broadcast on National TV.

Thank you very much. I hope this draft was better than before. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ankaiva (talk • contribs) 12:18, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Ankaiva - Vox isn't considered a reliable source due a consensus on Wikipedia. The IEN source is a nice source, but, since it's an interview, it's a primary source, and for notability purposes, Wikipedia requires secondary sources. The AB citations are press releases, again not good for notability purposes, since it is not independent, same issue with the logismarket. The Upak is a simple mention. Also, be aware that there is no inherited notability. Most of these sources are actually better for the company, rather than for this individual. Right now, I don't see a good case for notability. I hope this makes sense. Take a look at WP:GNG and WP:BIO for a better understanding of the type of references which help establish notability. Onel5969 (talk) 16:53, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

BJORN LEFNAER DRAFT RE-SUBMITTED

Hi My name is AnkaIva.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Bjorn_Gunnar_Lefnaer

I included more articles about Bjorn Lefnaer.

Also, I included VOX seris episode about him. May I please ask why you said that VOX reference was not reliable? Its a TV series that were made about Lefnaer in Germany. It was broadcast on National TV.

Thank you very much. I hope this draft was better than before.

Revert on M4 Sherman

Hello, can you please revert your recent edit? It does not reflect whats actually written by Zaloga and could mislead casual readers. Thank you. 38.95.109.35 (talk) 13:38, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Excerpt: One of the Sherman's more controverisal features was the use of a one-axis gyrostabilizer. This was not precise enough to permit the Sherman to fire on move but rather helped the gunner keep the reticle on-target during movement, so that when the tank stopped to fire, the gun would alredy roughy aimed in the right direction.

Hi - thanks for the information. I won't revert, however, because your edit was in much more technical language, and would be even more confusing to a casual reader. I'll edit it, and you take a look later today and let me know what you think. Onel5969 (talk) 13:50, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for the quick response and reaction to the subject. You made a valuable rework, I'm fine with it. Regards 38.95.109.35 (talk) 14:07, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Unsigned section on unknown article

Dear Mr. Editor,

I would like to mail you a much better version of this text which has been revised by me. I changed the structure and and edited new topic related to the environmental scope. Could you please tell the most suitable way for you to revise the text and tell me your opinio before I submit it forn a final editing. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 158.169.150.5 (talk) 17:26, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Willard Ice Biography

Hello,

Last month I submitted a thoroughly researched biography of a man named Willard Ice. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Willard_Ice

In the state of Illinois and in our state capital of Springfield, he made a significant political impact during his lifetime. The research that I conducted made that fact quite clear. However, within two weeks of submission, you rejected my entry claiming that my citations weren't legitimate and that Willard Ice was not a noteworthy figure in history. Your baseless conclusions have only led me to believe that you didn't investigate my citations or read my submission.

In the last week, The Willard Ice biography has been published by The Sangamon County Historical Society as well as the State Journal Register. I would expect that should be enough to convince you that I have not manufactured the existence of Willard Ice and that reputable academics agree that he is, indeed, a "notable" historical figure.

For a website that has published articles such as "Lists of Lists of Lists" and "Post Ejaculatory Guilt Syndrome" it's surprising to me that a well written, well researched submission about a man who is held in high esteem in the state of Illinois wouldn't be deemed acceptable. I suppose that I shouldn’t have been surprised, however, considering that Wikipedia articles are not permitted to be used as sources of information by any college or university professor, whereas websites such as SangamonLink and The State Journal Register would be readily accepted by the same such people.

Each year I donate to the Wikipedia Foundation because I believe that everyone should have access to a free education, but I'm afraid that The Wikipedia Project has a long way to go before it will be considered a reliable and respected source of academic information. Maybe if you focused more on substance rather than flash and shock value, the reputation of this website would improve.

Thank you for your time,

Shainraley (talk) 17:37, 30 March 2015 (UTC)Shain K. Raley

Shainraley - That's actually not what I said. The decline template (it's a canned response), states, "This submission's references do not adequately show the subject's notability". Not that citations weren't legitimate, nor that the figure wasn't notable. Simply that, as written, the citations didn't support the subject's notability. It then gave you links if you wanted to learn what type of references are needed to show a subject's notability. I'm gathering from your message above that you didn't take a look at those links. When your article was declined it had 4 sources, the most used one being the subject's memoir. There are two types of citations, those for verifying facts in the article, and those for establishing notability. Notability references need to be from secondary, independent and reliable sources. They also need to show that the subject received substantial coverage. The memoirs are not valid for notability purposes, as they are primary sources. Likewise, obituaries are not notable, since almost everyone gets one. Your other two articles, one about his death, and another about a particular single instance in his life would hardly qualify as substantial coverage. By the way, you also might want to take a look at WP:CIVIL. Good luck with the article. Onel5969 (talk) 20:49, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Article for Band Filmography/Videography

Hello, I saw you recent approval for Got7 videography AfC. Similar article is currently proposed for deletion. Although the article probably have some issues, I don't think the article should be deleted. I'm willing to work on the article but I don't know how to create a good videography or filmography and if possible, I would like you to have your advise on below questions:

1. What are the different between filmography and videography?
2. What is the criteria for a band to have the a stand alone article for filmography/videography?
3. What kind of information should or shouldn't be included in filmography/videography?
4. In the case where band member don't have individual article, can we included their filmography on the band's filmography?
5. Are all TV appearance need to be source? Can the source be the appearance video itself?
6. Can you suggest any good article for filmography or videography that I can used for reference?

Sorry I have so many questions, I have read the policy but still got confused. Please refer me to the correct place to ask if this is bothering you. Thank you so much :) Sonflower0210 (talk) 22:14, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Sonflower0210 - I think Peachywink nails it on the head. It's all about the references. But I'll try to answer your questions:

1. Almost nothing. One is a list of films, the other is a list of videos.
2. Look at Peachywink's comments, they are completely on-target.
3. Well, if it's a filmography/videography of Apink, it should only include films or videos of Apink, when it's simply a member of Apink in something, that doesn't belong in the article.
4. You shouldn't. Notability has to be stand-alone.
5. Two things, not every TV appearance is notable. And if it was notable (e.g. they were selected as one of the groups to perform at the 84th Academy Awards), it should be VERY easy to source. So yeah, source it.
6. I'm not an expert on this, but U2's is decent. You'll notice even a band of their significance doesn't have their own "filmography/videography", rather it embodies all their creative efforts.

Sometimes "list" articles do not need a lot of references, for example, when the underlying subject is so well (e.g. Richard Burton), you can simply list a single reference which includes all of his films. And the U2 article is a good example of what does and doesn't need sourcing. Don't get me wrong, I feel there are issues with the Got7 list. In fact, I just added a tag I should have added when I approved it. I also don't feel that it should include the individual members' performances. Look at the U2 page... it doesn't have Bono's performances, only the entire band. And never apologize for asking a question. If folks are polite, they will almost always get answered.Onel5969 (talk) 00:07, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

thank you for drawing my attention to that problem. First page I ever made so I still have somethings to learn and I will get on top of fixing it.Peachywink (talk) 02:17, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

• Thank you for answering my questions. I still have some questions if you don't mind.

1. Do you have any suggestion how can I prevent the article from being deleted? Apink are far more notable and have more notable filmography than Got7 so I think their page should stay with additional reference. As I've said on the discussion, I'm willing to work the content and include any reference needed.
2. Also where can we put notable individual filmography when the member's don't have individual page? Can we put it on the main page?
3. If we put internal link to the wiki page of the show, do we still need to repeat the citation? Since on the show page there are already information about the cast?
4. I'm a bit confuse about what can we put on list. Because I saw this policy WP:LISTN - "The entirety of the list does not need to be documented in sources for notability, only that the grouping or set in general has been. Because the group or set is notable, the individual items in the list do not need to be independently notable". My understanding from this is that because the group is notable, the content don't need to be independently notable. For example is TV Show Episodes list like List_of_X-Man_episodes and List_of_Criminal_Minds_episodes that include all the episodes not only notable one. Thanks a lot :) Sonflower0210 (talk) 02:27, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

I'll try to answer to the best of my ability:

1. Sorry, not really. AfD's are based on consensus, which is different than majority rule. All you can do is say that you will work on the article, and ask the other editors to give you time (say a week) to do that. It might help for you to "ping" the other editors. You can do that using either the @Sonflower0210: or Sonflower0210 templates. That way, it will bring their attention back to the discussion, and they might voice a new opinion to allow you the time you've requested.
2. In my opinion, nowhere. If the individual member is notable enough on their own, than their appearances certainly aren't.
3. And that's correct. When a group shows notability over a 20-40 year span, they need much less citation standard than does a group who's been around for 5 years. X-Man is pretty much known world-wide, Criminal Minds is seen by hundreds of millions of people each week. This group is pretty much unknown outside a very particular fan base. And here's where the difference comes in. 30 years ago, there was this music group in the US. Probably had 10 top 10 hits that year. If you were writing an article about them in 1985, all you'd have to do is say their name and everyone would know who you were talking about. Today, it would take me fifteen minutes to explain who they were and what their significance is. Your group is so new, that they really need to be well-cited. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 03:26, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

I never know X-man that popular, this is South Korean Variety Show "X-Man" right? or Do you refer to the movies because it's different thing? XD. Anyway, Thanks for the advise. Really appreciated it. Sonflower0210 (talk) 03:45, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

23:25:13, 30 March 2015 review of submission by 76.21.41.198

• 76.21.41.198 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Icon Ventures (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

This was my first whole article, and I based it on the existing articles in the venture capital category that have no flags associated with them. To the best of my ability, every statement is sourced from a notable publication, and I do not see any statements that would constitute an advertisement. There are other articles in this category that definitely look like ads (e.g "Blah Blah is a visionary company").

I would love to know how to change this article to avoid "advertisement" in order to resubmit.

Thanks

76.21.41.198 (talk) 23:25, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. Just because an article exists on Wikipedia does not mean it is necessarily a good model to base a new article on. It is often better to compare with existing recognised Wikipedia Good Articles. You can find a list of Good Articles about companies at Wikipedia:Good articles/Social sciences and society#Businesses & organizations. A Draft wouldn't need to be as long or detailed as these to be accepted, but they can still be good examples of how to structure and reference it.

Wikipedia is monitored by volunteers, so it's not unusual for an inappropriate article to slip through the cracks.

Basically, an article should tell us about the subject, it shouldn't try to sell us the subject. Avoid things like sections about "services/offerings", or "portfolio", which are purely promotional. Onel5969 (talk) 03:34, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Henry Green article

Hi - You rejected the initial draft of my article on Henry Green. I have done some work on it. If you have a chance to look at it again, I would appreciate it. You were right to reject it; I rushed to get it finished and it showed. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Henry_Green Buckmor54 (talk) 23:30, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Buckmor54 - nice job on the edit. Moved it to the mainspace. Congrats. Onel5969 (talk) 03:38, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

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01:47:12, 31 March 2015 review of submission by Assumption College Primary (ACP)

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Thank you so much again for your reply that is very helpful. I already cite my reference to my article and asking you for another review again. Assumption College Primary (ACP) (talk) 01:47, 31 March 2015 (UTC) Assumption College Primary (ACP) (talk) 01:47, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Satwant_Singh_Dhaliwal

I've already addressed all that in the re-write. It is already dull compred to what it was. The quotes have been put into notes instead etc etc. What more?

Tempe area code

When looking at Google Maps and clicking on businesses, it appears that most businesses in Tempe west and south of the I-10 Broadway Curve have 602 phone numbers instead of 480. Not sure where the exact lines are, but it does appear that there is a small section of Tempe that is in 602. ANDROS¹³³⁷_TALK 04:03, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Andros 1337 - I hear you. Not sure why that is, but I can't find a reference which shows that Tempe has any other area code than 480. Not sure what to do about this. Perhaps these were older business which were grandfathered in when they added the 480? Onel5969 (talk) 00:23, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

As far as I know, only mobile phones were grandfathered when 480 was added. I wonder why there are so many 602 numbers in that specific part of Tempe. ANDROS¹³³⁷_TALK 01:50, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

BitGold

Hi Onel5969,

You had reviewed a page I had created called https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:BitGold . I had feedback from yourself and Tokyogirl79. I had implemented the changes requested and She mentioned that if you would approve as well we can go to the main space.

My username is Apotichnyj.

Please and thank you very much for your time. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Apotichnyj (talk • contribs) 13:19, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Article update for re-submission.

Hi,

Am Akamad007. My article is written about a notable singer based out of Mumbai India. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Swaradheesh_Bharat_Mohan_Balvalli)

He has released multiple albums and his most recent album has been released by the Prime Minister of India(Mr. Modi). I have given links to the necessary videos and 1 news article covering this. I have also given links to various videos which capture his singing in various shows he has done in India and London.

What more information would you like to show his notability ? Should I add more news articles or more Blogs ?

Thanks & Regards Akash Deshpande — Preceding unsigned comment added by Akamad007 (talk • contribs) 16:20, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Akamad007 - YouTube is not a valid reference, being non-reliable. The Amazon citation merely shows the existence of the book, not its notability. And the last citation is an artist bio on a website, which is not an independent source. So you have zero references showing the notability of the subject. Onel5969 (talk) 00:27, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

16:28:47, 31 March 2015 review of submission by 157.130.31.226

• 157.130.31.226 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Talkspace (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hello! Thank you for taking the time to review and assist with my submission regarding Talkspace. I wanted to ask you if you could please let me know what sorts of things stuck out to you that made my submission read more like advertising than an encyclopedia entry. I understand that it is difficult to define, but as I make edits and change my article I would really like some insights and tips into how I can make my entries more relevant and useful in an encyclopedia. Thank you so much for your help!

157.130.31.226 (talk) 16:28, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi - you seem to have figured it out. Have approved it for mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 00:30, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Henry Green

Thank you for approving my article on Henry Green. Buckmor54 (talk) 18:48, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Buckmor54 - No worries - nice job! Onel5969 (talk) 00:31, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

U.S. Air Force Scientific Advisory Board

This is Wdahm, asking about the article "U.S. Air Force Scientific Advisory Board" that I have been working on and that you have been helping to edit. Your last message indicated the article was accepted on 27 Mar, but it is now 31 Mar and I don't see the new article on Wikipedia, even after clearing cache, etc. Can you help me figure out what I am missing? Wdahm (talk) 20:38, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Wdahm - That message was directed to you by mistake. When you sent your message, you didn't create a new section (as you did this time). I was responding to the editor above you. I actually did not approve your article. I just did, however, and you have overcome the Copyvio issue, for which I originally declined it. David Biddulph has left you a message today regarding potential COI, and you need to be aware of that. That does not preclude you from writing an article, simply means you have to be aware of making uncited claims. You'll need to provide citations to each assertion, such as "The Board's function is solely advisory", and "In recognition of the Board’s consistent history of providing outstanding advice to the Air Force, in 2012 the Chief of Staff of the Air Force presented the Air Force Association’s Jimmy Doolittle Award for Advancing Air Force Research and Development to the SAB Chair on behalf of the entire Board". These are simply examples, you'll need to go through the entire article. As a former AF pilot, I look forward to your work on the article. Onel5969 (talk) 01:21, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Please would you join me

This discussion may save both an editor and a draft, one you and I have given a lot of input to. I think this draft can be saved. Fiddle Faddle 21:14, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks Fiddle - put my .02 cents in. Onel5969 (talk) 01:27, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

We tried. Fiddle Faddle 07:24, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

fyi, I have invited an editor renowned for stripping fluff and clutter out to grab this draft and shake it. We may yet get an article out of it. If that fails a valid approach is to accept it with a note to ask the community to knock it into shape. I have done that before with success. Fiddle Faddle 11:05, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Review of submission : Yasmina

Hello . Thanks for your review of my submission of article : Yasmina My username is Yasmina Fan I don't know how to make the citation in English if the source website is completely in Arabic , can you explain a way to do that ? Also I tried to write in a neutral tone and avoid all peacock terms. Almost every sentence I wrote is referenced , so the opinion is not mine, its from the reference website. So I don't really understand where is the error in my writing tone. Please explain and I will fix. Thanks. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yasmina Fan (talk • contribs) 21:54, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Yasmina Fan - First, simply translate the Arabic into English. Second, you need to not use her first name in the article, instead use her surname as per MOS. But frankly, she doesn't seem to meet the notability requirements. She's never had a national tour, never won a major award, and never won a major contest (sorry, but Arabs got talent is not a major music contest). Onel5969 (talk) 11:21, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Help Understanding the changes that need to be made

NeoLife1958 (talk) 02:47, 1 April 2015 (UTC) My page is https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Arthur_Furst. I don't understand what changes have to be made. I cited sources. I am making this wiki page on behalf of my company, GNLD International and most of the info is from a site we made for Arthur Furst: http://www.gnldcontent.com/ArthurFurst/index.htmlNeoLife1958 (talk) 02:47, 1 April 2015 (UTC)NeoLife1958

Hi NeoLife1958 - There are several major issues with your article. First, the one I declined it for, is that the article is drastically under-referenced. Time and again, you make assertions or statement without reference. For example, Early life is totally unreferenced. As is the Passions section (which should probably be completely deleted since it most likely falls under WP:TRIVIA). 1952 - unreferenced, 1954 - same. The list goes on and on. Second, you have a large WP:NPOV issue. Get rid of all the WP:PEACOCK terms like: tragically, genius for the sciences, revolutionary, beloved; report on facts don't paint a flowery picture. Third, you have a formatting issue. Please see the Manual of Style and the Layout guide to show you how to structure your article, and how to format the layout. Fifth, the publications section needs to be virtually deleted. You should have a brief mention (like you do in the lead) that he's been published frequently, and list perhaps 4-5 of his most notable articles, then reference the section with a citation which shows a list of his publications. Finally, you need to format, and more completely fill out your citations. All the articles need their authors and page numbers, for example. You can find templates at WP:CIT.

One last thing, I've added a potential conflict of interest tag to the article. You have a close association with the subject, and editors should know that. Doesn't mean you can't write the article, but does mean that you have to be careful about presenting a neutral point of view. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 11:43, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Tricot

Hi, just wondering what more I should do with Draft:Tricot (band). As far as I can tell the article satisfies criteria 1, 2 and 4 of the notability guidelines. Could you explain why it doesn't satisfy any of these? Pwrong (talk) 02:53, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Chrisnb

Hi Onel5969. I reviewed this article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Disinfect_(band). Should show the validity of the sources.

Hi Chrisnb - I responded on the draft page. Hope it makes sense. Onel5969 (talk) 11:53, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

14:56:16, 1 April 2015 review of submission by Bichetteln

• Bichetteln (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Yann Benoist (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Bichetteln (talk) 14:56, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Hello,

i added new documents on the page : one on ( Reference ) , one "offical website" on (External links) and sources from Wikipedia on (See also )

am i on the good way ??????

Bichetteln (talk) 14:56, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Reverted in Good Faith

Hi there,

Just noticed you reverted an edit of mine on a list of learning management systems. What are the parameters for adding new LMS's? The one I added seemed to fit in well and I was going to add more before I noticed your edit.

Warm regards, Jimmy

JMelons (talk) 15:06, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

JAM Paper & Envelope's Notability

Hello Onel5969,

A couple months ago you declined my article for "JAM Paper & Envelope". I'm wondering, was it close to being accepted? I thought I referenced a good amount of legitimate sources. Is there a certain type of source I would need that would push my article to be accepted? Do I need a company profile from a big news source?

Thanks, Vargarnar (talk) 16:09, 1 April 2015 (UTC)Vargarnar