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Benet Academy[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to eventually nominate it for FA. This article has already had a peer review and recently passed GA. I would appreciate suggestions on how to make it more comprehensive and how to improve the prose.

Thanks, Benny the mascot (talk) 19:42, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

I am sorry this is taking me so long - will review in the next 24 hours. Sorry, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:02, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

No need to rush...I have other ways of keeping myself busy. :) Good luck on your FAC, by the way. Benny the mascot (talk) 03:15, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for being so understanding - this looks pretty good to me, so here are some mostly nit-picky suggestions for improvement.

  • One thing that is sometimes hard to do is to provide context to the reader about things the author is familiar with. I am fairly familiar with the Chicago area, but was not that sure where Lisle was. A brief description would help (x miles west of the Loop / downtown Chicago) or a map with a dot would help too.
  • I also was confused by mentions of the college, but no real resolution on what happened to it - it took me a little searching here, but I assume it is what is now known as Benedictine University in Lisle. The article mentions the university as the site of buildings The St. Procopius monks decided on March 12, 1900, to build a new college[20] on the site of present-day Benedictine University at the southwest corner of Maple and College Avenues.[12], and in terms of a scholarship at the academy, but I think it needs to explicitly say what happened to the college after the academy split. I realize that this article on the Academy, so it need not be a lot of detail, but some is needed.
  • The map is nice, but I am guessing the Census does not show buildings (only streets and water), so the source for those needs to be given explicitly - this will be checked at FAC.
    • I've already provided sourcing on the Commons page. Benny the mascot (talk) 01:42, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
  • The capitalization of College and Academy by themselves seems a bit odd, though it is done consistently as far as I can tell. The Wikipedia:MOS#Institutions says if it is the generic word (college, academy) by itself it should not be capitalized.
    • I fixed the ones I could find. Let me know if I missed any. Benny the mascot (talk) 01:42, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
  • The lead just seems sparse to me - especially the second and third paragraphs. My rule of thumb is to make sure every header is in the lead somehow - are Demographics and the Christmas Drive there?
    • I mentioned the Christmas Drive a little bit, but the Demographics section is already somewhat covered in the lead. ("Benet's average ACT test score has exceeded statewide and national averages, and more than 99 percent of students have gone on to college after graduation")
  • The language is decent but I noticed a few rough spots reading - I will try and come back and point some more out soon, here is one to start
    • Classes began on March 2, when Rev. Procopius Neuzil taught two remedial high school students in two small rooms at 704 Allport Street for four months. FOur months in one day? Wow that's concentrated teaching! Perhaps Classes began on March 2, and for the next four months Rev. Procopius Neuzil taught two remedial high school students in two small rooms at 704 Allport Street. would be better. I am also not sure students can be remedial - I thought classes were? Could be wrong
      • Sentence replaced with a small revision regarding the usage of "remedial". Benny the mascot (talk) 01:42, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:46, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback! Benny the mascot (talk) 01:42, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
More from Ruhrfisch

I will try to point out language that needs work here, as well as any other issues that I notice

  • Lead It was founded in 1887 as the all-boys St. Procopius College and Academy by Benedictine monks in Chicago, who also operated the St. Joseph Bohemian Orphanage, which along with St. Procopius later moved to Lisle, approximately 25 miles (40 km) west of Chicago.[6] Could this sentence be split into two? As it is now it is quite long and complex - I would start the new sentence after the word orphanage. Also could the year(s) for the move(s) to Lisle be added to provide context?
  • Capitalization of college? The orphanage closed in 1956 to make room for St. Procopius Academy, which then separated from the College in 1957. (In Internet Explorer you can search for a word and it highlights all the matching terms in yellow - might be worth checking caps on college and academy this way)
  • Tweak sentence Sacred Heart merged with St. Procopius Academy in 1967 on the St. Procopius campus to establish Benet Academy [on the St. Procopius campus].
  • Also, any idea where the name "Benet" came from? a ha - here it says Benet is an English form of Benedict
  • Unclear Benet's performing arts program stages multiple musicals ... I think it would be clearer to say Benet's performing arts program stages a musical annually... perhaps saying since when
  • Need to be consistent on names - in the text it is "Reverend John Nepomucene Jaeger of the Order of St. Benedict..." but the image caption is just "Abbot Nepomucene Jaeger" (no John). I also wonder since St John of Nepomuk is not well known in the US, if a link would be in order?
  • Suggested reoganization Reverend John Nepomucene Jaeger of the Order of St. Benedict was the pastor of the parish[.] , which served approximately 16,000 to 20,000 parishioners. Chicago at that time had the largest Czech population of any other city in the world outside of Prague and Vienna. Roughly 50,000 Czech immigrants were served by the three Czech parishes of Chicago, which included [16,000 to 20,000 parishioners at] St. Procopius.
  • The source says they were teaching high school classes then, so I would clarify that in Only a two-year [high school] program was offered at the time; the college offered its first four-year high school program in 1904.[9]
  • Might flow more smoothly as The first Bohemian abbot in the United States, Abbot Jaeger[, the first Bohemian abbot in the United States,] founded a Bohemian monastic community in 1894...
  • What does better atmosphere mean? The college and academy continued to grow in Chicago; in 1896 the Abbey bought the 104-acre (42 ha) Morris Neff farm in Lisle to gain more space and a better atmosphere.[9] Cleaner air than in the city?
  • Since I am assuming that the present Benedictine University still is on the site because they are the re-named St Procopius College, I think that needs to be made clearer in this: The St. Procopius monks decided on March 12, 1900, to build a new college[21] on the site of present-day Benedictine University at the southwest corner of Maple and College Avenues.[13]
  • OK I am stopping the rough spots here. I think this would benefit from a copy edit before FAC. There are a few other things I noticed:
  • What makes Remembering Lisle a reliable source? See WP:RS
  • The alt text for the mascot should desribe it as a bird, not a redwing (there might be those who think of the Detroit Redwings or even Red Wing Shoes

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 00:42, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your advice! I've fixed most of the issues you've brought up; I just need to get that copyedit completed. Benny the mascot (talk) 19:59, 27 March 2010 (UTC)

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Illinois[edit]

Dave Courvoisier[edit]

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Not notable. The only source that discusses him in some detail is Distinguished Women and Men in Nevada; all others mention him only in passing and at times explicitly call him a "local television personality". Nothing else found via Google News. Huon (talk) 00:41, 30 June 2015 (UTC)

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  • Delete and maybe draft/userfy if it helps the user but my searches found nothing particularly outstanding and significant here, here and here. The awards are probably regional at best so there's not much for universal notability there and there's also no target for moving elsewhere. SwisterTwister talk 06:37, 5 July 2015 (UTC)

City of Rockford Pipe Band[edit]

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This is a well-written article, but there doesn't seem to be enough coverage to actually meet the criteria for notability. Ostrichyearning (talk) 15:40, 23 June 2015 (UTC)

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JoyFocus[edit]

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I'm not nominating this page for deletion. There is difference of opinion regarding notability of this page with me and Inks.LWC. I believe JoyFocus has sufficient coverage which proves the notability of the band while Inks.LWC is of the opinion that the band is not notable. Apart from the references mentioned in the page, I've mentioned many of the citations for JoyFocus on its talk page which satisfy WP:GNG. I think a wider consensus is needed for deciding whether the page should be deleted or not. Note: I have WP:COI with this page. Mr RD (talk) 15:43, 26 June 2015 (UTC)

  • Delete - Fails WP:GNG and WP:BAND; there is only one arguably reliable source that has covered the band , and the band fails the other notability criteria of WP:BAND. Inks.LWC (talk) 15:50, 26 June 2015 (UTC)
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Carol Margolis[edit]

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Non-notable person, fails WP:GNG. Joseph2302 (talk) 22:04, 18 June 2015 (UTC)

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  • Delete. Lacks reliable independent secondary sources that are actually about the subject needed to establish notability under WP:GNG. Offered are a link to the subject's book on Amazon, obviously unhelpful, and links to several articles where the subject is quoted. Those latter articles appear in reliable sources but being quoted, even by the NY Times, is unhelpful in the same way that an entire interview would be: It's primary, as explained at WP:Interviews#Notability. (The only difference between this and a full interview is there's less here.) To be secondary, the article can't just quote the subject, it has to talk about the subject, which none of these sources do. Msnicki (talk) 06:30, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
  • Delete - My searches (News, Books, browser, highbeam and thefreelibrary) found nothing aside from this and these seemed like someone else, not this Carol Margolis. SwisterTwister talk 05:31, 20 June 2015 (UTC)
  • Delete The sources tend to mention Margolis as just one of many people related to a subject.John Pack Lambert (talk) 05:00, 22 June 2015 (UTC)
  • Keep Notable expert quoted often on the subject of business travel for women, described as an expert, quoted at length in the NY Times, also here, and here, described as a travel guru here, quoted in USA Today, numerous references (additional ones currently in article) suggests she meets the WP:GNG.--Tomwsulcer (talk) 22:23, 22 June 2015 (UTC)
  • Weak keep - she's been quote in many reliable sources; whether it's significant coverage is a separate issue. Bearian (talk) 14:12, 25 June 2015 (UTC)
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