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Welcome to Wikipedia Cleanup. Please report messy articles below, and explain why it needs to be cleaned-up (ex., grammar, spelling, formatting, order, copyright issues, confusion, etc.). Any user can edit and fix any page. Please remove any entry from this page, that has already been cleaned, or if the "cleanup tag" has been removed from the page. Please feel of Wikipedia: Cleanup resources.
Anyone that wants to work on cleanup jobs, are asked to cleanup the articles on the bottom, which are the articles that have been here for the most time. Older cleanup: Category: Cleanup by month. Pages are archived by month, but are still in need of cleanup or de-listing if they have been polished.
Refer to Wikipedia: Cleanup process.
PLEASE USE THIS FORMAT: * [[The name of the document]] - Why the wiki needs to be fixed
FOR EXAMPLE:
- wikipedia - Copied from a different page, and the spelling is really bad.
When you want to make a new line you simply add a : in front of it.
FOR EXAMPLE: :* I cleaned it up a little, but it is still a little messy.
&
- wikipedia - Copied from a different page, and the spelling is really bad.
- I cleaned it up a little, but it is still a little messy.
Thanks!
March 2007
March 5, 2007=
- Praieira revolt - This article needs cleanup. Needs more context and details. It's badly in need of sourcing and a general reorginaziation of the info. It reads like a philisophical essay rather than an article and is light on any real meat. --Lendorien 00:57, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
March 4, 2007
- Mario Chanes de Armas - Was originally posted by a known anti-Castro agitator and frequent defamer of current Cuban regime - I keep having to change back "dictator" to "president" - also poorly composed and uses very one-sided source-material
- Precompiled header - Needs a grammar check, I would clean it up now, but it's a bit early in the morning for me. --Roguelazer 09:03, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- I cleaned up the grammar, but the page still needs a C++ expert's attention. ObtuseAngle 15:52, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- Thai_lunar_calendar - Has a lot of confusing formatting.
- Jamie Sweeney - Article is messy, cleaned it up a bit but needs more work.
- Sathya Sai Baba movement - Possibly many problems with the article. The only serious contributor to the article (user:Andries) is or will be banned by the Wikipedia:arbitration committee. See talk:Sathya Sai Baba movement for a description of the possible problems. Andries 19:43, 4 March 2007 (UTC)
- Animal cell article: needs more info, I was looking up information for my science test tomorrow and there was only the definitions of the three main parts of the cell.
- Much more information can be found at human cells. --Andries 19:28, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- Ranger's Apprentice - Requires checking of detail, an info bar, a table of contents, locations, cleanup of messy character section, and better summary of the books.
- Biotechnology - Needs a cleanup of the formatting and on the info. It is currently too messy and hard to retrieve information from...
- Jarboe - Has too few references to other pages and discography needs a major cleanup, in compliance to the standard way of mentioning a huge list of albums.
- Europa-Park - Added the Infobox, but will not format properly. Can somebody take a look and help out? Also the article is in need of some general reformatting to make it easier to read. Poeloq 21:56, 4 March 2007 (UTC)
- Paleo-Paganism - One-sided information on a concept that seems redundant and invented by a single author and lacking academic consensus. The originator of the article resists any editing or labelling, as shown in the Talk page. See also Meso-Paganism. --jofframes 22:52, 4 March 2007 (UTC)
- Viva Piñata (TV series) - Badly written, needs markup and source links. --treelo talk 18:33, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
March 3, 2007
- Nuestros Pequeños Hermanos & Fr. William B. Wasson & Friends of the Orphans - Need a thorough scrubbing.
- Lawn Dogs - The article lacks information such as movie plot, box office performance, actors/actresses, etc. It also contains a large and dominating amount of content in essay format, related to the philosophies of the movie.
- Pearlescent coatings - The article is a dead-end page; the page is not indexed; the references are not linked to anywhere.
- Panic! at the Disco - The article, which was meant to be on this project page, apparently wasn't added; so, I've updated the tag, and yes, it is in dire need of cleaning-up, what with all this POV statements, untruths, and whatnot being edited into the article. --Qwerty (talk) 14:32, 3 March 2007 (UTC)
- Morehead Scholarship - A part of the text seems to have been copied from the foundation website. - Mike Rosoft 20:06, 3 March 2007 (UTC)
- Universal Music Group - A lot of the information in this article is disorganized.
March 2, 2007
- I_Am_Furious_Yellow Last paragraph of Synopsis is incomprehensible. --Nog lorp 06:48, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Cleaned up now. ObtuseAngle 15:55, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- SS Standartenfuhrer Guenther Anhalt - Major revision! Wikified, checked accuracy, did some research. Need an expert: was this guy involved in the Wormhoudt massacre? He became a company commander in the involved battalion 18 days before the massacre. Fifth Rider 22:25, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Valmontone - it's in Italian! --AW 17:25, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Castellabate - appears to be a Google translation from Italian --AW 17:25, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Ruthenium (II) tris (bathophenantroline disulfonate) Can someone translate this into something approaching English? Jackiespeel 16:42, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- The introduction to this article provides insufficient context for those unfamiliar with the subject matter. (Rjgodoy 14:34, 3 March 2007 (UTC))
- Vundavalli Aruna Kumar - Article has poor grammar and is not understandable in parts. -- Whereizben - Chat with me 15:44, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Killer_application #Selected applications for gaming consoles - The list is too large and many of the games are not noteworthy enough. The list is also too opinion based. -- Zomic_13 15:59, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Ross-on-Wye - Just needs a little polish, after the merge with Plague Cross left some doubled information. The formatting is also a bit off and the article needs expanding. Finally, the links appear to include an advert for GB Sports Jddriessen 23:21, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- Priszm -
article has bad grammar--Coolspot 00:05, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
March 1, 2007
- Backcombing - some length would be nice, maybe more detail too --Ricefountian 23:05, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Ankur Group - needs Wikifying from what looks like computer-magazine-ese. Jackiespeel 15:29, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Nuclear_Assault -
Spacing, punctuation and caps copy editing needed.Erockrph 14:00, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
February 2007
February 28, 2007
- Pierre Trudeau - This article has a whole number of problems. Firstly none of the words make any sense - all mispelled (possibly vandalism)It is also lined with the text OUR FIGUREHEAD IS NOT WHAT SHE SEESM!!!!!!(UTC)
- The Bad Girls Club - Copyediting needed to fix grammatical and syntax errors. Overall organization needed. 24.22.210.14 19:10, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
- Jauhar - This article seems to have been patched together from other Wikipedia material and original work from a non-native English speaker. Even if the grammatical errors were fixed, this article could still probably stand to be completely rewritten, referenced, and generally wikified. - Lukeonia1 09:10, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
- Fictional technology - This has a bit of editorializing about 19th c. England and 20th c. USA being "dominated by a military-industrial complex." The speculations about why specific technologies may not be appropriate technology are interesting but could stand to be reworded. --Kris Schnee 11:45, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
- Afzalsho Shodiev - Says that he is a "popular Tajik singer" - more information needed. - Mike Rosoft 12:34, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
- Mars Hill Church - Read a little too informally and a little too much like an ad. Already did some cleanup, but could possibly use more. - raekwon 14:05, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
February 27, 2007
- Theodore Roosevelt, Jr. - Redundancy; awkward chronology; copyediting needed.
- Nautical tourism - Worthy topic, but needs a rewrite/expansion; unreferenced, not written in an encyclopedic style. - Mike Rosoft 11:14, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
- Tony Hutchinson - Bad grammar and lots of broken links. Samx 20:08, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
- Hello Summer, Goodbye Camp - Several capitalization errors, some run-on sentences and some spelling errors. Unnecessary use of parentheses. The plot is scene-by-scene. Squirepants101 22:23, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
- Lexical knowledge - Currently orphaned, cites no references, and in need of encyclopedic style. WillHarper 00:14, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
- Areski Belkacem - Directly translated from another language.
Terrible grammar, confusing sentences. Very poorly written.
February 26, 2007
- MonoDevelop - The article's text seems to be lifted directly off the MonoDevelop website. Someone who is familiar with the software should probably clean it up. (I left a message on the talk page weeks ago, but no one noticed. I'm not using MonoDevelop so I really don't know anything about it.)Ubuntu Dude 00:47, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
- Roman Catholic Diocese of Bergamo - Copying this from another article description below: "Numerous style, spelling and grammar issues; would benefit from a complete rewrite." Difficult to extract meaning from the many sentence fragments. This probably requires someone familiar with the subject in order to understand what's going on. -Cue the Strings 17:19, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
- Libertà condizionata - Same as above. Both articles were created by the same user, and are plagued with basic structural problems. Appears to be talking about the parole system in Italy - someone with knowledge of that would have an easier time cleaning this up. -Cue the Strings 17:23, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
February 24, 2007
- Zodiac Killer - The article is well written, but far too long and out of most reader's attention spans. It could also use more citations for its sources. -Ultima Designs 01:30, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
- Oyama, Tochigi - The article is written like an ad, especially with the latter sections (Oyama,_Tochigi#What_to_do_.26_see, Where to..., What to..., etc.). --Qwerty (talk) 04:09, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
- Hadad (Bible) Article has a Swedish entry, which appears unrelated, beneath the main entry.
- Up dharma Down - Article needs references cited and edited for a more NPOV. --Furrysaint 15:21, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
- WPYA - Poor formatting
- Sexy prime - very confusing, as there are several "as of" statements referring to different dates, yet all are written in the present tense. - Im.a.lumberjack 21:59, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
- Armenian Genocide - The references in this article are a mess. I could really use some help fixing them. AecisBrievenbus 23:00, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
February 23, 2007
- flOw - The article provide some information, but is a bit messy, it also need references
- Manager of managers fund -
*Very* long sentences and *very* high proportion of total words are manager/management:no dates context etc. Jackiespeel 21:21, 23 February 2007 (UTC) - Kanye_West - Section 1.4 (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kanye_West#2006) the citation link numbered 7 goes to a dead page at twincities.com. Watman 14:05, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
- Tom Monaghan - This article has a severe lack of references, and have some NPOV issues as well. --Kristjan Wager 13:09, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
- Adult Theater - Needs lots of cleanup, including fixing references etc Rtcoles 21:09, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
- Charlottesville High School - There is a lot of information, but not all encyclopedic. Requires an objective evaluation.
February 22, 2007
- Aviv Geffen This article contains a lot of information not relevant to an encyclopedia. Numerous style, spelling and grammar issues; would benefit from a complete rewrite.
- Rupert Lowe This article has a lot of information, but it is poorly structured. The tone is too conversational and there are numerous uncited POV assertions.+
- The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock - i put in a cleanup-remainder tag about halfway through the article. The first half of the article is good, but the second half needs a grammar, spelling, and style check, along with wikification. - Im.a.lumberjack 23:44, 22 February 2007 (UTC)
February 21, 2007
- Mariavite Church thorough/comprehensive but slightly POV/over-favourable. Jackiespeel 17:07, 21 February 2007 (UTC)
- Moapa Valley, Nevada#Moapa Valley High School Unsourced PoV abt (at least) athletes at n-n high school: review & consider trashing the whole section.Jerzy•t
February 20, 2007
- RMI-IIOP It assumes too much background knowledge. It has no general discussion about what this protocol is, what various forms it takes, what it's used for, it's history, etc. I already know a little bit about them and use them but came here to learn something more and went away without the info I was looking for. Dougher 04:27, 20 February 2007 (UTC)
- Web crawler - This page appears to have been purposefully defamed. AarrowOM 15:49, 20 February 2007
- Geophagy - The proposed merger with Geophagia would help, but the main problems with this article remain: screwy formatting and wikification, and an over-emphasis on cultural issues at the expense of medical content.
- Ramush Haradinaj has quite a lot of pov issues. The article reads like a glorification of his (removed quote from the article) "calming and authoritative presence", with perhaps a hint of myth-making. The article needs a lot of citations to boot. AecisBrievenbus 23:19, 20 February 2007 (UTC)
February 19, 2007
- Bettina Devin - Article reads like a Vanity page. It has a lot of POV and subjective comments in it and a non-ecyclopedic tone. May be copy vio of the artists own page. Its content and tone is definately vanity stuff. --Lendorien 00:26, 20 February 2007 (UTC)
February 18, 2007
- The Solids - Much of this article needs to be removed and some of it needs to be rewritten. Herzliyya 23:14, 18 February 2007 (UTC)
- Muv-Luv - This article is written in a very confusing way. The character information appears to be the central feature rather than the main story itself. Aparently, the information came from a japanese source, so it needs a cleanup to meet up the standards of an article written in english. Thank you, Minako-Chan* 14:37, 18 February 2007 (UTC)
February 17, 2007
- Hoodlums (Rayman) - someone recently added a load of information which is not found in game, and did not give a source. The additions are rather poorly written and have an informal tone (some of it is grammatically incorrect, too) RobbieG 21:29, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
- Rut_(mammalian_reproduction) - Article appears to be vandalized. Contains wildly inaccurate/unrelated (and poorly written), perhaps offensive content. More detailed, albeit unsourced, information has been removed.
- Shaba I - Article appears to include a lot of good information, but I can't make head or tail of it. It has been tagged for a short while. J Milburn 22:37, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
- Speaking of Animals - This entry needs to be transformed from the pdf document it was copied from (apparently with permission) into an actual Wikipedia entry. Headings would be a good start. Reformatting the presentation of the individual films would be another. Planetneutral 00:17, 18 February 2007 (UTC)
February 16, 2007
- Lieutenant Kijé - confusing grammar, lack of focus (article is unclear whether it's about the fictional character or the music associated with him)
- Virgin River Gorge - Article has little informative information, such as creation of the gorge, importance in regional transportation, history regarding Interstate 15 construction through the area, and has some grammar problems
- Triangular numbers - I see that TheFreeDictionary.com has also has the same definition on the site. I can't find any credit related to wikipediaChessmanlau 03:33, 17 February 2007 (UTC)chessmanlau
- The Hideout - Poorly written, seems more appropriate for a fansite than Wikipedia -- pb30<talk> 03:49, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
- Battlefield 2142 - The article is poorly written, having little research. If possible, i would like to rewrite the site as I like the game and would recommend others to play it Chessmanlau 03:38, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
February 15, 2007
- Jerzy Kosiński - Poorly written, unstructured, collection of quotes.
- Bloodless bullfighting - multiple cleanup issues, in particular it being competely unsourced. Tearlach 18:07, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- EA_Sports_F1_Series - Does not read like an encyclopedic article. Very poorly written: contains speculation and no citations. Some parts are so nonsensical, it's difficult to figure out what the author was trying to say. M0thr4 14:15, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Music of Namibia - Section mentioning Ras Sheehama needs cleanup. goldenband
- Manhasset Lacrosse - I just created this article and wanted to make sure that everything followed correct procedure Jdchamp31 03:36, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
February 14, 2007
- Zephyranthes - There appear to be mistakes in the coding as the page isn't displaying properly. Watman 12:14, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- All caps - Does not read like an encyclopedic article. Poorly written and contains speculation.
- Fourier optics - This is an important topic, but it has a description which is utterly confusing for the layman. Definately needs to be rewritten. Tagged for Confusing. --Lendorien 20:00, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
- Church of Scientology - WP:POV, non-sequitor writing style and half of the article unsourced. Confusing and disputed up to a grade of ludicrousness that WP:AfD might be a better solution. But let's try cleaning up first. Misou 04:51, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
February 13, 2007
- The Enemy Within (TOS episode) - Trivia section contained information from a non-canon source citing a possible explanation to a plot hole - while explaining these do require a certain degree of imagination, attempting to resolve the hole within the context of the plot should be confined to a seperate topic in the article. The trivia section should only contain information which is notable/interesting about the episode. Unknown if the article is now at an acceptable standard with this item removed.
- Cleaned up language in trivia section and cut trivia items to specific items relating to the article itself. Didn't look at the rest of it, but given the poor use of english in the trivia section, it may need a look over. --Lendorien 17:49, 13 February 2007 (UTC)
- Caveworld - Over wikid, no cats, no sources, + may be non-notable. --Lendorien 17:53, 13 February 2007 (UTC)
- de-wikid it, and tried to make it a little easier to read. However, there are still plenty of problems regarding professionalism. Forthnoggin 15:42, 18 February 2007 (UTC)
- Wham! - Needs grammar, punctuation, complete sentence help, as well as sources.
- Cleaned up grammar/punctuation/sentence structure, but the article needs thorough referencing.akronpow 20:10, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
February 12, 2007
- Photoconductivity Needs some slight reorganisation, references etc. Jackiespeel 18:18, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
- Lysine - Requires much reworking including sources/verification, conforming to wiki standards, etc.
- Alan Ralsky grammar, nonsensical ordering, no sectioning, may violate Wiki: BLP 170.252.11.11 19:59, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
- Drymarchon. Due to its being merged with the Indigo Snake page, this page is messy and filled with redundant information. An expert's touch is needed.--MARQUIS111 20:29, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
- Special:Linksearch/upload.wikimedia.org In articles: often incorrectly linked images. In other namespaces: generally no problem. - User:Docu
- Muscle fatigue - Stubby, unencyclopedic, and poorly reflective of current scientific knowledge. --Kajerm 22:24, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
February 11, 2007
- Casey Affleck -
Needs alot of work, wikifying, spell check, grammar check,source and information verification, etc. Im.a.lumberjack 23:18, 13 February 2007 (UTC)
February 10, 2007
- Parlour music - I'm not sure this should be cleaned instead of deleted, but it has a source. It's very hard to understand even for music-knowledgeable people, and seems to be one guy's opinion, who has a single line stub for an article. ♫ Melodia Chaconne ♫ 16:13, 10 February 2007 (UTC)
- Marques Houston - Poorly written in terms of the English, and just doesn't read like an encyclopedic article. First section looks like an overview, and just generally looks untidy. Also not inparticularly thorough and has some formatting issues. Also uses the term "sophomore" a lot which I think is outlawed by the Manual of Style (due to it not being used outside of the US and Canada). Esteffect 18:28, 10 February 2007 (UTC)
February 9, 2007
- Frank Stanford -
Article has no headingsand needs citations and references. -Cavykatie
- Headings have been added. Citations and references still need to be added, though. ChocoTenshi 01:03, 18 February 2007 (UTC)
February 8, 2007
- Broken Sky & Broken Sky Characters - Need to be a lot more thorough. - Unsigned user
February 6, 2007
- Dennis Gabor - article is disjoint, repetitious, and has a single multiply-referenced source. algocu 00:33, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
- General cleanup, and some new detail added. Still has multiply-referenced source though. Clicketyclack 18:25, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
- Koobox - borderline advert. - Mike Rosoft 09:20, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
- Trenton riots - Looks like the start of a good article. However, it needs help with organization, more background information and grammar. --SilverhandTalk 20:24, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
February 5, 2007
- List of members of the 110th United States Congress -
Table needs to be checked for accuracy in religious affliations. Many of them do not match the individual articles for each member. For example Ben Cardin was listed as Catholic when he is actually Jewish.Bentley4 15:31, 4 February 2007Senate is done. House list still needs to be checked. - Galactic North & Revelation Space - Both unfinished and need to be completed. Not all the stories in Galactic north are even in the article.
- Political communications - Requires expert attention. The information provided is currently of little or no use; I thought about cleaning up but I don't know enough to do so. Martpol 13:14, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
February 4, 2007
- Proton Pack - Article needs a good cleanup. As is currently written it is too fan-ish, it's flow and structure need improvement. Reverend Raven 03:01, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
- Encephalocele - Article was previously incorrect; I have corrected it, but it still may require cleanup/additional information. Thomasiscool 20:00, 4 February 2007 (UTC)
- Tumulus - Article has a lot of improperly referenced research on it that may or may not be legit. The structure could use some help as well. HelloAnnyong 15:18, 4 February 2007 (UTC)
- William Poole (American 19th cent. NYC bully or gangster) - Lead section is two graphics, the rest is a data dump of contemporary journalism.--Jerzy•t
February 3, 2007
- Inverted nipple - Article contains very juvenile language and is very poorly structured. Tinman8443 22:49, 3 February 2007 (UTC)
- Isadora Duncan - Article has a horrible format and is not in chronological order. Missy1234 23:53, 3 February 2007 (UTC)
February 2, 2007
- Gaia Online - Entry is very biased, and has been edited for malicious purposes.
- Religion and politics - First section does not belong: some of the other entries could be separated out as stubs or longer. Jackiespeel 14:59, 2 February 2007 (UTC)
February 1, 2007
- Iran - The article is very long. Confusing. Many parts of it have useless information. The history section goes too much into precision for present time and talks about current events (which are not suppose to be there). Need removing many paragraphs ans adding some. And user:Cyrus111 is making it even worst. It's a whole mess. --Arad 01:01, 2 February 2007 (UTC)
- New Zealand local body elections 2004 - has a list of the winner of one mayoral election, and one ward result, and the rest is a list of councils. - Kripto 22:57, 1 February 2007 (UTC)
- Sylvia Browne - Completely biased, no neutral POV. Disorganized. Looks like propaganda rather than an encyclopedia article.
- Scientology series information box links to doctrine are innaccessible, despite appearing blue. Also, obviously discussion page is frequently altered. Clearly, there will be possible legal implications they will pursue if you try to limit editing to registered users, but a separate page containing possible complaints about their general practice on wikipedia could be maintained, and I don't see how they could forward legal objections. - — Preceding unsigned comment added by 194.247.239.145 (talk • contribs) 20:11, 1 February 2007 (UTC)
January 2007
January 31, 2007
- Italian Job: Stunt Track - Article is very cluttered. Parts don't make sense. --Kirk06 21:48, 31 January 2007 (EST)
- Husky Rescue - Reads like an ad or a press release. It's not clear if the subject passes WP:MUSIC. AecisBrievenbus 13:43, 31 January 2007 (UTC)
- Mary Walton - Two different Mary Waltons are confused in this article. -- Picapica 22:02, 31 January 2007 (UTC)
- Conflict: Vietnam - I see it as an ad/commercial. Just like it's GameFaqs. --Pvt. Green 20:35, 31 January 2007 (EST)
January 30, 2007
- Health care in Canada - The article is very difficult to follow, with grammar errors all over the place. Also, the page suffers from numerous instances of suspicious phrasing, which may or may not be POV. An example of such is the phrase "simple economics dictates that doctors within the system benefit from a shortage of supply of doctors. Therefore the payment system to doctors benefits from a doctor shortage". Whether this is true or not, I cannot check; there is no source for the claim. King Zeal 06:54, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
- Garcia de Nodal expedition - Tagged for cleanup due to: run-on sentences; awkward wording; inconsistent capitalization; needs more references. --TRosenbaum 15:06, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
- Iberian Lynx - Tagged for cleanup and spell check. There are many spelling mistakes, grammatical errors and in some sections, poor style. There are no sources cited and I have found some subjective comments. This article deserves better. --Francisco Valverde 18:56, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
- Made effort to clean up language, remove POV statements and make more readable. It should be pretty good now. The sourcing issue remains, however. --Lendorien 17:32, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
January 29, 2007
- Vertigo Films - Needs clean up of titles (caps to italics), wikification, and verification that the text is not copied from the company's Web site. DocWatson42 12:12, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- OpenOffice.org Impress - Needs wikifying. Lots of unencyclopedic content. 87.127.73.65 15:18, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- Agreed. Removed the "tips" section, but more work is still needed. -Pete 00:04, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
- Readability test - no structure, needs to be wikified. Tygartl1 18:16, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- Corey Brewer - There are two different basketball players of the same name, one playing in College Basketball and the other professionally in Europe, and the page confuses the two. I do not know how to create a disambiguation page or to create the two pages.--Basquetteur 21:32, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- eminent domain - This will require a lot of work. Some issues listed in "talk" page, including general wikification, better citation, restructuring, and reduction of legalistic jargon. -Pete 23:56, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
January 28, 2007
- Battle_of_Khalkhin_Gol - Needs some spellcheck and structure changes where appropriate. --Winsettz 03:48, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- Freenation - It started off well, but then it completely stopped production TheSun 03:39, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
January 26, 2007
- John M. Bennett. Problems with this page: Wordart needs a disambiguation page. Pictures should be properly sized and placed. Jameswiese's additions, though well-meaning, should be modified to fit the writing of the page and the general tone required by Wikipedia.
- Celebrity Big Brother 2007 racism controversy - created quickly, and introduction directly copied from Celebrity Big Brother 2007 (UK). Needs a better introduction. Trixovator 22:20, 26 January 2007 (UTC)
January 25, 2007
- Los Angeles News Service - Article needs to be rewritten in a more consise style, with headings and proper sourcing. I've made some attempt to clean it up. There's some personal info in there about the founders. Not sure it's appropriate for the article, but the founder's article was merged with this one some time back. --Lendorien 14:41, 25 January 2007 (UTC)
- Faye Dunaway - Article is really confusing with the many large pictures between relatively little text. It doesn't seem to conform with the usual wiki standard for actress pages either. Furthermore, the pictures seem somewhat... unflattering of the actress so I can't decide whether this is trying to be "funny" or not. Opinions anyone?
- Filter (oil) - Article needs to be cleaned up in formatting and word usage.
- Mystic projection - Seems to be written from premise that everything described (assorted out of body experiences) are true; popular/folk history is treated as true; historical sources are taken out of context/misundersood (e.g. Jewish mystical texts).````ykahn
January 24, 2007
- Romance novel - This article is a little confusing - it has no introduction and kind of just jumps into some bulleted points. I'd clean it up myself but I'm not really qualified to write a good introduction to an established article in this area CredoFromStart 20:21, 24 January 2007 (UTC)
- Bat Boy: The Musical - This article is ridiculously convoluted in its Synopsis section. It jumps in an incredibly confusing and distracting way, and in certain regions it plagiarizes directly from the blurb of the book. And frankly, being an ex-actor in this musical, I frankly don't think I'm objective enough to rewrite this. Also, might want to keep an eye on the Controversy and External Links -- far too many high schools have been advertising in there. Ryoji.kun 04:31, 25 January 2007 (UTC)
January 23, 2007
- Ruby (Egyptian singer) - Name is actually Roubi.
- Is it? Her official website calls her "Ruby" Tearlach 23:09, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
- Psychological warfare- Poorly written, reads like a bad high school paper. Tagged this as suggested on the talk page.
- Dumba - Looks like a vanity page, little encyclopedic content. Needs severe pruning. - Mike Rosoft 16:56, 23 January 2007 (UTC)
- Alex Rackley - reads like a poorly written newspaper article; needs grammar correction and general cleanup. --Matthew K 03:36, 24 January 2007 (UTC)
January 22, 2007
- Green Politics - needs a complete makeover
- Allu Arjun - needs almost complete rewrite - reads like a vanity article at this time. VirtualSteve 10:29, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
- Rose (onomastics) - a complete mess, which is supposed to "disambiguate" hundreds of family and place-names derived from "rose"; some of it is in German; some in Polish; it contains redlinks by the hundred. Can it be made useful? The page was begun by a user who is now indefinitely blocked, so they won't be sorting it out soon. Will anyone else want to, or should it be deleted? SiGarb | Talk 16:28, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
January 21, 2007
- Red Baron 3D Community - It's a long article with quite a bit of POV issues, lots and lots of original research and a lot of the use of the personal pronoun I. I think there's a kernal for a good article there since the Red Baron community has been extraordinarily active, but this article definitely needs help. Unfortunately, I don't know where to start. --Lendorien 19:54, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
- Hazing-Structure is highly erratic, at times appears to speak only of US Fraternity hazing, at times not. If the list of hazing rituals is retained, then there ought to be caveats explaining which cultural milieus they pertain to. The thing deserves to be a scholarly treatment and isn't there yet.--Duke Leto 17:44, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
- Comet (passenger car)—Format is highly unlike encyclopedic content; article reads like a school essay. Tone is highly informal; language is imprecise; descriptors of varieties of names for railcars cited in article are incomplete and sometimes misapplied.
- Cyber-bullying-Badly in need of overhaul in every sense. Needs more valid, verifiable information. Lacks citations, what citations it has relate to single source, which, while valid enough, risks POV. --Zeraeph 13:46, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
- Akkari-Laban dossier - mostly just a very long translation, perhaps a copyvio too? --SLi 18:40, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
- Muraqabah - doesn't use sections, is a guide on meditating or something (possibly shouldn't be in Wikipedia?), I'm not also sure this is WP:N. Maybe someone should nominate it for deletion, but at the very least it needs substantial work. --SLi 19:08, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
January 19, 2007
- Risk society - Doesn't read like a wikipedia article. Possibly copied from somewhere. 87.127.73.65 02:19, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
January 18, 2007
- Nat Tarnopol - Either an unwikified textdump or perhaps a copyvio. AecisBravado 19:33, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
January 17, 2007
- The artical on Drew Brees, New Orleans Quarterback, needed revision. Someone posted inapporiate comments. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.128.195.154 (talk • contribs)
- Multiple articles on philosophical topics contain references to the article Analytic/Anglophone and Continental Philosophy (deleted after Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Analytic/Anglophone and Continental Philosophy) or its re-creation. They probably need rephrasing or removal. See Special:Whatlinkshere/Schism between Analytic and Continental philosophy, Special:Whatlinkshere/Analytic/Anglophone and Continental Philosophy. This is not to say that an article about the differences between these two schools of philosophy should not exist, but it should be started from the scratch by a user who wasn't involved with its previous version. - Mike Rosoft 15:07, 17 January 2007 (UTC)
- Quetta reads more like a travel guide or wikitravel entry than an encyclopedic article. AecisBravado 18:51, 17 January 2007 (UTC)
- Anthony Walker is pretty incoherent, not wikified, and generally a poor article. I'm going to make a start at cleaning it up. DE 21:23, 17 January 2007 (UTC)
- MYMP reads more like an advertisement for the band rather than an informational article. It's nice to know that hey have fans, but it'd be a lot more helpful if the article were wikified. - Superbento 03:30, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
January 16, 2007
- List of collegiate secret societies - this list needs standards to prevent sprawl, see discusion for proposed guidelines. 2afterblue 14:50, 16 January 2007 (UTC)
- Sweet Tooth (Twisted Metal) - this article is badly in need of a rewrite. Tygartl1 02:41, 16 January 2007 (UTC)
- SEIKIMA-II - This needs a huge cleanup. Albums need their own pages and should be removed from band's page. Additional info needs to be given on the band as well, as there is currently no background information there. Doberman Pharaoh 03:27, 16 January 2007 (UTC)
January 14, 2007
- Internet forum - Starts off well, degenerates into a rather primitive, haphazard, style. Needs restructuring. Penagate 11:41, 14 January 2007 (UTC)
January 12, 2007
- Comstock Music Festivals and Comstock Rock need to be fleshed out, especially citing numbers of attendees, organizing the bands by year/festival, and creating more links. User: bmoorewiki 2:52 CST
- Egg in the basket Section "Names" contains a long annoying list of unreferenced names, many of them fakes, insulting, and ethnic slurs. -- 84.190.176.48 19:20, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
- Agreed: it's a breach of various things such as WP:NOR and WP:RS, and I've moved it to the Talk page. It would be fine to restore ones that can be substantiated by reference to reliable sources (e.g. cookery books). Tearlach 00:43, 31 January 2007 (UTC)
January 11, 2007
- European_Union-Russia_Common_Spaces Needs a bit of updating - slightly confused grammar for penultimate section on developments in 2006. Jackiespeel 18:30, 11 January 2007 (UTC) butt
- January Events Needs some tweaking - possibly effects of translation. Jackiespeel 18:50, 11 January 2007 (UTC)
- Interlochen Arts Camp Unorganized and confusing. This page has been nearly destroyed by unreverted vandalisms and POV edits. The list of Notable alumni is especially bad. Interlochen Arts Camp section need Wikifying. S.dedalus 21:33, 11 January 2007 (UTC)
January 10, 2007
- Gordon Lish needs major wikifying for redirect loops and superfluous hyperlinks. Fannish tone suggests notability and refs need checking, and WP:COI issues could be a problem.
January 9, 2007
- Will Smith Personal life section plagued by false statements and non-verifiable information. Possible recurrent vandalism. --Nap16 01:56, 10 January 2007 (UTC)
- Sealand Can some of the text be "moved out of the box": there must be more references to current events than the one I put on the talk page. Jackiespeel 16:46, 9 January 2007 (UTC)
January 8, 2007
- Water cannon - No references. --RedHillian 04:21, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
- BuscaPe - This article looks like an advertisement for the company which is not notable. The article creator works for the company violating Neutral Point of View Seeingfurther 10:04, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
January 5, 2007
- Early IBM disk storage - The article's tone needs improvement. Article refers to the reader, and it recommends doing a calculation in the first paragraph rather than providing data. Voket 23:02, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
- Argan - Most of this reads like somebody's high school term paper. It contains some awkward colloquialisms, and although it has some sources, they aren't all properly cited. Freshyill 14:20, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
- Energizer Bunny - There exists a conflict on who originally created the Energizer Bunny. Wario2006 20:03, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
- David Essex - Need cleanup for NPOV and unencylopedic style. --RedHillian 03:10, 6 January 2007 (UTC)
January 4, 2007
- List of internet beggars - links to pages of varying notability that all ask for money and as such could be considered spam. Also a lot of comments based on personal opinion.
- Special Assessment Tax (mistakenly created at First article) - unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 22:38, 4 January 2007 (UTC)
January 3, 2007
- Yellow Pages - other countries and regions section needs to be cleaned up re. URLs, layout and general content.
January 2, 2007
- Notting Hill - poorly structured and hard to read. Needs internal sectioning. -- Earle Martin [t/c] 16:36, 2 January 2007 (UTC)
- Plan 9 from Outer Space - badly referenced; cluttered images; etc. Generally problematic article. (Ibaranoff24 22:32, 2 January 2007 (UTC))
January 1, 2007
- Zygosity - A mess. Someone has combined three reasonable articles into one strange amalgam, using copy & paste rather than merging histories. This needs someone to right the wrongs who also knows enough of the science to know what they're doing. Grutness...wha? 01:03, 1 January 2007 (UTC)
- Cooperative and others (many here, notably Co-operative economics and Co-operative Federalism/Cooperative federalism mess) - Mixed usage in text within most of those articles (cooperative versus co-operative) and mixed usage between articles makes for confusing in-text links. This would require someone with admin powers to complete some of the needed moves, but otherwise it just needs someone with a lot of time to comb through and correct the spellings to how the article is titled. Gave me a migraine. Buona fortuna! --Rkitko 08:10, 1 January 2007 (UTC)
- Milt Bocek - Designed like a webpage, not a Wikipedia article. Contains little, if any, information regarding its encyclopedic value. Does not cite sources. Don't quite have the time to clean it up properly. Canadian Paul 05:04, 2 January 2007 (UTC)
- I need help in fixing the article Medellin, Colombia. I lost part of the article during editing. I have saved the entire article here but can't seem to get it to stay in the article in its entirety. Help fix this if you can. Thanks in advance. Matt. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sherdmm (talk • contribs) 19:15, 1 January 2007 (UTC) [Unfortunate misunderstanding-related paste of entire article removed - Earle Martin [t/c] 16:34, 2 January 2007 (UTC)]
- Cirrhosis has way too much technical jargon in it to be understandable. Perhaps someone with some knowledge on the subject could make it easier to understand?
December 2006
December 15 - 31
- Gretchen Wilson-The personal life section of the entry jumps around a lot and needs a rewrite for better flow.
- The five pillars puzzle - this article contains a brief discussion of a mechanical puzzle with a diagram, and then consists, er, of a big pile of C++ by User:Orimosenzon (and signed with his name no less). Huh? -- Earle Martin [t/c] 14:44, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
- Art criticism - the article is awful: badly written, non-encyclopedic, and extremely limited in scope. Seems like a topic worthy of some serious attention. 68.165.23.73 01:13, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
- Growth stock - A big old mess of an article on a fairly important investing topic. Needs to be reworked and wikified. "For Dummies" explanations need to be fleshed out with deeper information, while case studies need to be fattened up for us dolts without MBAs. Kajerm 07:13, 29 December 2006 (UTC)
- Imagekind - Originally read like an ad but has made progress, though I think it still needs some work to conform to WP:STYLE. JRHorse 14:23, 29 December 2006 (UTC)
- Immediate Action Rapid Deployment - New article, needs formatting, citations, and wikification. -->|< Shablog 03:10, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
- Cha-cha-cha Single 'History' section collapses into an awkwardly-written description of the basic cha-cha-cha steps. --Yggdrasil 08:21, 28 December 2006 (UTC)
- Comte de Lautreamont This article was totally rewritten in essay style with many mistakes in grammar, tone, etc. In addition, the objective tone was destroyed and added information was unsourced and repetitive.
- Dresden This needs grammar help and some rewriting, particularly in the Statistics section Lcarscad 16:52, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
- Indian National League - I did what I could with it. It needs someone who knows something about politics and political parties in India. Tygartl1 22:38, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
- Babylonian captivity - serious problems with style.
- Fumetti - Although Fumetti are comics which utilise photographs as the storytelling medium, all this page does is list reams and reams of non-notable worthless webcomics. It's a link farm and needs to be cleared out. - hahnchen 18:18, 24 December 2006 (UTC)
- Desperate Housewives has many grammar mistakes, unsourced statements and speculation on future episodes. Season overviews also list many unnecessary details and could be shortened. Sfufan2005 22:10, 23 December 2006 (UTC)
- Ghosthunter has a lot of spelling and grammatical problems. Just needs someone to clean it up thats actually played the game, as many of the issues are in the plot section. Galactor213 00:49, 24 December 2006 (UTC)
- Beet the Vandel Buster has many grammatical errors and has bad organization. Could use major cleanup.
- Colin Moss has a lot of repeating info. Might need some re-organization. Tygartl1 21:17, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- Tti, inc has some pov/advertorial issues, and could do with a rewrite. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 19:09, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- Gregg Underheim has been written by the subject. Needs a pov check. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 00:43, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- Hyperdispensationalism - This article on a Christian doctrine has recently had a lengthy correction posted as a personal note rather than a proper edit. --Yggdrasil 00:14, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- Minnesota Vikings - The "2006" section contains numerous stylistic errors and grade-school level English. --Action Jackson IV 09:45, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- I made style changes to be more consistent with the other sections of the MN Vikings article, but it's my first edit of a WP site, so please feel free to provide feedback.
- List of Half-Life mods - The article was recently AFD'ed, DRV'ed, and AFD'ed again with a keep consensus, on the condition that the article is improved to be more notable, and less of a gratuitous list.
- Celadon (color) - Needs history on Western use, a better hex colour, and alternate meanings removed. Phil.andy.graves 05:07, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
- Richmond High School (Richmond, Indiana) - Alumni listed are not graduates of school; factual cleanup needed.
- Spread of printing - Newish article with long list of cities taken from the German "Meyers Lexicon" of 1892. List for "Germany" therefore has strong POV issues (includes Prague, "Breslau" etc. Budapest is called "Ofen" etc. Creator of article has declined to do anything about it. Needs spelling of names Anglicised, links created & some headings adjusted to NPOV Johnbod 16:12, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
December 1 - 14
- Texas United States House elections, 2006 - This article needs to be brought up to date. --Xerxes855 05:27, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
- Seth Swirsky has been edited by the subject. This has led to some pov issues. The article has been cleaned up, but review by an outsider would be welcome. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 00:10, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
- Radu Duda, Prince of Hohenzollern-Veringen. I have started cleanup but could do with some help and advice. The article does not respect Wikipedia guidelines on Biographies of Living People, neither does it read like an Encyclopaedia entry: it is more like an attempt to list all the possible and imaginable bad things ever written about the subject, who is a public figure. It expands on many minute details about Radu Hohenzollern that are useless and POV, it needs balancing. I started cleanup of the article before tagging it, as the more I advance in the cleanup, the more I saw that the article needs this process. I also see that Stefanp and some of his sockpuppets such as * Carbunar,John Mathis, MihutM have been editing it, so a cleanup is certainly in order. Furthermore, the article has too many references, it litters the text, very many of them in Romanian with no translation, some of them quoting obscure little publications, (whether they are reputable or not is hard to assess), and uses as references unknown people as great experts on the subject. Stefanp and his sock puppets have also edited King Michael of Romania's page in a similar way. The arguments on the Talk pages of both articles are illustrations of what I am writing here.[1]Marina C (2) 13:30, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
- Leg - Messed up and it doesn't really make sense. It's badly written and contains no external links or sources.
- Abd al Hamid Ben Badis - This article is completely messed up, compared to the French and Arabic version of the article. -Escondites 05:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
- Alan Walker (musicologist) - This is a well sourced article that could use some cosmetic formatting improvements. It is currently rated as a 'B' held back from 'GA' only by formatting. Please assist. Alan.ca 10:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
- Jews for Jesus - This article has undergone so many edit wars that it has become a disorienting patchwork. Ancillary sections such as "Litgation" take upwards of 1/4th of the article, and the citation section involves lengthy block quotes that are confusing at best. Djma12 03:06, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
- AMC and Jeep transmissions - Needs heavy wikifying and a major cleanup. --ApolloBoy 00:57, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
- Politics of Vietnam - improper formatting, repetitive, incomplete.
- Big Brothers Big Sisters of America - improper formatting, incomplete, no citations.
- Safety climate - created by WP:AFC request; don't have time to fix it
- SameGame - a bit too casual compared to Wikipedia standards
- Gerhard Buchwald - Minorly notable German doctor and legal campaigner against vaccination. I have wikified the
articlestub, but it's seriously disorganized, and be be NN. —Vanderdecken∴ ∫ξφ 12:59, 6 December 2006 (UTC) - Paul Bettany - long, too few sections, and a long list of awards could be cleaned up/shortened Betaeleven 14:25, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
- The Da Vinci Code (film) - the Differences between film and novel section has been tagged for cleanup since October 2006, but it doesn't appear to have been entered on this page. The list is extremely long and needs some serious work. Betaeleven 14:31, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
- My Parents are Aliens - Specifically the episode synopses. Not all the series are formatted the same way, it's been tagged for non-standard English, and some of the grammar and spelling is quite poor as well. More alarmingly, I found some plagiarism in the characters section, (and replaced it), and I'm concerned that the synopses might contain some as well. RobbieG 16:49, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
- bebop - the Style section is just a giant block of text, needs formatting. --Shock 04:46, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
- Rounds 2 to 9 of 2000 NHL Entry Draft need to be properly formatted. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 13:51, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
- ITV Play - Violates WP:NPOV and WP:NOT#CRYSTAL, but notable enough TV station article not to be PRODded or put up for AfD. The shows section of the article reads like an advertisement. Needs a lot of cleaning up. --tgheretford (talk) 14:22, 3 December 2006 (UTC)
- I went through the article and removed some of the more obvious spam but this article needs someone to cleanup the rest of it and to watch for more spam. --Banana04131 22:04, 3 December 2006 (UTC)
- I have added more of my concerns regarding the article and added templates to the article accordingly. --tgheretford (talk) 09:30, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
- United States Copyright Law - Organizational issues as well as lack of detail on critical components and excessive detail on minor issues; for more info see Talk page. LH 23:10, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
- Parc Nacional de Munchique, short article could use some lengthening or pictures. Ricefountian 22:15, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
- Grendel (band) - not structured, probably needs more info. Peter Vasiljev 04:30, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
- Added infobox. Mansfieldatron 20:21, 3 December 2006 (UTC)
- Sholiyar, newly created article by new user needs some work, to put it generously. ॐ Priyanath 05:04, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
- Samuel Colt - has no structure and makes references to things that are never mentioned. Not very clear to someone unfamiliar with the subject. 70.170.27.119 16:55, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
November 2006
November 15 - 30
- Powersgaming - Looks like a fairly notable gaming group, but most of the contents doesn't seem to be very encyclopaedic. - Mike Rosoft 13:35, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
- Ashe County, North Carolina - General spelling, formatting and syntax problems, someone with local knowledge would be useful. RHB 20:06, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
- Have done some grammatical editing. Still has no citations whatsoever.Monocle1 19:06, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
- Travis S Taylor - Article sounded like fan-speak, I have made some changes to the tone but some sections still lack citations. Metlin 18:51, 28 November 2006 (UTC)
- Ismail Kadare - poor English, needs some copyedit --Angelo 01:43, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
Done my part Dilane 05:38, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
- I've just copyedited the article too, some sections and paragraphs need to be merged, I think some ideas are being repeated several times. RHB 21:41, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
- Multi-agent_system - The article lacks a general description. There should be a long general description of MAS, and a short concrete example (not the other way round, as it is now) --JFromm 13:20, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- Persepolis - A lot of good info here on one of the ancient world's most important cities, but it reads like it was written by someone who spoke a primary language other than English. The introduction is strong, but then it goes downhill. Lots of grammar and punctuation issues and some really weird syntax. Also, zero references. Dppowell 05:37, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- Did some copyediting. Still has issues that I can't fix, mostly due to lack of familiarity with the subject and the fact that it was probably written by someone with English as a 2nd Language. I'm not familiar with the subject so someone else more familiar with ancient persia probably needs to look it over. Also, it needs citations desperately. There's a good start on a solid article here, but it needs more work.--Lendorien 00:46, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
- Metiabruz is an unwikified uncontextualized textdump. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 12:02, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- Thorough copyedit and cleanup, sorted information into sections and put into prose. RHB 16:55, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
- Eye dialect — this article lacks sections, has bad typography, and has too large a quotations:comment ratio. Raifʻhār Doremítzwr 02:30, 25 November 2006 (UTC)
- Bartolo Colon - For a Cy Young Award winner, he sure doesn't have a lot on his page and his infobox doesn't even list the Anaheim Angels, the team she was with when she won the bathroom award. Definitely needs some work. --Mrmaroon25 05:01, 26 November 2006 (UTC)
- She??? You meant he right? Besides that I'll see what I can do with it... Vic226(chat) 09:53, 28 November 2006 (UTC)
- By the way, the infobox lists only his former teams, so naturally the current team is excluded. Nothing wrong with that. And I don't get what you are talking about the bathroom award, since it sounds like vandalism to me. Vic226(chat) 10:03, 28 November 2006 (UTC)
- History of Cuba - Cuban Rebels section has seemingly random information, and needs fluidity. Its kind of a mess, really. G.bargsnaffle 19:42, 24 November 2006 (UTC)
- Chinese language - Many sections are disorganised and do not conform to the language template recommended by the Wikiproject of Languages. Also, subsections are misplaced, such as loanwords, which shouldn't be listed under morphology and the content is quite difficult to read. Another discrepany is when you search for Sinitic languages, it redirects you to the Spoken Chinese entry; however, when you type Chinese languages, it brings you to Chinese language. The section on Chinese characters is still unnecessarily long even though there is already a detailed article on Chinese characters. And the whole entry is just too long, it is 57kb in size, some of the clumsier sections should be rewritten for sub-articles. I do not understand how this article managed to become a featured article before, or maybe it was much better. Please contact me if anyone would like to work together on this Shingrila 05:18, 24 November 2006 (UTC)
- Alice Academy - Information on the article, mostly on the characters are very confusing... -210.213.159.187
- Aureal Semiconductor - Minor punctuation, typo, and grammar issues. At least one "editing comment" appears in the body. Structure could use a cleanup. --Dan Hendricks 02:32, 23 November 2006 (UTC)
- Xine - Needs references for the "DVD Issues" section.
- Forest_School,_Horsham - indiscrimate and redundant listing of everything associated with the school 19:37, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
- Edith Pringle: Aussie pol activist -- PoV pervades article, largely via activist jargon, e.g. "rights" and "progressive" reflect how i'd describe her goals to my allies, but you might use "privileges" and "radical" instead. Excessive use of hdgs suggests desire to shout, perhaps in order to exaggerate significance of her details.
--Jerzy•t 14:03, 21 November 2006 (UTC) - With the slightest change of two or three words (not "progressive" and "rights", though.) this will be a slightly less toned article. It seems fairly factual and straightforward, though. Editing now.Resonanteye
- Rashied Ali - Currently a mess of unsourced, unformatted articles, including one in French (???). I didn't want to revert back to a stub, and I suspect there may some useful information in there, but I don't have time to read through a dozen pages to find it.
- Reverting back to last clean version, as it's a blatant copyright violation of http://www.bigmagic.com/bios/rashied.htm Patstuart(talk)(contribs) 04:35, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
- Paravas - I have been editing this page for style and general cleanup. This page also needs citations and some consolidation of information that is repeated in the article in different places. I am continuing to work on this article but I think it will benefit from multiple hands.Dalassa 13:24, 20 November 2006 (UTC)
- CA Scanline- I just wrote this article but since I'm new in Wikipedia I would very much appreciate it if somebody could help me edit this aticle to improve it since I don't think it is okay yet.
- I went in and got the wording as neutral as possible. I had to cut many entire sentences out that sounded like an ad-it could still use sources, but it's a lot easier on the eyes now.Resonanteye 09:06, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
- Finished more clean-up. This article should be taken out of the backlog. Dilane 05:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- Local area network - The referencing needs to be done better. There are references at the bottom but no in-text citation is provided.
- Lindenholzhausen - Article looks like it was translated from the German wiki. Could use grammar copyediting and further translation from German. More info on talk page. -Wayne Miller 01:23, 19 November 2006 (UTC)
- Done a copyedit, needs someone with local knowledge really. The motorway names (B 451 etc) need context for the non German reader too. RHB 17:12, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
- Nightclub venues - This article reads like an essay. It is in need of citations to back up the content. — RJH (talk) 23:39, 17 November 2006 (UTC)
- Hornsby Girls' High School - Reads like a school magazine --Princess Tiswas 13:15, 17 November 2006 (UTC)
- Saket (Delhi) - Needs pruning, wikifying, copyedit, etc. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 13:45, 17 November 2006 (UTC)
- Will see what I can do with it. Emperor Gestahl 16:06, 6 January 2007 (UTC)
- Aimo Lahti - This does not need any major "clean up" but I would appreciate some copyediting with the sentences as with my English skills it's bit sad. --Pudeo (Talk) 18:58, 16 November 2006 (UTC)
- Hope that helped, missing a lot of "the" haha Resonanteye 09:09, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
- Pot Noodle - Reads like advertising and appears to violate WP:CORP--Princess Tiswas 17:26, 16 November 2006 (UTC)
- Heinrich_Schliemann Nothing too serious here, just needs a stylistic edit to read more like an encyclopedia entry and less like a magazine.
November 1 - 14
- St._Bartholomew's_School - Needs general spelling and grammar cleanup. Some of the text is also perhaps too trivial and irrelevant for inclusion on Wikipedia. I-hunter 16:09, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
SkierRMH 11:32, 18 November 2006 (UTC)
- Park - For such a common topic, the article seems to jump around with many small sections and doesn't present much information. It also seems to be poorly worded, particularly in the "national park" section. I cleaned up a bit, but it needs some work. Jdoty 02:12, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
- Mountain View High School (Oregon) requires sufficient cleanup. Mgarnes2 03:39, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
- Locus of control is grammatically poor (the plural of locus is loci), incorrectly uses terminology (says that people *are* internal/external loci, when instead it should be that they *have* internal/external loci), doesn't cite it's sources (source that women tend to have external loci more than men?), and needs major paragraph reformatting. Tarayani 02:50, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
- Garden Gnome Liberation Front is extremely confusing, makes no clear distinction between fact and fiction, is littered with grammatical/spelling mistakes, and is generally very... surreal. User:Woodenbuddha has been making good-faith attempts to clean the article up, but it still needs a lot of help from anyone even remotely familiar with the subject matter. -ryand 05:28, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
- History of IBM needs a rewrite, for the reasons I give on its talk page. Thomas Ash 16:29, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
- The Escape Club needs to be reformatted and cleaned up, with the musical artist sidebar template added, and the discography reformatted as per other music groups. N Norder 18:00, 11 November 2006
- Scaler needs a more informative outlook. Stot 20:13, 11 November 2006
- ZigBee is starting to read like a bunch of ad copy for vendors. --MountainLogic 20:14, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
- Done enough commercial cleaning; should be good for another three months. Dilane 05:34, 14 November 2006 (UTC)
- Risa_Kudo appears to have been machine-translated from Japanese. I started to clean up the grammar but some sentences are gibberish. Needs someone who can read the Japanese original so that the resulting fixes are meaningful. --Wintersweet 20:29, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
- Malaric not a horrible mess but not nearly adequate Devotchka 03:05, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Reta_Shaw this article had a problem with its lay-out, a standard filmography would be appropriate --194.78.199.56 15:37, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Made a start. needs more. Cheers, :) Dlohcierekim 22:08, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Tried to clean up a little more, hope this helps. It would be nice to get an image on the page, too. Adam 01:12, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
- Jedediah Smith This is a mess all of the information is pretty much just made up to be a joke, the article talks about hot pockets, saquatches and wizards. Please fix. 68.207.117.147 04:41, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
- Article seems to have been vandalized; I have fixed what I could find. Can the rest of the contents - most of which has been added in this series of edits - be verified? - Mike Rosoft 13:04, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
- Mizu ni Sumu Hana is just a confusing mess. I tried to fix it myself but since I don't know anything about the series, I cannot do it accurately. What does "Rikka is hospitalized but when she finally leaves the hospital she can't move on from the trauma because she is continuously attacked in several bizarre ways involving water" mean?? Even if I can fix the grammar I can't really explain what the series is about. Devotchka 01:28, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
- Dope Reach Squad has way to big of a picture and is very messy. It was just created as I found it under the "new" article special page. Also, because I do not know much about Bulgarian hip-hop, I cannot confirm the validity of this article. Streetsabre 08:14, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
- England national basketball team - This page has some problems. There are several places with poor grammar, and some of it seems to have been directly copied. -- Discboy 02:35, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
- Henry Ward Beecher - The article is just a continuous stream of quotes from sources, and is therefore extremely disjointed. Anchoress 03:54, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
- Sport in Canada - Information just thrown together. It has some good information but needs a bit of rewritting.
- Origins of Santa Claus - This article seems to need cleanup for several reasons. See its discussion page for more information.
- Contemporary Art - although listed as a "project" this article has not been improved recently, it is still poorly organized, lacks any citations, is missing much essential information, and has a glut of irrelevant details. This is a true shame, as this is a topic on which many people have expert opinions.
- Montreal Lacrosse Club - The first ever organized lacrosse team and the ones responsible for making the first written rules of lacrosse deserve a better article. Needs some general cleanup including just standard stuff.
- Category of being - As a major topic in metaphysics, perhaps the biggest, it strikes me how poor this page is. It is clearly a mish-mash of different writers using inconsistent terminology (the poor quality is even reflected in the article's title: the article is called "category of being," even though the bolded word in the opening sentence is "categories of being." Before I added it, searching for "ontological scheme" did not even redirect there. I think an expert should rewrite the whole thing, starting off by giving the goal (to create a minimal, exhaustive, and exclusive list of all the fundamental kinds (no universal negative categories, or disjunctive categories) of things that exist) - i.e. a category has to "earn" a place on the list by proving itself to be irreducible to other categories, or capable of being eliminated entirely. In the second part, s/he should then list the categories that have been argued to exist (be generous in this part, since reductive/eliminative arguments will come next). And in the third part, s/he should discuss arguments for/against certain categories e.g. Hume argued that space and time don't "deserve" a category on the list because they are only constructs of the human mind.
- Mechanics lien - This article could use some section headings to differentiate the subject matter of each paragraph.
- Resveratrol - The subject of this article has been frontpage news world wide as a result of the release of results from a 'fat mice' experiment at Harvard (Dr Sinclair) suggesting that there is a possible escape from the generally undesirable consequences (liver, heart, arterial, metabolic disease, including diabetes mellitus) of over indulgence. This article does not do WP justice in that it is full of suggestive allusions, including to this (these) compound(s)'s use in the diet supplement industry, particulalry the unusual US version of it due to Congress having 'saved' the vitamin industry in the early '90s. Improvement can't be limited to textual review as some of the technical material also requires review. Given the news coverage, improvement is somewhat urgent. See Talk. ww 17:19, 2 November 2006 (UTC)
- The three articles herd behavior, herding instinct and herd need cleaned up and, likely, merged into two. There is already a (lightly attended) merge discussion going on relative to herd behavior and herding instinct, at Talk:Herd behavior. Then, just recently, I discovered a third article (arguably better written) at herd. We could really use a few more eyes on this with ideas on how to straighten it out. N2e 04:27, 1 November 2006 (UTC)
October 2006
October 15 - 30
- Tecmo Super Bowl- Some grammatical errors. Needs expanded info on SNES version, which I added but can't contribute much for.
- Chemical castration - some of the factual evidence seems off.
- List of PlayStation 1 games - needs references for every game listed. Each game is also missing the entries for it's developer, publisher, and release date. Ceros 02:59, 30 October 2006 (UTC)
- Word Of Life - this article is not written in the expected tone of an encyclopedia article. The information seems to have a POV, and some poor grammar (I didn't know the past tense of add was adden!) It also needs to be linked with other Wikipedia articles (I've only had time to internally links a few things). 5ptcalvinistMy friends call me "Cal"
- Driving on the left or right - this article has little sourcing, citing, etc. It is a little confusing in some places --FivePointCalvinist (My Friends Call me 'Cal') 22:05, 29 October 2006 (UTC)
- History of the United States (1988–present) - This article needs more external sourcing. It also has some formatting errors (including overlap at the bottom of the page). This article should also include a little more information about this time period (demographic trends, economic trends, important issues, etc ((which can possibly become separate articles in the future)) ) 5ptcalvinist T.u.L.i.P
- Era & ERA - (1st is organized w/ emphasis on etymology, usage, and near-obsolete calendar systems; 2nd is Dab) Era (geology) (which probably should be Geological era) has its lk buried in Era & is unmentioned on ERA. General disfunctionality & probable WP:MOS violations.Jerzy•t
- Investor relations. At a quick glance, this looks like it was created by people from http://www.zangani.com. I removed the plug for their site, but the article itself is very much in need of cleanup. Jun-Dai 23:56, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
- Podiatrist Introduction is not bad, but the rest of the article needs a lot of work. The sections for the various countries are particularly hard to follow and repetitive, and have no wiki markup. The list of conditions(?) also seems unnecessary, although some items could be incorporated into a more informative section on the work of a Podiatrist. I also get the feeling, from many parts of the article, that the text has just been copied from another source. —anskas 23:05, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
- The Departed - Plot (summary) section is overly bloated and needed to be trimmed down. The article also contains too much original research; claims are not backed by verifiable sources. --Madchester 21:46, 24 October 2006 (UTC)
- Sun D'Or - the Israeli charter airline needs cleaning. The infobox needs a logo, and the main body text needs making sense of. Flymeoutofhere 10:50, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
- Jack Dawson needs some fixing. It's very long, contains several punctuation errors and is poorly formatted, especially towards the end. UnusualHero 07:28, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
- List of experiments from Lilo & Stitch - at 82KB it's too big. Some of the descriptions could be trimmed and maybe the whole thing could be formatted better. There's also a ton of images on it - some of which aren't properly tagged and are really blurry. --Jtalledo (talk) 11:19, 23 October 2006 (UTC)
- Globalization - it seriously harms the information in the article.
Couldn't find a version to revert to without losing significant amounts of new content, but cleaned up by hand. Seraphimblade 01:47, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
- Fabolous - is a drivelling fan rant at the moment. Aecis Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984. 10:36, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
- Futures exchange - is extremely confusing; I've taken macroeconomics (and garnered a 4.0, harrumph), always read the newspaper, and was totally confused about this article. It needs a good one-over by an economist.
- Medical technologist - needs to be proof read and NPOV'd. The writing style is very non-encyclopedic. 68.238.2.60 01:57, 18 October 2006 (UTC)
- Some proof reading/npov work done. Reformatting and further editing still required. Kedlav 08:31, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
- Religion and politics - I started this a while ago when the Christianity and politics page was created: it now needs some tidying up or possibly separate pages for particular religions. Jackiespeel 17:12, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
- New Mexico Rail Runner - Has been tagged. All the information here reads like it was taken from the Rail Runner website. Anyone with helpful information, please modify. Drumlineramos 05:39, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
- Meadowlands Racetrack - Stakes Schedule section has to be properly formatted. Even so, not sure if just a list of stakes races should be used instead, as is the case in other horse racing racetrack articles. JRHorse 14:36, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
October 1 - 14
- St. Johnsbury Academy - Contains personal references to staff and facilities. No or unclear elaboration in certain areas of article.
Requires rewritting Rajrajmarley 19:28, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
- Igarassu - has been tagged for cleanup since November 17, 2005. It still needs a lot of work, so I'm bringing it up here, so that someone who knows the city may have a go at cleaning this up. I'm too naive. 19:46, 12 October 2006 (UTC)
- I've done significant editing to give it better context based on info from other articles and what little I've been able to glean fromt he net. I think it works better now, though it still needs sources. --Lendorien 01:00, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
- Inocente de Ti - looks like copyvio. Not encyclopedic. Very long plot synopsis, long list of credits and very badly formatted. Mona-Lynn 06:38, 11 October 2006 (UTC)
- Harry Baron(60-something Israeli sculptor) - wikify; prosify; rescale photos; probable self promotion, so check notability; format reeks of being prepared for another medium, so do further copyvio checks.Jerzy•t
- This article needs help. I worked on prosing out the list in the first section and added an artist infobox. The artist style section is full of buzzwords and makes little sense. It reads like something from a resume. Sources needed as well as more details to make it worth anything. --Lendorien 22:23, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- José Rizal(Philippine nationalist activist, writer, martyr) - de-PoV, esp. de-hagiographify; condense or split; state early and clearly what his notability is, beyond the (non-verified (and AFAI could stand to read, inexplicable) worship of him by Ph. or Malay nationalists.Jerzy•t
- This article has been extensively edited since it was placed here. The issues may have been resolved, but it's hard to tell. See talk page for details. --Lendorien 02:42, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
September 2006
- A1 Team USA - The article reads as if it was written by a pr company. I've edited the Background Story section [1], but the rest of the article also needs a lot of attention. Aecis I'm too busy acting like I'm not naive 10:51, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
- System Accident - This article needs to be totally rewritten. shotwell 02:38, 1 October 2006 (UTC)
- Portuguese Rink Hockey Cup - Is the rest of the table needed? There seems not much point in it, when only the winners have been recorded - Weebiloobil 16:47, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
- Bakersfield, California - This article is long and rambling, and probably needs some careful excision. --Ghewgill 23:59, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
- Odysseus - The article is poorly formatted, confusingly worded, incorrectly capitalized, and missing many important aspects of Odysseus as per his involvement in the Iliad. --Wikifried 01:35, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
- Peter Bruff article needs references. Currently has none. --MPW 03:12, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
- Infantry tactics may not represent a neutral worldview. Some assertions are not supported with detailed references. The introduction is vague and needs to be expanded.
- King Piccolo Saga - It's inconsistent in terms of grammar, tense, and style, and reads as though a lot of it was taken from a random fan site on the internet. 68.39.249.165 07:26, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
- Kasha - The content of the article is out of order and messy. It could use an editor's eye. --Ahhwhereami 17:33, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
- Article has been much improved. It simply needs sources now. I changed the tag to the sources tag and added citation req in the article. --Lendorien 19:54, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Sara Payne: A Mother's Story. This is mainly the product of one author, with minor inputs from a couple of others. It is full of POV and reads like a school essay rather than an article. It needs a good copyeditor to take it and shake it. Fiddle Faddle 21:44, 22 September 2006 (UTC)
- I have attempted to do some cleanup work on this. It needs to be pared down drastically, but I've never read the book so I don't feel comfortable editing anything out or writing a new synopsis. I added categories and the novel infobox and did a bit of organizational edting, but it still needs loads of work. --Lendorien 21:25, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Communication - Very poorly written, and may need expert attention on the subject.
- There appears to be active discussion on this subject, but they lack guidance of how to organize the article. I think it would really help if someone knowledgable in general article organization could step in and offer advice. --Lendorien 19:57, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Goblin - Truly one of the more lamentable articles. It lacks structure, and seems very *er* wrong. Sjc 04:38, 20 September 2006 (UTC)
- Doesn't seem as bad now, though it definately needs sourcing. --Lendorien 19:35, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Folk high school - especially the France part is in very bad shape, almost incomprehensible. --Espoo 00:24, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
- Richard Sorge - disorganized, confusing, and poorly written User:Msvarley
- Dien Bien Phu (film) - Much of the article written by someone(s) whose native language is not English. Lots of poor grammar and hard to understand passages. Axeman89 20:47, 16 September 2006 (UTC)
- Have been working to Englishify this article, but it's still way too long. Guidance, anyone? --Icenine378 22:13, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Rights of Man The article is extremely cluttered and lacking of any sources. It could be divided into subsections and some parts removed or merged into other wikipedia articles.
- Took a first pass, there needs to be more done though. Sunspeck 06:10, 22 September 2006 (UTC)
- Magnetic moment - There's a problem here and elsewhere with "magnetic poles," which are discussed as if they were magnetic monopoles. The magnetic moment is first defined as the pole strength times the separation. The correct definition (current times area) is given later in the article, but the earlier reference to poles is both confusing and wrong. The initial discussion of diamagnetism on this page is also confusing. --Bjheiden, 11:25 PM (EDT), 13 September 2006
- Gaudiya Vaishnavism - General structure and details needed. Ekantik 00:45, 12 September 2006 (UTC2)
- Incubus (demon) - As it stands now, this article is somewhat of a mess. Certainly there shouldn't be so many see also links, nor that bulleted list. ♫ Melodia Chaconne ♫ 19:26, 6 September 2006 (UTC)
- Did what I could. Rewrote part. Made bullet points into paragraphs. Removed extraneous links. If it's not germane, it's not germane. If in text, no need in links section. Incorporated and expanded some internal links into paragraph. Still needs proofing. Needs sources. :) Dlohcierekim 16:32, 8 September 2006 (UTC)
- Attempted more editing. Moved sectiosn about a bit, but the article lacks details and is in serious need of sourcing. The "origin of the Legend" section probably could be culled, being mostly POV speculation. --Lendorien 20:12, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
- Egyptian burial - Poor grammar in several sections, and the section on The Indestructibles completely neglects the precession of the equinoxes, although the full article on the indestructibles is a bit more informative.
- Delta Upsilon - Not scholarly at all, trivial paragraphs, needs to be seriously worked on. Reads like it was copied from a fraternity brochure.
- Thugaboo - Needs proper categorizing, more info, etc. --TonyM キタ━( °∀° )━ッ!! 14:11, 2 September 2006 (UTC)
August 2006
- John Stafford (US politician)(born abt 1940, military lawyer)- No sense, no chrono flow, excessive admiration, PoV about how he almost stopped Vietnam War & unverifiable & PoV "faithful Catholic". Continue wikification.Jerzy•t
- Much cleanup has been done since first posted. I did some more wiki work, npov work here and there, as well as sourced a couple items. It still needs sourcing overall. Implementing an infobox would be good too, but I'm not sure of which one to use. --Lendorien 20:09, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
- List of female private detective characters - Either clean up or rename the page, leaving out the "private". See talk. <KF> 20:54, 30 August 2006 (UTC)
- I made a suggestion for this. See talk. ParticularlyEvil 05:19, 11 September 2006 (UTC)
- Heim (onomastics) I have never encountered a messier article in my entire time here and Ive been here a while. I don't even know where to start on this one. Tobyk777 05:29, 27 August 2006 (UTC)
- Apparently this article was subjected to possible deletion with the decision being keep as it also serves as a disambig page. Best solution is to contact some of the editors involved in Onomastics to deal with it. The average user will be unable to help without making it worse. Unless they seek help and guidance on what to do to fix it. --Lendorien 21:00, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
- Scary Movie - the description of the plot is way too long, more of a book report summary, and much longer than necessary. JPG-GR 02:37, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
- Haven't seen the movie myself, but part of the problem is the movie has a very weak storyline that serves as a vehicle for various gags. I'm not sure how to edit this without more or less cutting most of it out completely. Help? --Lendorien 21:05, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
- Has had some editing done to shorten the plot synopsis. Trivia section could probably use some culling. --Lendorien 21:11, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- Haven't seen the movie myself, but part of the problem is the movie has a very weak storyline that serves as a vehicle for various gags. I'm not sure how to edit this without more or less cutting most of it out completely. Help? --Lendorien 21:05, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
- Magnetosphere particle motion - has a discursive conversational physics textbook style, not an encyclopedia article style. -dmmaus 01:22, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
- Floating point - this article is very scrappy and poorly organized. -- Earle Martin [t/c] 13:34, 14 August 2006 (UTC)
- Ballad of a Thin Man (a Bob Dylan song): I've edited this page quite a bit, but it still needs lots of citations. Mr. Wood 13:21, 12 August 2006 (UTC)
- Spring Waltz - Needs to be wikified. --TonyM キタ━( °∀° )━ッ!! 17:29, 12 August 2006 (UTC)
- This article smacks of having original research. There are a lot of subjective comments in it(Especially in Exploring Fantasy of Love, Spring and Island) that need to be weeded out. Also, the introduction needs to be expanded to include a very brief overview of what the series covers. The quote at the beginning should probably be removed as well as using it as an intro is not appropriate for an encyclopedic article. I'd do it, but I'm lazy right now. :D --Lendorien 16:56, 21 February 2007 (UTC)
- Applecrest Farm Orchards - up for deletion, needs an encyclopediac tone. íslenska hurikein #12 (samtal) 00:41, 7 August 2006 (UTC)
- Wari' - Tone & level of detail are inconsistent (& frequently odd); crucial information confusing or missing; no citations. Details of recommended cleanup are posted on the Talk page. --Vcrs 08:29, 3 August 2006 (UTC)
- Appears much improved, but still needs work. Espeically sources, some tone work and wikifying. --Lendorien 18:01, 20 February 2007 (UTC)
July 2006
- Vril - unencyclopedic, messy, confusing.
- Once the factual dispute is finished, then it would be appropriate to clean up. Otherwise, it may just get messed up again. Adam 01:22, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
- Pawnbroker - very jumbled up and confusing. The mention of "Lombard" is not explained until the "Symbol" section, which itself is a disorganised mess. -- Earle Martin [t/c] 22:57, 29 July 2006 (UTC)
- Intro is too long. Article still needs reorganizing.
--Lendorien 14:41, 25 January 2007 (UTC)
- I worked on it some today. ObtuseAngle 03:08, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
- Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi - This article is too long and in places badly written - perhaps it should be split into several articles
- Mohammad Nabi Mohammadi - Needs some work by someone knowledgable in Afghani history and politics. --Lendorien unknown error (UTC)
- The twelve pyramids - This page is an organizational mess with subjective use of language. It desperately needs to be cleaned up and rewritten. The boxes with the single links in them simply have to go. I don't know where to begin on editing this. I do not have the background to do a good job here. Expert attention needed. -- Lendorien & Timwi 14:08, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
- Assiti Shards series has NOR issues as well as overall poor-quality writing and strikes me as fancruft, particularly the "The Assiti mechanism literary vehicle" section. -- Earle Martin [t/c] 11:51, 22 July 2006 (UTC)
- Superman in popular music is an almost incomprehensible mess, with no organization or flow.Rhindle The Red 12:43, 19 July 2006 (UTC)
- Elections in 2004 this page does not conform to the other ways in which the other election pages have been compiled a lot of work is required on this page to bring it up to scratch--Lucy-marie 12:50, 19 July 2006 (UTC)
- Squirrel Boy is written in a poor, informal tone. Also, there is a specific quotes section; although it isn't (and probably won't) popular enough to have a Wikiquote section, it is still inappropriate for the article. 72.145.230.87 16:31, 18 July 2006 (UTC)
- Quote section has been culled, but the character listing still has a fairly informal tone. --Lendorien 00:37, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
- Pancharatna Kritis - Needs to be moved to Wikisource, or rewritten in a more encyclopedic style. --Siva 20:04, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
- Waste minimisation- bit long and drawn out, needs to be wikified and improved.
- Self-undescriptive? ;) Jackiespeel 21:52, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
- Article has spelling and grammar issues, confusing, lack of context, uses lots of big words that explain little and just generally needs help. Needs someone whith knowledge of the subject to look it over. It currently has 8 tags on it. Ouch. --Lendorien 22:58, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Self-undescriptive? ;) Jackiespeel 21:52, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
- Cook Islands Maori does not conform to the standards of other language articles; talk about what Ethnologue describes as multiple languages. Mo-Al 17:06, 14 July 2006 (UTC)
- Teaching English as a Foreign Language -- No category, smells like SPAM, needs attention and expansion... also wikify to other see also topics.
- Polish Catholic Church -- article appears to be a machine assisted translation of the Polish Wikipedia page, and need significant attention from someone who speaks the lanugage, or is aware of its context.
- This page was definately pulled from the Polish page. I've done what I can to fix the intro and make sense of things, but most of the page is a mess beyond a non-expert or non-polish speaker's help. Does anyone know any polish speakers we could ask who could go through it and fix the translation? As it stands it's utterly incoherant. --Lendorien 20:41, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- A Polish wikipedian helped out here on February 25th, 2007 and did some translation. I normalized his translation a bit. He did not do all of the text, but a significant part was taken care of. Some additional translation of the portions near the end after the fall of communism would be useful to round out the article as it currently ends in 1951. --Lendorien 23:15, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- This page was definately pulled from the Polish page. I've done what I can to fix the intro and make sense of things, but most of the page is a mess beyond a non-expert or non-polish speaker's help. Does anyone know any polish speakers we could ask who could go through it and fix the translation? As it stands it's utterly incoherant. --Lendorien 20:41, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Nomad: This entry gives the impression that nomadism and pastoralism are the same thing. Pastoralism or animal husbandry is a subsistence method, and nomadism is not, although the term is sometimes used as shorthand for pastoralism. However, any society which does not remain sedentary for a significant length of time is considered nomadic. This includes most hunter-gatherers, but the entry makes no indication of this. Also there is no logical organization of the information that is presented. An expert's contribution would be best.--LC | Talk 22:52, 9 July 2006 (UTC)
- This article still needs expert attention. It's an important topic but it looks and read like a mess. --Lendorien 20:09, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Sukyo Mahikari religious article needs thorough cleanup to make encyclopedic (particularly, removal of extensive self-referential editorial comments). Tearlach 16:04, 9 July 2006 (UTC)
- Some work done since originally posted here. Still has neutrality tag. Needs expert attention and review. --Lendorien 20:00, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Indian English - article takes a very patronising attitude to Indian English and a lot of bad English is being passed off as Indian English. Needs a lot of attention. - Cribananda 01:00, 6 July 2006 (UTC)
- The Bronze Ring - Unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 21:02, 2 July 2006 (UTC)
- The story plot section needs some work. --Lendorien 15:51, 24 January 2007 (UTC)
June 2006
- Grand Valley Football - Needs wikilinks and general cleaning up--Tiresais 14:15, 30 June 2006 (UTC)
- Gelou - a bit more context to this semi-mythical figure (most countries seem to have them). Jackiespeel 16:17, 29 June 2006 (UTC)
- I tried to fix this a bit, but I lack the knowledge to put it into better context. It needs more context to help it make more sense to the layman. --Lendorien 02:18, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Banasthali Vidyapith - Marking as an article which reads like an advertisement, particularly since it is -- it's based (with apparent permission) off the school's promotional brochure. Also, it has no links and is missing much of the standard information (like quality information on academic programs) one would expect from a university article. Likely needs someone from India or who is personally familiar with the institution to tackle it. - Beginning 01:02, 28 June 2006 (UTC)
- This issue remains outstanding. Few corrections have been made. --Lendorien 00:37, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Knights of the Dinner Table - Much of this article was plagiarized from the bios in the comics (possibly quotation marks are due). Mo-Al 04:45, 25 June 2006 (UTC)
- Issue may still be outstanding. It's hard to tell. See talk page. --Lendorien 00:35, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
- Big Brother Australia series 1 - Needs an encyclopedic tone and less cliché. Ste4k 11:09, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
- Big Brother Australia series 3 - Needs reformatting per discussion. Ste4k 11:21, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
- Mini chopper - This one is written in a very odd style. Mo-Al 22:12, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
- This article looks to have been somewhat worked over, but it still needs work. The intro doesn't sumerize the article well at all and the rest of the organization is a bit dodgey. --Lendorien 16:15, 25 January 2007 (UTC)
- Hierotheos the Thesmothete - Needs to be wikified. --Dakart 05:20, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
- The problems with this article go beyound needing wiki links. It's taken from the 1913 Catholic encyclopedia and reads like an essay. It's also extremely long and contains no headings. It also deviates from the topic matter and appears to have become an article on Christianity in Athens rather than Hierotheos. Desperately needs attention from someone with an interest or knowledge of the subject. --Lendorien 19:50, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
- I've deleted tons of irrelevant material, but it still reads more like a history of the bishops of Athens rather than specifically about Hierotheos. In my opinion most of the rest should go too, but that would take it to nearly nothing, and that's scary for me as a relatively inexperienced editor. I think I'm going to leave the rest to someone else. --edi 04:35, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
- Fisherian runaway - This article is somewhat confusing and could also use some citations.
- Attempted to clean up a bit. Still needs sources and some of the text would be hard for the layman to understand. I expanded the intro to help a bit and put in propper cats, but biology is not my forte. --Lendorien 19:46, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
- Royal Guards (Thailand) - This article is a total mess and barely in English. I fixed up the introduction with a major rewrite, but the rest of the article needs cleanup from a refereed source. Decadencecavy 04:55, 16 June 2006 (UTC)
- Did some more clean-up, editing to the intro and minor formatting. The article has been rewritten, but now it consists mostly of regimental unit lists that are longer than the short article itself. Not sure how to fix this, but I'd suggest cutting out the regimental stuff completely. --Lendorien 22:29, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
- Lalitaditya Muktapida - This article needs just some general editing (i.e. correction of spelling/grammatical errors) and also perhaps more research (Only one page out of one history book is cited).
- Apparently this has had some editing to improve it, but it's not entirely thematically coherant at the moment. It needs to be reviewed by someone with a background in the subject to straighten things out. --Lendorien 19:20, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
May 2006
- Martha Washingtonians is badly in need of some expert input and serious restructuring and needs more sources. - Sajun777 11:17, 30 May 2006 (UTC)
- Lyn Duff -Unencyclopedic style, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 08:52, 28 May 2006 (UTC)
- Maharishi Mahesh Yogi - Due to edits of Peterklutz (talk · contribs), the article looks like promotional of transcendental meditation. - Mike Rosoft 12:43, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
- Bishopric of Bordeaux - Copied from (public domain) Catholic Encyclopedia, outdated information. - Mike Rosoft 12:54, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
- Post-structuralism Article not coherent --Mikkel Bue Lykkegaard 21:22, 25 May 2006 (UTC)
- Post structuralism is not coherent. EiE 12:39, 29 January 2007 (UTC)